'Whomp!' June 6, 2011 "Heavy Petting"

Stupid Mr Whoopsie Name

Alecxant wrote: »

I really dig how you drew the Jewish dudes. Maybe some more curly hair, and somethin with the noses though, just to clarify more. Clever writing too, I chuckled.

I think they're fine as is. Anything further--especially "something with the noses" would start to fall into the realm of caricature, ergo generally offensive. They way they're represented now, it's clear they are Jewish fella's and it keeps the butt of the joke on Ronnie.

And as always, your expressions make me giddy--I'm loving the sixth panel on that comic. This is a solid comic, made many laughs escape my sound chamber.

Alecxant

Stupid Mister Whoopsie Name wrote: »

Alecxant wrote: »

I really dig how you drew the Jewish dudes. Maybe some more curly hair, and somethin with the noses though, just to clarify more. Clever writing too, I chuckled.

I think they're fine as is. Anything further--especially "something with the noses" would start to fall into the realm of caricature, ergo generally offensive. They way they're represented now, it's clear they are Jewish fella's and it keeps the butt of the joke on Ronnie.

I didn't even consider that. My suggestion would definitely water down the comics focus. I don't consider things like that as much as I should, thanks for pointing that out.

rfilyaw

Alecxant wrote: »

Stupid Mister Whoopsie Name wrote: »

Alecxant wrote: »

I really dig how you drew the Jewish dudes. Maybe some more curly hair, and somethin with the noses though, just to clarify more. Clever writing too, I chuckled.

I think they're fine as is. Anything further--especially "something with the noses" would start to fall into the realm of caricature, ergo generally offensive. They way they're represented now, it's clear they are Jewish fella's and it keeps the butt of the joke on Ronnie.

I didn't even consider that. My suggestion would definitely water down the comics focus. I don't consider things like that as much as I should, thanks for pointing that out.

Haha, yeah. I wasn't sure if you were joking, but I very much appreciate all input. Thanks guys!

Paradise

Something I just noticed: what's with the Hitler suit's pecs in panel three? They're squeezed too close together.

rfilyaw

Paradise wrote: »

Something I just noticed: what's with the Hitler suit's pecs in panel three? They're squeezed too close together.

Um, ffffffffuuuuuuuuuu?

It's funny, because before I started cartooning, I always did big muscular superhero guys. That must have squeezed out of me on accident.

bwanie

more importabtly, what is happening to your face in panel 5 of the chinese food one?

is that a soucer, your beard , a really large pacifier? maybe just food?

help a brother out here!

rfilyaw

bwanie wrote: »

more importabtly, what is happening to your face in panel 5 of the chinese food one?

is that a soucer, your beard , a really large pacifier? maybe just food?

help a brother out here!

his mouth is really wide open and it's rice flying into it... i know, i hated that comic and i almost didn't post it. now i'm sad about it again.

rfilyaw

Loosely based on a real life story from my friend Erixson from Minecraft (SE++ server.)

bwanie

hehe, i think alot of kids woke up one time or another with one of their parents hogging their present.

rfilyaw

Eh. I'm still alive.

Here's two comics.

A Dabble Of Thelonius

Oh my goodness that last panel.

Yes. Yesssss.

Sad burro is always what I want.

rfilyaw

A Dabble Of Thelonius wrote: »

Sad burro is always what I want.

This is what I'm wishing I'd titled it, now

rfilyaw

Here come another two. I usually don't post if I think one is kinda crappy until I have two crappy ones.

rfilyaw

rfilyaw

Linespider5

I like Motivation Man. So upstanding, and so...very wrong.

rfilyaw

I just gotta keep on keepin' on.

bwanie

ronnie, why are you manifesting your desire to get stuff done as the skinhead reject son of Majin Bibidi?

rfilyaw

I have no idea.

Maybe it's because he's the exact opposite of me in every way. It's like when Fat Buu became angry enough that he expelled all of his evil into Skinny Buu. So the best course of action is for me to reabsorb Motivation Dude and more perfectly integrate him into my body so that I can become a cartooning supermachine.

bwanie

i knew it!

rfilyaw

I'm starting to worry that my comics have become really mediocre. I think I only had a few good jokes, now I don't have any more good jokes. My comic reads more like a TV Sitcom, but I like to think without the laugh track.

Mustang

I love laugh tracks, and pointing them out to people so as to ruin any enjoyment they may have been deriving from the show in question.

To be honest though Ronnie, motivation guy is really creepy, not funny creepy, but actually creepy.

The Lovely Bastard

I disagree

He is hilariously creepy to me

I want more motivation guy

in fact, ditch Ronnie

and make it the Motivation guy comic

rfilyaw

I'm already halfway there! "Whomp! Minus Ronnie" is GOOOOOOOOOOO

The Lovely Bastard

actually you should make a comic about how bad of an idea it would be to have a comic just about motivation guy

it would be neat

make it like a billion panels

getting more and more awkward and weird

I wanna feel like I need a shower after I read it

and to go to confession

rfilyaw

that's... actually a good idea

The Lovely Bastard

I am full of good ideas

do everything I say and you'll make it to the big times

Mustang

I could've been big time. If only I had known that "computer" was going to be such a hit, I would've bought like a bajillion shares.

rfilyaw

In a few minutes, I'll be done with tomorrow's strip. It has M.Dude in it too. I'll post it here first.

The Lovely Bastard

mustang it ain't too late

I will take everyone to the big times

rfilyaw

Here it is.

The Lovely Bastard

ronnie I love you bro

but

where's the joke

rfilyaw

well, there goes my mood until the next comic comes out

I figured it was pretty obvious. he can dish it out but he can't take it. *shrug*

edit: what would you suggest? though I can't change it now

The Lovely Bastard

if your intention was that he couldn't take, I'd have had him dish out a couple things

and then have ronnie do something incredibly weak back

and have him straight up bawl like a baby

rfilyaw

I just didn't put enough thought into it. I think minecraft is making me lazy.

The Lovely Bastard

Stop being lazy

I am your new editor

I want a yuck-filled comic on my desk by friday

AND BRING ME PICTURES OF SPIDER-MAN

rfilyaw

Oh, actually, here was my original idea, and maybe you'll like it better. I can still use it later.

Frame 1: M.Dude looks at his watch. "I'm late!"
Frames 2-5 he's running dramatically through scenes.
Frame 6: He's at home, breathing heavy, his back against the wall as he peeks around the corner at Ronnie who is playing DS
Frame 7: He takes a deep breath to stop panting
Frame 8: He runs into the room
Frame 9: He punches Ronnie in the arm really hard
Frames 10-12: Punchline

The Lovely Bastard

That could work

If the punchline is how incredibly satisfied he is with a job well done

just a big shit eating grin as ronnie just has no idea what is going on

rfilyaw

Yeah, it was something like that

The Lovely Bastard

indeed I love that