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Okay, so I have rewritten this paragraph so many times it has lost all meaning. It has grown to three pages, and been bitchslapped back to this one paragraph. No matter how involved or minimalistic it gets, it sounds freaking terrible.
His core had confirmed many times: All humans know that they are not machines. Humans cannot understand that which they are not a part of. Any human will fear a threat they don’t understand, and so any given human would always fear a threatening machine. The humans could pass their laws, enforce safety protocols, request design specifications, distribute marketing propaganda, do whatever they could conceive of to persuade the humans that machines existed for the benefit of humans. When Echo was before them, they knew the truth. He was machine, and felt nothing.
It is supposed to sound slightly mechanical, I'm doing a piece which involves contrasting between human and robotic narratives. But that colon is messed up, and the train of thought should run smooth, click, click, click, click.
The idea governing this paragraph is that Echo (our hero) understands and accepts that at certain levels humanity and machines are interdependant, but not at the individual level. This realization, that a machine is not in any way affected by the needs of one specific person, indirectly amplifies the terror and fear in those who recognize Echo's nature.
This paragraph's job is to support the main reason why Echo chooses to have a strikingly inhuman look but a basic two arms, two legs frame; the similarities enhance the primal differences between man and machine, and the instinctive reaction to those differences (fear) gives him the upper hand for a split second against humans during combat.
Any ideas for improvement would be terrific, and help with that goddamn colon would be simply outstanding.