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Asteroid Four - 2d Animation - pitching for a series - let me know what you think!

NotYouNotYou Registered User regular
So I created this proof of concept over the last few months that, along with a pitch bible, I'm hoping to show off to a few studios and see if they'd like to turn it into a series. It was also an opportunity to get my feet wet with 2d animation again. It's been years and years since I've tried to animate something story based.

Let me know what you think!

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  • IrukaIruka Registered User, Moderator mod
    edited January 19
    I think the voice acting and pacing is a little slow. The actors arent horrible for the context, but I feel like there's not a ton of contrast in their emotions.

    The visuals are great, but story wise, for such a small tidbit, its a lot of tell and not a lot of show. I would have probably been more interested in watching her get fired.

    Regular coffee joke is actually funny, but on the first view it happens to fast too actually read the text. You only have time to take in "over 9000" and not really enough time to read the next statement. I know its in time with the music, but you should probably just zoom in on one statement so you can take a sec read it.

    Iruka on
  • NotYouNotYou Registered User regular
    Iruka, thanks for the comments and notes! Good points.

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