Collaborative Writing

Captain K

I guess you guys missed the part where I said "a dozen hours...later". I meant to imply that Janine would have undergone a lot of medical testing after her head trauma--she's long since missed her class for the day.

Orikaeshigitae

Captain K wrote:

I guess you guys missed the part where I said "a dozen hours...later". I meant to imply that Janine would have undergone a lot of medical testing after her head trauma--she's long since missed her class for the day.

I caught that.

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mcc

Okay. Sorry about all that. A friend of mine suddenly moved to indianapolis and today was just sort of left a wash.

Here's my suggestion as to how to explain how the continuity of this works.

Jenny has a class at 7:30 AM, the class that uses the camera. She also has a class at (around) 8:00 PM. Maybe it's astronomy or something. Jon, by coincidence, is in both of these classes. This is why "a dozen hours later", after all these tests, she was just getting to a class, and why she there met someone from her photography class. I'm choosing not to elaborate on what the latter class was. I'm instead skipping to the next morning, when she is once again waking up late for her 7:30 PM-- awoken by a helpful (maybe suspiciously helpful? you decide) Jon, who offers to walk her to class-- and, once again, before she can get to her 7:30, something interrupts and prevents her. What a coincidence.

Orikaeshigitae

Sweet. Remaining queue, not including those who have already posted:

Adrenaline
Henroid
ceres
JetBlackCentre
Sam
Ham

I still don't know about the whole half-hour time limit. What do you guys think?

Hamurabi

I guess I'll sign up, too.

Raijin Quickfoot

What the hizzy. I'll do it. Shoot me a PM when my time arrives.

I can't do a half hour time limit though. I'm at work quite a bit.

Orikaeshigitae

Raijin Quickfoot wrote:

What the hizzy. I'll do it. Shoot me a PM when my time arrives.

I can't do a half hour time limit though. I'm at work quite a bit.

If you turn this into "Cocks Cocks Dicks LOL", I'm punching you in the head.

And shaving your cats.

Raijin Quickfoot

Orikaeshigitae wrote:

Raijin Quickfoot wrote:

What the hizzy. I'll do it. Shoot me a PM when my time arrives.

I can't do a half hour time limit though. I'm at work quite a bit.

If you turn this into "Cocks Cocks Dicks LOL", I'm punching you in the head.

And shaving your cats.

What is hilarious, is I never do that. I think you are confusing me with someone else. First of all, I never use lol, and I only use cocks and dicks in the proper context.

ceres

Orikaeshigitae wrote:

Sweet. Remaining queue, not including those who have already posted:

Adrenaline
Henroid
ceres
JetBlackCentre
Sam
Ham

I still don't know about the whole half-hour time limit. What do you guys think?

A half hour is a little too short, I think. I'd give it at LEAST two. Not everyone can reresh all day.

So I'm now waiting for Adren and Henroid to post? Also, I'd like to request (if this hasn't been mentioned already) that each person PM the next on the list to let them know it's their turn.

Orikaeshigitae

ceres wrote:

Orikaeshigitae wrote:

Sweet. Remaining queue, not including those who have already posted:

Adrenaline
Henroid
ceres
JetBlackCentre
Sam
Ham

I still don't know about the whole half-hour time limit. What do you guys think?

A half hour is a little too short, I think. I'd give it at LEAST two. Not everyone can reresh all day.

So I'm now waiting for Adren and Henroid to post? Also, I'd like to request (if this hasn't been mentioned already) that each person PM the next on the list to let them know it's their turn.

This is a very, very good idea.

Also, I''m closing signups.

Raijin Quickfoot

If someone wants my spot they can have it. Or, just take me off of the list. Afte I got home I realized how much other writing I have to do over the next couple of days, and can't commit to this. sorry.

Orikaeshigitae

So, two point five-hour time limit starting now.

Raijin's spot has been opened.

Captain K

mcc wrote:

It was too bad that not only was she going to walk in with a dubious note from the medical center and begging special forgiveness for an absence, she was going to walk in fifteen minutes late with a dubious note from the medical center and begging special forgiveness for an absence.

I can't figure this out. Am I reading it wrong, or does it say "not only was she going to do X, she was going to do X"?

Henroid

I, like Adren, am passing. Depending on how this continues, I don't know if I'll be able to contribute. It seems to be going in a direction I have no experience with.

If I can, I'll try to go off what ceres writes. So consider this more of a "switching places" post.

Orikaeshigitae

Captain K wrote:

mcc wrote:

It was too bad that not only was she going to walk in with a dubious note from the medical center and begging special forgiveness for an absence, she was going to walk in fifteen minutes late with a dubious note from the medical center and begging special forgiveness for an absence.

I can't figure this out. Am I reading it wrong, or does it say "not only was she going to do X, she was going to do X"?

It's more like "not only was she going to do x, she was going to do x fifteen minutes late".

Orikaeshigitae

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Captain K

Orikaeshigitae wrote:

Captain K wrote:

mcc wrote:

It was too bad that not only was she going to walk in with a dubious note from the medical center and begging special forgiveness for an absence, she was going to walk in fifteen minutes late with a dubious note from the medical center and begging special forgiveness for an absence.

I can't figure this out. Am I reading it wrong, or does it say "not only was she going to do X, she was going to do X"?

It's more like "not only was she going to do x, she was going to do x fifteen minutes late".

...Oh.

The way you wrote it hurts my brain--my eyes glazed over "fifteen minutes late" each of the (literally) five times I read that sentence trying to understand it.. I'm familiar with that construction, but I think it's completely inappropriate to do it when there's that many words involved. You could so easily have written "not only was she going to do X, she was going to do it fifteen minutes late".

Henroid

That guy hasn't checked his PM yet. I say we just move on down the list.

Orikaeshigitae

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Ham
Sam
JetBlackCentre

Hamurabi

Please tell me I didn't add too much emo to the story.

ceres

Hamurabi wrote:

Please tell me I didn't add too much emo to the story.

I don't know about that.. it doesn't feel to me like it had an awful lot to do with what came before it, though.

That could well just be me.

Orikaeshigitae

I told him to feel free to write.

Guess I'm next, but I have to leave for tonight.

Hm. Ceres, unless one of the two remaining people in the queue show up, you can take my spot tonight if you want.

ceres

Orikaeshigitae wrote:

I told him to feel free to write.

Guess I'm next, but I have to leave for tonight.

Hm. Ceres, unless one of the two remaining people in the queue show up, you can take my spot tonight if you want.

Alright.. I guess I could I do that.

Captain K

ceres wrote:

Hamurabi wrote:

Please tell me I didn't add too much emo to the story.

I don't know about that.. it doesn't feel to me like it had an awful lot to do with what came before it, though.

That could well just be me.

Holy shit, Ham, did you have Linkin Park playing when you wrote that?

"monkeys"

"Fuck this asshole"

I don't know how much we're going to criticize each other's bits, but that seems a bit livejournal to me. It's going to be depressing writing about somebody that depressed.

Hamurabi

Captain K wrote:

ceres wrote:

Hamurabi wrote:

Please tell me I didn't add too much emo to the story.

I don't know about that.. it doesn't feel to me like it had an awful lot to do with what came before it, though.

That could well just be me.

Holy shit, Ham, did you have Linkin Park playing when you wrote that?

"monkeys"

"Fuck this asshole"

I don't know how much we're going to criticize each other's bits, but that seems a bit livejournal to me. It's going to be depressing writing about somebody that depressed.

Well, you guys hadn't really defined the character at all before then, though perhaps the hopeless pessimist portrait I painted wasn't the best choice.

Henroid

Hamurabi wrote:

Captain K wrote:

ceres wrote:

Hamurabi wrote:

Please tell me I didn't add too much emo to the story.

I don't know about that.. it doesn't feel to me like it had an awful lot to do with what came before it, though.

That could well just be me.

Holy shit, Ham, did you have Linkin Park playing when you wrote that?

"monkeys"

"Fuck this asshole"

I don't know how much we're going to criticize each other's bits, but that seems a bit livejournal to me. It's going to be depressing writing about somebody that depressed.

Well, you guys hadn't really defined the character at all before then, though perhaps the hopeless pessimist portrait I painted wasn't the best choice.

I think it was more of the focus of the current line of events going on.

Houk

Unfortunately, I'm gonna hafta pull out on this too. I just had to add another summer class due to an oversight, and I have two midterms this week, with another next week. Running out of time and energy for everything I'm trying to get done. Probably won't be around the boards much in general for a while. Anyway, it's a fun project and if you do it again later this summer when I have some more time/energy I'd love to give it another go.

ceres

Orikae, I don't think I'm going to do anything with this tonight. I just went, and it's your turn anyway. You should get to take it.

Orikaeshigitae

ceres wrote:

Orikae, I don't think I'm going to do anything with this tonight. I just went, and it's your turn anyway. You should get to take it.

Sigh.


Fiiiiiiiiiiiiiiine.


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Orikaeshigitae

P-p-p-poasted.

I wanted to write a longer piece, but didn't quite know how to implement the ideas I had.

I'll think about it until my next turn.

Remaining queue (probably made a mistake or two):

mcc
Cass
Captain K
Henroid
ceres
JetBlackCentre
Sam
Hamurabi
David Byrne

mcc

Oh... kay... so her 7:30 is a math class now then?

What class is the camera for at this point, and do we know what the "hours later" class is at these point?

Also: Did Janine just accidentally steal a bike??? ^_^;

Just wondering ^_^ ... will have my part posted in a moment

Orikaeshigitae

I lllllllike it!


K brought up a good point during CS:S: We should decide on a more specific character for Janine.

I know I don't want to write an emo, pessimistic film student.

I think that we should definitely get a few things straight in our heads;

1) her class schedule.

2) her character sketch

3) Jon's chracter sketch

4) the shadowy guy

5) the camera and its purpose.

Captain K

Count me out from now on. I thought this would be something I would enjoy, but I realize now that it's not.

Hope it turns out well.

Henroid

Captain K wrote:

Count me out from now on. I thought this would be something I would enjoy, but I realize now that it's not.

Hope it turns out well.

That's it, I'm pulling the trump card.

Hamurabi

Is this group effort falling apart?

Henroid

Hamurabi wrote:

Is this group effort falling apart?

I have no idea what is going on.

Orikaeshigitae

I've been gone for a while. Henroid, you can go next if you want to. After that, it's open season as far as I'm concerned. Post placeholders in the thread for your entry.

Henroid

I'll whip something up.

Henroid

Whipped, and beaten. Like a red-headed step-child.

Edit - The story truely died, we all have to admit that. A lot of us ended up dropping from this project. I think what needs to happen is that we need to try to start over, and this time come to some sort of agreement on the theme of the story we're going for.

Zsetrek

Henroid wrote:

Whipped, and beaten. Like a red-headed step-child.

Edit - The story truely died, we all have to admit that. A lot of us ended up dropping from this project. I think what needs to happen is that we need to try to start over, and this time come to some sort of agreement on the theme of the story we're going for.

If you guys can get a decent character sketch up, and basic plot idea going, then I'd like to be part of the next stab.