I like "smooth". I'm imagining a particular type of scar, the kind that's flush against the skin and would feel indistinguishable from normal flesh to the fingers, yet is clearly visible to the eye. I also think the word makes the sentence flow better, descriptive value aside.

There’s a smooth white scar across Elena’s hip that seems to glow underwater. (what do you think, should I cut "smooth" in that one?) I love this sentence. It makes me want to follow her down into the water and find out more. But yes, defnitely cut "smooth". It muddles up the image in my mind. Also, sorry, but I can't help myself: Roger carries himself with drunk grace as he tries to balance his weight on the top layer of snow. He smokes like a pro. And sometimes, the more he reflects on a memory, the less he recalls what actually happened.

I like "smooth". I'm imagining a particular type of scar, the kind that's flush against the skin and would feel indistinguishable from normal flesh to the fingers, yet is clearly visible to the eye. I also think the word makes the sentence flow better, descriptive value aside. Yes, this is the type of scar I thought of too. I think it works. I wasn't too blunt about what I said in that critique, right?

spcmn went from this: to this so fast.

Ok that was mean. I'm sorry spiff.

God I cant wait until I'm 45 and can pull off a beard like that. Fucking badass.

You're always going to look like this in my mind

spcmn went from this: to this so fast. The resemblance is striking.

I hate you.

Is that really you?

It's really one of us.

>= (

Ooh unlucky man.

IT WAS SQUEE'S TIARA!

I'm tempted to browse there on my iphone to see this.

You should. Completely worth it would click link again A+

New background thanks!

And the one from my most recent story... There’s a smooth white scar across Elena’s hip that seems to glow underwater. (what do you think, should I cut "smooth" in that one?) nope! i think it's fine.

Just to wade in and say I think it should stay. Smooth.

You should. Completely worth it would click link again A+ I didn't know a pinky could bend like that.

Chipping in on the scar thing - I like the word smooth there. My ex-girlfriend had a scar from keyhole surgery just to the inside of her hip - it was raised and very smooth. That Sandman graphic novel is going in the basket for when I get some money in, and American Gods too. Thanks for the recommendations.

What's wrong with wearing old ratty Converse? And my tshirt is tight because I'm 50 lbs overweight, not because I'm sad. Also, I have a huge scar on my knee (fell off the school bus onto some gravel in an attempt to get home and play my NES faster). It's much smoother than the surrounding skin. Kind of like smooth melted plastic.

I have hideous lumpy scars on both elbows. Are they the result of childhood falls, or of being riveted to a chair for an interrogation? You decide.

Ruzkin I read that chapter on your blog and shit yeah I'd like to read the rest. Changed quite a lot from the opening I read a few months ago. Has anyone else read Neverwhere? It's my first Gaiman book and I'm blown away. Wondering which of his books to get next. And has any writer ever looked more like you'd imagine them than that guy? If you don't hate comics, it's hard to go wrong with Sandman. I recently re-read and reviewed his entire Sandman saga in a 10-part series for Weird Tales. Gaiman himself was nice enough to link to it from his blog a few times, which was cool. It holds up as every bit the masterpiece I thought it was when I first read it oh-so-many years ago. EDIT: Nebbermind, sounds like you're already on board (though I'd steer you away from Endless Nights. It's great, but it's a short story collection that doesn't really give you a sense for what made Sandman so special).

Whee, thanks guys. I wasn't expecting nearly that many replies. I think I'll leave the "smooth" in for now... at least until I can see what my group thinks in forty minutes (egh, I hope it isn't too painful). Way to go, spiff: the poetry made me snort very loudly and now the people sitting by me in the computer lab keep shooting me weird looks. And yeah, Munacra's totally the scene-iest scenester you'll ever meet (wait, are "scene" and "emo" synonyms these days? I lost track of all these terms once I finished high school. Though I didn't really understand them that well back then, either....)