Naki Draws

nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
edited November 2011 in Artist's Corner
It's been a long while since I posted anything, but I'm back to share my latest works.

Lately, I've been working on some comics for the Orange County Star Wars Society. We're only three pages in, but I'm reasonably happy with it so far.

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I'll be posting some non-fan stuff next week after the holiday. Later!

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    you're using way too much lighting effects above your outlines.

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  • KendeathwalkerKendeathwalker Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    you're using way too much lighting effects above your outlines.

    what?

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  • ZombiemamboZombiemambo Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    you're using way too much lighting effects above your outlines.

    what?

    he said YOU'RE USING WAY TOO MUCH LIGHTING EFFECTS ABOVE YOUR OUTLINES

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    my bad, I meant this:

    dcguideoneffects.jpg

    In nearly every panel, naki's got some white soft-edged shape on top of the line art muddying things up.

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  • NibCromNibCrom Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    I agree with ManonvonSuperock. You can use "special effects" in Photoshop, etc., but they need to be purposeful and tasteful. I think you could use the technique to highlight focal points of the panels, but right now it's too much. Some of your shading looks really good, especially on the Mon Cal. Don't obstruct it with too much haze! :)

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    I like the cut of your jib and the way you meticulously type out the entirety of my screen name, capitalization and all.

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  • winter_combat_knightwinter_combat_knight Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    ManonvonSuperock it was probably a 'copy and paste job' :)

    Arts good. Explore angles a little more.

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  • NibCromNibCrom Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    Yeah, it was a copy and paste job. But I know who Manon is. :)

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    I feel so cheapened.

    to get back on topic,

    @dude
    You need to work on facial expressions as well.

    You've got two shown: bored with an open mouth and bored with a closed mouth.

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    @mano
    The concerns regarding the lighting effects are duely noted, however I disagree with you on this point. The general effect I was going for was something similar to that of an interrogation scene - harsh lighting. Probably not the best execution, so I will note it as something to keep an eye on.

    As for the expressions - I completely agree. Faces have been my weakness for some time now. I'm going to make it a point to work on this in the upcoming pages.

    Thanks all for the C&C!

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    you just need to be more selective with it, you're doing it on:

    the cover
    page 1- panels 1, 2, 7
    page 2- panels 1, 3, 5, 6, 8
    page 3- panels 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7


    those include assorted interior and exterior shots. I don't think interrogation room is the feel you're trying to achieve for "in a peaceful valley" (1,1), "middle of a desert" (1,7), or "on a grassy knoll" (2,3).

    As for the expressions, you should take a couple of your characters, and draw an assortment of facial expressions for them. don't worry about inking and coloring, just post them here as you do it.

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    Haha, fair nuff! I shall tone it down as I go on.

    Also, some faces -
    facesw.jpg

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
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    -Lighting effects toned waaaaaaay down (actually, I don't think I used any on this page)
    -Experimenting with more camera angles
    -A non-bored expression?

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  • NibCromNibCrom Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    I think this is much improved. A couple of things:

    Is the third panel supposed to be stairs/ramp? The way the leg is positioned, it looks like he just slipped.

    Are they sitting on top of each other with the one guy looking out between the guy's legs? I'm all for unique seating positions in cars/vehicles, but I don't buy that one at all.

    Is all of the purple supposed to be night sky? No stars?

    Any reason for the brown gutter? I'm fine with it, I'm just curious.

    The less haze is much improved. Continue to work on facial expressions/body language. People should have some idea of what is going on in the comic without even reading it.

    Keep it up!

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    Thanks for the crits/comments, NibCrom.

    Yeah, the third panel is a ramp. I see what you mean with him looking like he's slipping.

    Here's how the cockpit lines up from a side view.
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    Probably not the best camera angle for the shot in retrospect, but I was trying to avoid static side views and the like.

    Not sure what you mean by a brown gutter. The purple is the sky. Laziness prevailed when it came to stars. :D

    The next couple pages should give me some good expression practice, but I did promise some non-Star Wars stuff. So that will be coming next...

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  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    edited September 2009
    On your first image, I really like the look you have going on with the typography... but the placement is horrible! You can't clearly read what it says...

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  • ProspicienceProspicience The Raven King DenvemoloradoRegistered User regular
    edited September 2009
    On your first image, I really like the look you have going on with the typography... but the placement is horrible! You can't clearly read what it says...

    /signed
    That and I can't put a finger on it exactly but something about the panel layout just seems very "meh" to me. Most likely that the first 16 panels are all exaclty the same size/layout. Try varying it up a bit? I realize you're introducing all the sith and jedi and whatnot, but the beginning is probably one of the most important parts to catch your audience.

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    As promised, an original by me -
    snowninja.jpg

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
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    A red ninja to go with my blue ninja.

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    stop drawing bored faces goddammit. I want orgasmic, perturbed, contemplative, yelling, crying, laughing uncontrollably, somewhat indecisive, etc.

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    Aaaaaaaaa! I so knew you were going to say that! ::sob:: I just can't do it, Mano!

    Any recommended reading that may help? I know you learn by doing, but dammnit some of those books are good.

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  • OrikaeshigitaeOrikaeshigitae Registered User, ClubPA regular
    edited September 2009
    Scott Mcloud's Making Comics has a good section on how the face works mechanically, and various expressions. It's a good resource overall.

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    Do you mean Understanding Comics? I can't find one called Making Comics.

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  • NakedZerglingNakedZergling A more apocalyptic post apocalypse Portland OregonRegistered User regular
    edited September 2009
    Nope He means Making Comics...storytelling secrets of comics, manga and graphic novels by Scott McCloud..
    Its good

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    Ah, found it. Thanks!

    Edit - Also found one called "Making Faces." Does anybody know if that's worth picking up?

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    Page 5 of Exiles.

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  • MustangMustang Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    That little title squabble is uneccesary and confusing, i'd cut it. Also the little floating droid-ball isn't apparent enough, took me a little while to figure out it was talking instead of Suffurious......not really keen on that name either.

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited September 2009
    Droid ball I can change. :) I do agree with the title thing, but... I don't write the comic...so.... /innocent

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  • CheerfulBearCheerfulBear Registered User
    edited September 2009
    Oh no, Suffurious and Bruticus? You can do better than this.

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited October 2009
    Been awhile - No, I haven't given up! You can't scare me away that easily! ;)

    Getting ready to move again, so I don't have much to show, but I've been trying to loosen up with my art and be a bit more "painterly" with it.

    spiritcave.jpg

    I know it's just a thumbnail, but I was rather pleased with it for having only put thirty minutes in.

    Edit -
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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited November 2009
    I took the above thumbnail and did a full painting based on it.

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  • mullymully Registered User regular
    edited November 2009
    that is pretty well done, i really love the colours and the lights are abundant without being overwhelming; i also really think you did a great job on the left hand side with the light hitting the flat second tier of rock. your candles on that side, however, are confusing -- they look like ice candles, or like theyre transparent.

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited November 2009
    Ooo, good catch, Mully. Thanks! Candles are fixed.

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  • JohnTWMJohnTWM Registered User regular
    edited November 2009
    Also, you have at least 3 separate "verticals". The figure gives one indication of where up should be, the stalactites(gmites?) give another, and the candle's flame give a third. The stalactites and the figure are pretty close, but something is wrong, and I think it might be a difference in the z axis (depth) rather than the x or y, that is making it hard to pin down. The candles however are significantly different than the other two.

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited November 2009
    JohnTWM wrote: »
    Also, you have at least 3 separate "verticals". The figure gives one indication of where up should be, the stalactites(gmites?)
    geobonertits.jpg

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited November 2009
    Thanks Mano. I took your advice about consistent verticals and threw down some guide lines this time around.

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    It wasn't supposed to look like a blue Iron Man, it just kind of did...

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited November 2009
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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited November 2009
    A portrait for my D&D character (Tiefling Sorcerer) -

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  • nakirushnakirush Registered User regular
    edited December 2009
    Testing a color scheme, lettering/word balloons, and panels for nothing in particular. Just trying to get better at comic layouts.

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    EDIT: The writing is horrendous, I know. I are not write good. :(

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  • valerycevaleryce Registered User
    edited December 2009
    nakirush wrote: »
    A portrait for my D&D character (Tiefling Sorcerer) -

    rylanc.jpg

    Man, I love your tifeling. If you have any time to go back and change this, try going back to his elbow on the right- its squished kinda funny. Maybe add a tail or some fangs? The more infernal the better. :D Also DnD Is super awesome.

    As for your new comic-

    This guy is drowning, right? Your colors and ESPECIALLY your values aren't dramatic. Look what happens when it turns monochrome:

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    There's almost no contrast, if there were no lines and I was colorblind I wouldn't be able to tell what was happening. If he's almost drowning, maybe make it more dramatic with more dramatic values? Don't go overboard, but a little more wouldn't hurt either especially in the 'homg I'm drowning' panels.

    Keep up the good work! <3

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