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frogsarecool
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Hey, it seemed like a good idea.
Comments from women are especially appreciated.
Also, too many pictures? Should I remove some?
http://www.okcupid.com/profile/kimchi_taco
Comments from women are especially appreciated.
Also, too many pictures? Should I remove some?
http://www.okcupid.com/profile/kimchi_taco
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I'm a straight guy, so my opinion is probably flawed, but I think there's enough interesting stuff on your profile to pique interest of people in general. You come off as a funny and critical kind of guy, but no so critical that no one can ever do anything right for you. I guess that's important.
The person reading this is part of people too remember, your goal is to come off as inoffensive as possible.
Actually tell us what you are up to on Friday night. It's nice to have a laugh but it also gives the impression that you aren't up to anything. Tell them about fighting crime and then tell them what else you do.
Also you haven't really mentioned much about your friends, it gives a slight vibe as a loner.
Finally put a picture in where you smile!
Satans..... hints.....
Modified a few things based on your comments. I honestly thought that was the best picture of me I had; Do I really look like a stoner? I don't really have a big toothy smile... It's mostly a picture thing really. I can't smile on command, so I have relatively few pictures of that. It's usually that little half-grin that's in most of my pictures. I'm also not very photogenic in general. I have a few great pictures with my last girlfriend (go figure, happiness makes me smile uncontrollably) but I'm pretty sure pictures hugging a girl are a no-no. Anyway, do you think one of the other pictures would be a better primary? I hotornotted the current primary and it did pretty well. I know how important the first picture is so this is a pretty big deal.
The main thing I'm going for is to be different. I've read so many profiles of both men and women and everyone writes the same thing: "I like to go out, but also stay in, my hobbies are hanging out with friends and watching tv, I like music and movies and tv....." I tried to avoid everything that people always say, but I guess I need a little bit of it in there to certify my normalness.
Thanks again, anything else?
I think the 4th and last one are neat. Then again, I'm a guy so maybe girls are going to vehemently disagree with me.
*e: on second thought, that last one has someone else in it, maybe people will be confused who you are.
No, you should do exactly this.
As for the photos, if you can, crop her out and stick that in.
That photo makes you look a bit tired, I mean it's not a bad photo, but you are selling yourself, everyone wants to see someone with a great big smile it makes them seem far more approachable.
The changes are good. The other reason I suggested to put in friends though is that you can get a good feel for a person from the friends they keep.
Satans..... hints.....
I don't mean to insult you, of course, I'm just trying to say what I think so that you can understand what other girls might be thinking when they look at your profile. Lose that picture, as soon as possible. You can do way better. Try having a friend or relative snap a quick shot of you when you're not looking, if you're camera-shy. Even if you're not looking right at the camera, a more natural look can help you.
Is there a reason that a lot of your sentences have an extra space before the period? They look like this . That's probably nitpicking, but it just strikes me as either not being very careful, or being a place where you recently deleted something. Makes me wonder what you decided you didn't want people to know.
I'd drop the phrase "kinda covered this already" under "what you're doing with your life" because there's a lot of new interesting information in that section, and having that phrase there is going to make people just skim it. Your "Favorites" section is actually pretty good.
Your "six things" section is boring and uninventive. Even if you are low-maintenance, come up with something you really like and put it there. Instead of "my family / my friends" talk a little bit about your family and friends. Something like being an only child or having a sister can be a conversation starter.
I'd add some options to your "message me if" section. "If you can teach me something cool" is neat, but she might not know anything to teach you, so think about some other reasons someone might want to talk to you.
Good luck.
i mean go to a good hair cutting place and get a nice style cut into it. so many guys get long hair, then just let it do what it wants so they look like stoners or gross metal-heads. both are turn offs in general to most people who are not also stoners or metal-heads.
get some shape cut into the darn thing, and make sure you shave over your lip, you're almost rocking a pseudo-pedostache in most of the shots where i can see your face clearly.
other than that, if i were single and lived close to you i'd message you, so i think you're doing just fine.
The dude (heh) can have some demands out of who he wants to meet too. He's looking for people who he can connect with. If someone doesn't want to contact him because they are so insecure about themselves/know absolutely nothing of interest then I think that isn't a loss for him.
/$.02
Lose the first pic with the chopsticks, that's not a good look for you. Neither is the hat picture. The rest a pretty okay and show good body/facial expressions (def keep the waterfall pic, that is an excellent "fabio" look.)
I don't know if you know this but in every one of your pics your head is tilted a little bit to the left. Try to take some pics that are more varied in what you are doing, maybe a candid where you are doing something for your work/hobbies (I think a pic of you writing/sketching would look really cool).
I know writing about yourself is hard because you want to find that line between too wordy wall-o-text and spartan one word answers. Try to expand your 6 things and your "message me if" for sure. Otherwise it's obvious you are trying to be unique without pretension :^:
I'd try to shuffle them around so the snowboard one or the one with you leaning on a pillar is the first photo to show. Both are good photos, you're actually smiling in them, you don't look particularly stoned, and your hair looks less wild, and while there's nothing wrong with wild hair (the metal one isn't bad either, really), I think it's pretty safe to say that wild hair upfront would put off more ladies than the hint of wild hair left to discover. Of course this all depends on who you're after, but a lot of people WILL pass over a profile based on the first photo, it is important as a decision making criteria. Generally.
I'm not going to critique the rest of it, because I know pictures and how people tend to look at them, but I don't know you or what you're looking for. I will say that the 'You should message me if' section is a great place for silliness. Of course, I think EVERYWHERE is a great place for silliness, especially on the okcupid, but it's not for everyone.
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This is the absolute last thing you want to do. Nothing screams "douche" like a guy and his guitar.
Also, lose the moustache and work on your grammar.
EDIT: And looking at your other photos, find another facial expression and stop tilting your head like a confused canine.
And the tilting my head thing.... I looked at a bunch of other pictures again and I'm doing it in almost every one! I had no idea.
I have since gotten a slightly cleaner looking haircut (still long) and I am usually clean shaven. The problem is that most of those pictures were taken during the last year (good) but during the last year I have been traveling around Asia, which does not always lend itself to daily grooming(bad).
I guess I just need to get some better pictures.
Made a few more changes and switched the pictures around.
Thanks again, this has been eye-opening so far.
not if he is actually a musician and it shows him playing with his friends making music. also, to guys it may scream big douche, but to girls who like music and musicians it is a sexy thing.
Satans..... hints.....
I think you should take the people saying get a haircut with a grain of salt. I met my girlfriend of 8 years, wife of 2, on the internet, when my hair looked *exactly* like yours, even a bit longer. I'm 6'5 too, go figure. That said, it's true that the majority of girls like conventional looking guys with neat, boring hair. I think your philosophy is correct and you should be true to yourself. If you try to make yourself look conventional, then you'll be fishing in the bigger pool of girls who like boring looking guys with crew cuts, but they're often the less interesting girls, and you're then also competing against the pool of guys who are similarly boring and therefore fit in better with that pool. So stick with the pics that you think best represent you.
Also, I don't think you really look like a stoner. Maybe in a couple of pics, but when you sort of squint in all of them, it makes you realize, "oh, he's not a stoner, he just squints in pictures."
sure, go ahead.
not really that big of a deal since the advice can, in most cases, apply to both of you.
http://www.okcupid.com/profile/McGibs/
lol fair enough, I guess I only skimmed most of the posts telling him to cut it off. Long haired men get defensive about our Samson locks!
edit: McGibs is an even braver man for posting his profile from his main!
all I can say is that if you two guys can't find Mrs. Right with these profiles, something's wrong with the world, because I'm 5 times less interesting and ambitious and I had no trouble bagging my choice of wimmens from personals.
but this could be me being biased because i am a reader.
you also say you're half decent at creative writing, but your profile needs tightening up language-wise.
stuff like this
should be more like "I enjoy all kinds of music, but have a soft spot for instrumental and folk music." there are a couple chunks in there like that.
and change your 'message me if' section, or at least add to it. i like the procrastinating bit (minus the odd typo), but not so much the other part, you've never even met these girls, and even though it isn't true, when a girl messages you, she wants to feel special. that makes it sound like you're willing to get elbow deep in any girl that comes your way. :winky:
i like your pictures though, you look friendly and approachable, and i enjoy the general tone of your profile
I, too, may want your claws in my underbelly.
Your profile pics are excellent, giving us a variety of poses/situations. The first one is great, making you look friendly and approachable.
Your text is also quite good, even if the language could be tightened. You have a good grasp of what is interesting and worth talking about yourself without being overbearing about it. To be honest, if I weren't engaged I would have definitely put you on my "contact this person" list.
You profile is so good in fact...maybe you are just promoting yourself here under the ruse of "needing help"? Thinking some cute lurker girl will happen upon you and msg you? Wouldn't be a bad idea actually...
http://www.okcupid.com/profile/Here4goodtime4u
http://www.okcupid.com/profile/ColourlessIdea/
well, for one thing you need need need a picture before anything else.
fix up your six things, and try and add a bit more personality into your profile.
as for the friday night thing, that is a big no-no. okay, so you may be at home, but think of something better. maybe something about playing your guitar, enjoying a good movie, things like that. you don't just sit at home and BE at home on friday nights, right? sound like you are fun and interesting, i bet you are.
as for your most private thing, what you have there is bad, bad bad. it makes people think 'well what is wrong with him then?' people want what others want, no one wants the reject. now, this does not mean being single for so long is terrible, or makes you undesirable, i am just saying to not advertise that you have never been with a lady.
admit to something that we can laugh with you about, something like a secret like for lady gaga music. think conversation starters.
overall your profile yells 'don't message me'. remember, be likable, be friendly, have a picture.
In any case, I don't intend to change anything about myself in order to attract a mate. This was more about critiquing the presentation than about critiquing me. One of the things I like about having long hair is that different kinds of people tend to come up to me to start conversations in random places. The people that avoid me because I don't look "normal" are exactly the kind of people I don't want to talk to.
McGibs - I have nothing bad to say about yours. You seem to have conveyed your personality very well.
Here4goodtime4u - Everything is wrong with this profile.
ColourlessIdea - Without a picture, there is pretty much zero chance anyone will ever look at your profile.
Yes that profile is there to show you what NOT to do.
Everything from the pic, to the grammar, to the *shudder* content.
Oddly enough, this is true. I think I'm going to use that.
Your advice made a lot of sense and I'll try to get a picture up soon. I'm guessing shooting from a mirror is a no-no?
No comment on the "You should message me" part? I'm still on the fence as to whether that's funny or awkward.
though i still support funny conversation starters for most of the profile
you should message me
if you know of a good book i should check out
if you also appreciate a well cooked [type of food]
things like that.
i just saw the edit to your most private things admission, and try and make it sound a bit more shameful, but that you like it anyways.
"I find myself dancing and enjoying lady gaga music when it comes on the radio without realizing what I am doing. This can lead to some awkward times when a friend walks in, but hey, she's got rhythm."
what your profile really lacks are points of interest (and a picture). go read some other profiles, and take note of things that make you think 'hey i can start a conversation about that'. try not to be bland, but not a crazy weirdo either.
Actually, his original wording was more grammatically correct than yours. Get rid of the comma in Belruel's suggestion if you're going to change it over.
http://www.okcupid.com/profile/DrakeBFire
What's wrong with me?
Your profile is great actually. Very, very well written. Maybe less pictures with goofy faces though?