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  • TejsTejs Registered User regular
    edited December 2009
    I figure my profile pictures could use work (being that I have no candid photos on hand), but what about the rest of it?

    http://www.okcupid.com/profile/Sjetware

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  • CarthageCarthage Registered User regular
    edited July 2017
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  • Joe ChemoJoe Chemo Registered User regular
    edited December 2009
    I think that profile is pretty awesome, Carthage.

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  • Eat it You Nasty Pig.Eat it You Nasty Pig. tell homeland security 'we are the bomb'Registered User regular
    edited December 2009
    yeah your self-summary kills it, well done

    I would use a better-lit photo of yourself though. The one in the red shirt is much better that the shadowed one you have as the primary photo.

    Eat it You Nasty Pig. on
    hold your head high soldier, it ain't over yet
    that's why we call it the struggle, you're supposed to sweat
  • CyberJackalCyberJackal Registered User regular
    edited December 2009
    I'll try to contribute here...

    Carthage: I scrutinized your profile closely and I really couldn't find anything to criticize. You have a very good profile (I am envious). I may steal some ideas from you, in fact.

    Tejs: You already know this, but yes you definitely need better pictures. I think your profile is overall pretty well written. You have a small typo around "Office Space" that I'm sure you'd want someone to point out to you. I think your Friday Night answer could use some work... It's pretty boring compared to the rest of your profile.

    Joe Chemo: Your pictures are interesting, but I'm going to echo the sentiment of getting better ones. Especially a main profile photo, which really needs to be a clear view of you. As for the profile, you seem to be a little inconsistent on capitalization. Yeah, I guess I'm nitpicking here.

    Now I'd look to put my profile on the chopping block again. I want this thing honed to a razor edge (less dull, at least) before I unleash a torrent of desperate e-mails to strangers in 2010.

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  • TejsTejs Registered User regular
    edited December 2009
    Carthage: In your self summary, you talk about being well versed in grammar, and yet a sentence or two later, you start a sentence with 'and'. Depending on whether or not you wish to go with a more informal style of writing, it jars with the statement of grammar knowledge just above. That's just me being nitpicky though.

    Also, you might want to consider highlighting more of your interests in your favorite book/movie section (the [[]] thingy).

    Other than that, your profile is very well constructed and you have a nice set of pictures to go with it.

    Joe Chemo: Other than photo suggestions mentioned by others, I would think you would want to collapse some of your entries. To me, it looks like some excessive use of line breaks, and your choice of item separator in different entries is incongruent. I'd think either sticking with numbering list items, or going with the double dash for list items. Do you want "KEXP' to be something people ask you about? It might be useful to explain what that acronym is (of course, it could be something I'm just completely unfamiliar with that everyone else knows).

    The profile content is good though.

    CyberJackal: Your self summary seems a bit oddly worded to me. Perhaps collapse it into more meaty sentences. Try changing some of them to just statements (ex: "It's a good thing my favorite color is green, because the number of trees here are just staggering. I thought Virginia Falls was a city, not a forest!"). The paragraphs seem a little passive to me.

    In terms of pictures, I think adding one with a full body shot would be a good idea. Whenever I view a profile and there is no full body picture, it's a red flag to me.

    Also, if that is Bruce Campbell in the last one - rock on.

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  • Eat it You Nasty Pig.Eat it You Nasty Pig. tell homeland security 'we are the bomb'Registered User regular
    edited December 2009
    not starting/ending sentences with prepositions and conjunctions is a stupid rule anwyay

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    hold your head high soldier, it ain't over yet
    that's why we call it the struggle, you're supposed to sweat
  • Joe ChemoJoe Chemo Registered User regular
    edited December 2009
    Thanks for the suggestions, guys. I should have better photos by next week, and I'll look over formatting more closely.

    KEXP is a Seattle-based radio station. I would hope everyone in the area already knows about it.

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  • Spaten OptimatorSpaten Optimator Smooth Operator Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Deciding which dating site to go with before I upload a profile for critique--I live in Madison, Wisconsin. Is OKCupid the consensus pick around these parts? Any other suggestions?

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  • ImprovoloneImprovolone Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    OKCupid and PlentyOfFish are the only free sits worth trying. OKC is a much better site, but some people have shhit luck people wise and better on PoF.

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  • Eat it You Nasty Pig.Eat it You Nasty Pig. tell homeland security 'we are the bomb'Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    I mean, they're both free so... do both?

    Eat it You Nasty Pig. on
    hold your head high soldier, it ain't over yet
    that's why we call it the struggle, you're supposed to sweat
  • CarthageCarthage Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Madison is a city of 200,000 people with 40,000 students. If you're between 18 and 30, you'll probably have no trouble finding potential matches on either.

    On the other hand, I just made a profile for Madison on Okcupid... competition! :x

    Nah it's cool 8-) I'm actually kind of impressed with Okcupid's matching stuff so far, and I even got an unsolicited message today (only one day after making a profile!). Try it out.

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  • CarthageCarthage Registered User regular
    edited July 2017
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  • Salvation122Salvation122 Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Might as well get in on this, since I'm actually actively using it again.

    To Carthage: That looks pretty good, overall. I'd probably make the picture of you in what appears to be a rug shop your default pic, maybe tag some more interests if you want to use Icebreakers, but other than that it's very solid. The bit about dinosaurs is great; I probably need to add some more humor to mine as well.

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  • CarthageCarthage Registered User regular
    edited July 2017
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  • Eat it You Nasty Pig.Eat it You Nasty Pig. tell homeland security 'we are the bomb'Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    I drink once or twice a week, smoke way too much, and don't do drugs (and really rather detest those that get high habitually.) I am unfailingly a snob about my alcohol. My favorite movies are all tragedies. I hate extremists and nihilists and don't much get along with socialists. I use big words when small ones would suffice. The circumstances of my life often bring great consternation to myself in schadenfreude to others - ask me about the time I paid $300 for three soft tacos.

    I think stuff like this is okay, but only if you actually understand what you're doing with it. Don't expect people to read it ironically, or basically any way other than literally. So if you're really only interested in dating people who read it and think "yeah, that sounds like someone I want to date," then run with it.

    There's nothing wrong with mentioning exes in passing. I mean, ohmigod you've dated other people before?

    Your profile honestly reads like you're trying to project the rich kid persona as much as possible. So if that's what you're going for, you've done it effectively. If not, you might want to change up the tone of a bunch of it.

    Eat it You Nasty Pig. on
    hold your head high soldier, it ain't over yet
    that's why we call it the struggle, you're supposed to sweat
  • hectorsehectorse Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    I would like to get some critique!

    FIRE AWAY!

    http://www.okcupid.com/profile/hfolkense

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  • CarthageCarthage Registered User regular
    edited July 2017
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  • hectorsehectorse Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Carthage wrote: »
    Hectorse You've got a good profile, although right now only people signed in to Okcupid can see it. I've spoilered the rest (and the other walls of text I've written).
    Pictures Good pictures, except for maybe the last one - lots of people don't like to see you with a person of the opposite gender in a picture (or at least that's what they all say in the Okc forums). Maybe crop your friend out? I'd try to put on of you smiling in the top three, though.

    Self Summary
    Brief, friendly, confident. All good. The way you repeat the word spontaneous bothers the editor in me but you probably wrote it that way intentionally.

    What I'm doing with my life
    Again, all good, except that some girls might not like the idea of a guy who's going to disappear for 2 years.
    Minor grammar quibble: The sentence "I currently perform Violin in various ensembles and orchestras, I am also a drummer and sometimes I get percussion jobs besides my rock band" could be rephrased or you could throw in "and' after orchestras and take out the 'also'. I'm not sure if violin needs to be capitalized like that either.

    I'm really good at
    Violin is capitalized but drums isn't.
    "Logic is also kind of a strong point of me, so don't try to cheat on me." That's a weird and somewhat hostile statement. I'm not sure what logic has to do with being cheated on. It's even stranger when followed by "Honesty is a virtue. I am also good at making friends, and hope you are too." I think some variation of "I'm good at making friends" would be fine without the cheating part.

    "I'm also good at lifting heavy things from the the floor." Now there's a good line that looks like the rest of the profile. Simple, a little funny, and shows you don't take yourself completely seriously.

    The first things people usually notice about me
    This is ok. I left this blank on mine since I didn't have a good answer. Don't feel like you have to fill in every section.

    My favorite stuff
    "But if you LOVE hip-hop, country, reggeaton or death metal, I don't think music is going to be much of a topic. I don't discriminate by music taste though" I see what you're saying here, but some people might see the fact that you won't talk about those kinds of music as discrimination. It's not quite contradictory but it made me pause and think about it.

    Movies: List a few that you liked, both of your prefered genres and maybe some of those 'artsy' films that were better than the average. Everybody likes to see a favorite movie on someone else's list.

    Food: "Fish, Chicken and Beef are my trifecta of food" Almost everybody that east meat likes those things, I'm not sure why you have this sentence.
    "... but I have a special affection for cooking. I appreciate cookers and chefs so if you know how to cook, we could have dinner together. " Affection strikes me as an odd word choice. Also, unless you're a British transplant in San Diego, it should be cooks and chefs, not cookers. I think. The British might not use the word cooker either.

    Six things
    Family, friends, music, and internet are in everybody's top six. I'm not saying you should change it, but people are going to have seen it before.

    Spend a lot of time thinking about
    Passion (strangely capitalized) is one of your passions?

    Private thing
    This is good, everyone should have little stories like this in their profile. The 'snow in San Diego' line reads a little corny to me, but keep it if you like it.

    You should message me if
    Again, good. But maybe include a question that only someone with a classical musical background would know (or cooking, or some other topic you know well)? It's the perfect way to create a connection between you and the person reading your profile. Although it may filter people who don't know the answer, so maybe not! :)

    You seem to be going for a friendly, extroverted, musical girl. Again, good profile!

    Well thank you dood!

    I appreciate the corrections you made! I am kind of hardcore editor too, I just didn't ive my profile a proofread!

    Will update! Just one sec!

    Edit: I updated my profile with corrections and is now set to public! Now I should be getting tons of chicks all the time

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  • DistramDistram __BANNED USERS regular
    edited January 2010
    Requesting a critique on mine:
    http://www.okcupid.com/profile/Distram

    Pretty sure the self-description needs work. It's difficult for me to describe myself without sounding like a complete tool. So, I thought I'd just list off some random stuff about myself separated by semi-colons.

    Thanks in advance.

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  • Diomedes240zDiomedes240z Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Distram, your photos are all the same photo, pretty much :p Keep one and get some more different ones. I'd be inclined to take some stuff out of your summary and put into other sections, but that's just me. Other than that, it's just a bit plain. Fix up your 6 things a bit, come up with a better answer to the first thing people notice about you and why should people message you.

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  • DistramDistram __BANNED USERS regular
    edited January 2010
    Distram, your photos are all the same photo, pretty much :p Keep one and get some more different ones. I'd be inclined to take some stuff out of your summary and put into other sections, but that's just me. Other than that, it's just a bit plain. Fix up your 6 things a bit, come up with a better answer to the first thing people notice about you and why should people message you.

    I agree with you about it being plain, I'm just not sure what to add.

    The pictures are the same because I took a bunch today and picked the best three. I don't really have any others. None of my friends are the "hey lets go do stuff and take photos" type and neither am I.

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  • Salvation122Salvation122 Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Carthage wrote: »
    Three things: Most people aren't going to see Stoic as a positive thing. Also, I generally think I have a good vocabulary but I had to look up operose. Nothing wrong with showing off your vocabulary, but do you really want to describe yourself as tedious or wearisome?
    Our dictionaries must differ; mine's got it as "Industrious; diligent." Which I should probably just put instead of operose.
    Self Summary:"As it's been five years since I signed up, I beg you to please ignore my Republican score in the comparisons; I've grown up since then. " If that's true, then retake the tests or questions (only the new score will show up in your profile), and you can delete any quizes that aren't from Okc staff.
    I've answered over a thousand questions over a period of five years. I really, really don't want to comb through each and every one.

    Pretty much everything else you've mentioned has been taken into consideration, and a bunch of it was edited in. Last picture was cut; it's unfortunate that I'm terribly unphotogenic.

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  • CyberJackalCyberJackal Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Do people really judge others based on the personality "awards"? I look at them sometimes, but they've never changed my opinion about someone.

    Salvation: If you really think your personality is being misrepresented, you may have to bite the bullet and go through some of those old questions. They affect match %'s, which people do pay attention to (whether or not they should is another question entirely). Up to you whether you think it's worth your time.

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  • AltaliciousAltalicious Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Bandwagon

    Haven't used it for a while, but intrigued to see what the American half think of British oddness.

    PS I'm aware the name is shit, but I got bored getting choices blocked, and can't be arsed to swap it all over.

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  • Zul the ConquerorZul the Conqueror Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Bandwagon

    Haven't used it for a while, but intrigued to see what the American half think of British oddness.

    PS I'm aware the name is shit, but I got bored getting choices blocked, and can't be arsed to swap it all over.

    I believe the way you Brits put it is "Brilliant!" or maybe that's Aussies. Or both.

    I'm not sure how excited you'll be about impressing a male American in Texas, but however excited that makes you, be about it!

    EDIT: Upon further review, I didn't really say anything of substance.

    I like the ironic tone of your profile, and it makes me think you'd be a fun guy to hang out with. However, I don't know that I learned much about you other than you're enjoyably sarcastic, in the army, like coffee, drink a lot, and like certain bands, movies, and TV shows. That may be enough, but really the only part that relates to your personality is the sarcasm. Not being female, I don't know whether you ought to let more of your personality/personal life through. I'll just point out the fact.

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  • Armored GorillaArmored Gorilla Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    I think my profile is too wordy and that's after I cut it down some. I have that cliche problem of not knowing how to describe myself. Aware that the photo sucks, working on it.

    http://www.okcupid.com/profile/notquitezen

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  • Diomedes240zDiomedes240z Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Bandwagon

    Haven't used it for a while, but intrigued to see what the American half think of British oddness.

    PS I'm aware the name is shit, but I got bored getting choices blocked, and can't be arsed to swap it all over.

    You sir, have an awesome sense of humor. This profile is tits.

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  • EshEsh Tending bar. FFXIV. Motorcycles. Portland, ORRegistered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Bandwagon

    Haven't used it for a while, but intrigued to see what the American half think of British oddness.

    PS I'm aware the name is shit, but I got bored getting choices blocked, and can't be arsed to swap it all over.

    You come off slightly douchey. You might also want to take "Casual Sex" off what you're looking for. I can guarantee there are a ton of girls who will see that and pass on by.

    Esh on
  • JokermanJokerman Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Can we post facebook profiles? I want someone to crique the "About me" part of facebook. Can we do that here too?

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  • billwillbillwill Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Jokerman wrote: »
    Can we post facebook profiles? I want someone to crique the "About me" part of facebook. Can we do that here too?

    I don't know about the Facebook thing, but I do know you exceeded the maximum amount of "o"s in a post, and you're right on the cusp of the three question limit.

    Watch your back tonight, dude. Shit is going down.

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  • AngelinaAngelina Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Bandwagon

    Haven't used it for a while, but intrigued to see what the American half think of British oddness.

    PS I'm aware the name is shit, but I got bored getting choices blocked, and can't be arsed to swap it all over.

    I agree with the others that are saying you have a really funny profile, but it doesn't say huge amounts about you. I think I'd message you though as you seem really fun to hang out with. As for the casual sex thing, pretty much every male's profile I've seen has said that so it wouldn't bother me greatly.

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  • ImprovoloneImprovolone Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Jokerman wrote: »
    Can we post facebook profiles? I want someone to crique the "About me" part of facebook. Can we do that here too?

    I'd just copy paste that shit. There is so much personal info possibly available on Facebook that it weirds me out. I've locked my shit down.

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  • Salvation122Salvation122 Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Bandwagon

    Haven't used it for a while, but intrigued to see what the American half think of British oddness.

    PS I'm aware the name is shit, but I got bored getting choices blocked, and can't be arsed to swap it all over.

    This shit is gold. Gold. Don't change a goddamn thing.

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  • Eat it You Nasty Pig.Eat it You Nasty Pig. tell homeland security 'we are the bomb'Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Bandwagon

    Haven't used it for a while, but intrigued to see what the American half think of British oddness.

    PS I'm aware the name is shit, but I got bored getting choices blocked, and can't be arsed to swap it all over.

    you go to the "irreverently dodging the prompt" well far too often. I read your profile and learned nothing about you except 1) you're in the army and 2) you used to be in a band. The rest of the profile is basically fluff that might be chuckleworthy, but is void of any interesting details that might inspire people to message you.

    Eat it You Nasty Pig. on
    hold your head high soldier, it ain't over yet
    that's why we call it the struggle, you're supposed to sweat
  • ImprovoloneImprovolone Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    I fucking love that you're eating M and Ms though.

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  • DistramDistram __BANNED USERS regular
    edited January 2010
    General profile question:

    What do you do if you're in your late twenties and still live at home whilst going to grad school and aren't completely financially independent? Save that bomb to drop after you've talked to someone for a bit? Put a disclaimer in your profile? Delete your profile? Shoot yourself?

    Distram on
  • BelruelBelruel NARUTO FUCKS Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    work on moving out i would say.
    or really push and finish grad school, then move out.

    just move out really.

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  • DistramDistram __BANNED USERS regular
    edited January 2010
    Belruel wrote: »
    work on moving out i would say.
    or really push and finish grad school, then move out.

    just move out really.

    It's not like I'm not working on that. I don't have $Texas and, as such, it's difficult to live on my own AND go to grad school.

    Distram on
  • Eat it You Nasty Pig.Eat it You Nasty Pig. tell homeland security 'we are the bomb'Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    I don't think you need to mention it in your profile, but probably should within 1-2 dates just to avoid potential awkwardness.

    Eat it You Nasty Pig. on
    hold your head high soldier, it ain't over yet
    that's why we call it the struggle, you're supposed to sweat
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