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Restarted an old story..

x012krngurlxxx012krngurlxx Registered User new member
edited June 2010 in Artist's Corner
Had this sitting on my desktop for a while now, and finally got it started up again.

I turn to you, Penny Arcade Community, for feedback.

tp11.jpg?w=550&h=711

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  • Shiekahn_boyShiekahn_boy Registered User regular
    edited June 2010
    Hi and welcome to the forum!

    It looks pretty neat. Not sure what is going on other then the persons reaching critical mass and is splitting atoms...

    Can i see more?

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  • FlayFlay Registered User regular
    edited June 2010
    Yeah, it's a bit difficult to critique when we don't really know anything about the context. Looks nice at the moment though. :)

    Oh, but before you do anything else, you should get a better typeface than the one you're using. Several good free ones (specifically for comics) can be found here: http://www.blambot.com/

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  • x012krngurlxxx012krngurlxx Registered User new member
    edited June 2010
    Oops. Context.
    She's 'waking up'.

    Unfortunately for me, I've gotten a few pages in before finalizing a font, and I've not picked one yet. Definitely will check out the site.

    Here's page two:

    tp2.jpg?w=550&h=711

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  • Shiekahn_boyShiekahn_boy Registered User regular
    edited June 2010
    I'm guessing she is a high elf and her home was destroyed by Kel'thuzad.

    Your silhouettes don't show me much. Can you show me some sketches? The comic looks ok, but the background kind of messes with the characters themselves so it contrasts a lot with style.

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    What the fuck are you people even arguing about? Shut up.
  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    edited June 2010
    Monotype Corsiva is a terrible font for this. I know you want to make it look fancy, but it's so small that it really doesn't lend itself for what you're doing.

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  • AumniAumni Registered User regular
    edited June 2010
    What happened to her pupils and earrings in the last panel?

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  • Spectre-xSpectre-x Rating: AWESOME YESRegistered User regular
    edited June 2010
    MagicToaster wrote: »
    Monotype Corsiva is a terrible font for this. I know you want to make it look fancy, but it's so small that it really doesn't lend itself for what you're doing.

    In addition to this, the word placement in the speech balloons is pretty haphazard. They could be a much better fit with just a little work. Either space them out a bit more evenly, or work on the shape of the balloons so the words look like they belong there instead of being pasted on top of them.

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