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Oh God More Comics
AMK
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BUT I actually think what you are doing here is better than average and shows some potential. Certainly in terms of what we regularly see on this site, and also compared to the wealth of 'start-up' comics following the styles of the above creators.
If you're enjoying it, then simply keep at it.
Don't worry about forcing 'your own' style too much, that'll come naturally along with more general improvements. I'm sure some of the folks here will have more practical advice to give.
Keep it up.
"Gone to Europe.
~Bread"
I desire to know more of the adventures the loaf of bread has in Europe.
The third seems to be one of those strips a person gives up on. Based on the first 2, I think you could make this one MUCH stronger instead of dissolving into an empty bicker back and forth. You used substance for the frist two comics, but this one is lacking in that department.
The fourth was good, and the "be honest" is chucklable (is that a word? - well it is now), but I think it just didn't do it for me personally.
If you are going to have a somewhat frazzled, less-polished look to your comic, you need to keep that content TOP NOTCH. If you consistently made strips like the first couple you posted, I'd bookmark your site without a doubt.
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Which is a lot more praise than I give 80% of the "Lokk I drawd comic ololol" threads we get on here.
I appreciate the input nonetheless!
Here's a couple more, bear with me, it'll be over soon.
These resemble "plot."
The first time you say it, i would drop the whole "Well we can't make sandwiches" and just say "Order out" if you have to explain the joke then it doesn't work.
The whole second comic then revolves around that passing joke, and then makes me think...why can a jar of mayo abduct someone but another jar points out that they can't do anything because "Im a jar"...i dunno. again just didn't work for me
the take-out menu was way funnier. you could drop the whole 4th panel of the last comic and have a way funnier comic IMO
Also the two characters are completely indecipherable personality wise. There's really nothing thats standing out to me in either their design or their attributes. Maybe try to come up with different more interesting characters?
Your line work is very clean so that's a nice hurdle to clear early on in the process of making comics. In terms of mixing up perspectives and refining your line width variation you still have a ways to go.
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I like this a lot so far, keep it up.
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Seconded. You don't even have to go circular if you don't want to (although there's curves in your comic so I don't think it'd stylistically offend to much); just give the text more room to breathe. They're extremely claustrophobic, which I think is what's making them so hard for folks to look at.
im not really diggin your art though
it just seems kind of generic "internet cute" simple emo cartoons like those old "i had cookie but eated it" comics that float around still
Yes, kind of. It does look like those in how the OP draws the characters, but s/he's already bypassing a few hurdles that really hold new comic artists back. Those would be drawing backgrounds where necessary, and knowing how to compose a shot for drama/action/whatever the purpose of the panel is. The art might be really simple with abstracted characters, but s/he's already got a good sense of how to let the art service the writing.
That said, I think the inking is pretty weak. Very little attention is paid to why certain lines are thicker than others. It's just bold outlines and lighter interior lines, and it's not very satisfying. It doesn't really do much to further the mood of your comics. You should think of it more like angles and closeups in that it's another device you can use to strengthen your punchlines through buildup and release of visual tension.
The writing is "meh" to me...I feel it's the type of stuff that'll be funny/amusing to that small core of people out there and just seems annoying to me that the punchlines are just outrageous statements that really make no sense, especially in that second one about grinding rabbits or w/e.