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My latest charcoal portrait: Need feedback.

MaryamMaryam Registered User regular
edited May 2011 in Artist's Corner
Hello everybody,

This is my first post in this forum. I am self taught. I like to make portraits. The attached image is my latest work done using charcoal, carbon and pencil.

back_and_white_portrait_2_by_mariam84-d3fuwdb.jpg

black_and_white_portrait_by_mariam84-d3fuv8t.jpg


Please I am looking for feedback, any suggestions on how to improve my skills are welcomed.



Source image:

girl-layng-1600x1200-black-and-white-wallpaper-04.jpg



Thanks,

Maryam

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  • DeeLockDeeLock Registered User regular
    edited May 2011
    Hi, welcome to the forums.

    Please post or link to the reference you used. There's only so much we can say without it.

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  • saltinesssaltiness Registered User regular
    edited May 2011
    The edge of her arm in front of her face and the right edge of her face (her left) are too sharp. It draws too much attention to those boundaries because they're the most contrasty parts of the drawing.

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  • MustangMustang Arbiter of Unpopular Opinions Registered User regular
    edited May 2011
    It's not bad, but there are a number of flaws, particularly around the eye sockets.
    I'd focus on construction at the moment, try getting an Asaro head or at least using an image of one. I spent almost a year drawing these things trying to my head around the mysteries of the ..errr.. head.

    The face is an incredibly tricky subject, so it takes a lot of practice to even consider yourself mediocre at drawing it.
    2181887756_bcbf8e47c1.jpg

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  • tynictynic PICNIC BADASS Registered User, ClubPA regular
    edited May 2011
    The first thing that leaps out at me is how flat her eyeballs are, and her right cheek in general lacks depth. Some shading issues, but without a reference I can't really say more. I like your value range, and you clearly have good control of your media - the cloth is especially good.

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  • MaryamMaryam Registered User regular
    edited May 2011
    I really don't how I forgot to link the source image! I am sorry for this. Here is the original image:

    girl-layng-1600x1200-black-and-white-wallpaper-04.jpg

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  • MaryamMaryam Registered User regular
    edited May 2011
    DeeLock wrote: »
    Hi, welcome to the forums.

    Please post or link to the reference you used. There's only so much we can say without it.

    Thanks.

    Here is the source image:

    girl-layng-1600x1200-black-and-white-wallpaper-04.jpg

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  • MaryamMaryam Registered User regular
    edited May 2011
    saltiness wrote: »
    The edge of her arm in front of her face and the right edge of her face (her left) are too sharp. It draws too much attention to those boundaries because they're the most contrasty parts of the drawing.

    I will take that into consideration. Thanks.

    Maryam on
  • MaryamMaryam Registered User regular
    edited May 2011
    Mustang wrote: »
    It's not bad, but there are a number of flaws, particularly around the eye sockets.
    I'd focus on construction at the moment, try getting an Asaro head or at least using an image of one. I spent almost a year drawing these things trying to my head around the mysteries of the ..errr.. head.

    The face is an incredibly tricky subject, so it takes a lot of practice to even consider yourself mediocre at drawing it.
    2181887756_bcbf8e47c1.jpg

    I will work on the face more, and will post it again. Thanks

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  • MaryamMaryam Registered User regular
    edited May 2011
    tynic wrote: »
    The first thing that leaps out at me is how flat her eyeballs are, and her right cheek in general lacks depth. Some shading issues, but without a reference I can't really say more. I like your value range, and you clearly have good control of your media - the cloth is especially good.

    Really thanks.

    Maryam on
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