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LyricalLyrical Registered User regular
edited September 2012 in Artist's Corner
Hey, I've been lurking here for awhile and have butt loads of respect for everyone's work.

I could really use some fresh eyes on my things lately. Eyes. On my things.

My background: (please just scroll past if It gets too wordy)
I got my first degree in sculpture a couple years ago, and was making things like this:
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Also did some figure drawing in school and spent some time at an atelier in florence for a term-that was kind of the peak of my naturalistic drawing skill. I've never been very successful in long drawings, everything starts to look stiff, (how do you fix that?) I got pretty comfortable with quick sketching then, though.
these are 10-20 minute-ers
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I started a Master of Architecture program last year, but while I was completely awesome at it, I didn't love it enough to continue accumulating debt. Architecture school did at least leave me with a huge stockpile of drawing supplies and vastly improved my graphic design skills.

I would really love to be marketable as an illustrator, and I've been pursuing that with a mix of vigor and panicked self-doubt for the past few months. I also love graphic storytelling...from cave paintings to comic books.

So here's the first few rough draft pages of a story I've been working on. I'm hoping to keep some of the panels, but will inevitably redraw many of them.
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I'm having issues balancing "liveliness" with cleanliness in the inking. I don't have a lot of experience in pen, honestly, but I want badly to become proficient. I've been trying to do most of it off the cuff, because any kind of tracing usually ends up way stiff.

I'm using Koh-i-noor Rapidographs on vellum for the scanned drawings. I'd love any advice on media. I have an old wacom Graphire3 which feels very clunky to me now and with which I am wayyy out of practice. I'm also just more interested in physical media for this particular project, I guess.

And here's some recent pages from my sketchbook
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HELP!

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    FlayFlay Registered User regular
    Hiya, welcome to the AC! Your stuff looks good, but I think you're going to need to shrink down those comic pages before we can critique them.

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    LyricalLyrical Registered User regular
    Thanks and done.

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    MustangMustang Arbiter of Unpopular Opinions Registered User regular
    I can offer you nothing, except that I'm rather fond of what you have done so far.

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    MolybdenumMolybdenum Registered User regular
    So thats what drawing in pen is supposed to look like. wow.

    For me the lettering is the weakest part of the comics. it seems almost like an afterthought compared with the deliberate strokes all around it.

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    squidbunnysquidbunny Registered User regular
    Great stuff. Disturbing, so working as intended, I guess? I love the way you use hatching.

    My only beef is with the lettering, also. It's difficult to read, doesn't grab the eye, and I'm not fond of how close it edges to the balloon borders in places.

    Generally, though, awesome. Welcome! :D

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    LyricalLyrical Registered User regular
    Molybdenum wrote:
    For me the lettering is the weakest part of the comics. it seems almost like an afterthought compared with the deliberate strokes all around it.

    For sure. In most cases it was absolutely an afterthought.

    In my inexperience, I really neglected to think about bubble placement as part of the overall composition of the panels, and ended up having to insert them where there was room. I'm also having a real ambivalence about hand lettering--I love it when other people do it, but I can't seem to get it right. So as I was doing the lettering here I was half thinking that i would cut it out and either have someone else letter or insert a typeface TBD.

    Does anyone have advice on combining physical media with digital lettering?

    Also I'm noticing now there's a bubble with no words in it at all. Artful.


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    FlayFlay Registered User regular
    I'm with squid, your hatching is great! It's a little bit less successful on the fifth comic page though, the large block of scribbles on the wall look a little too rough. The first page of the comic is definitely the best, although the barn roof seems to have fallen out of perspective.

    What's here is good, looking forward to seeing some more.

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    LyricalLyrical Registered User regular
    edited September 2012
    Been taking a break from the storytelling to work on drawing improvement. Switched from vellum to illustration board because it takes large black patches better. Generally just trying to get comfortable with media.
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    edited September 2012
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    LyricalLyrical Registered User regular
    edited September 2012
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    amateurhouramateurhour One day I'll be professionalhour The woods somewhere in TennesseeRegistered User regular
    This is amazing work.... How did you do the colors on the scientist piece above?

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    LyricalLyrical Registered User regular
    This is amazing work.... How did you do the colors on the scientist piece above?
    Oh, thanks. My coloring has been limited to markers so far--I want to get more comfortable with them before I venture into watercolor...

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    NappuccinoNappuccino Surveyor of Things and Stuff Registered User regular
    My main critique is that your blacks are splotchy and it really detracts from the nice look of the rest of the work.

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    LyricalLyrical Registered User regular
    edited September 2012
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    In response to a prompt to re-imagine captain america for another principality. Went historical.

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    edited September 2012
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    LyricalLyrical Registered User regular
    edited September 2012
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    Desperate to find a way to be expressive with color. Trying in vain to absorb some of McJohnstable's technique, but haven't wrapped myself around it yet.

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    Some cover art for a friends' band.

    Despite having been working at this stuff essentially full time for the past couple months, I feel dauntingly adrift. I've been learning a lot, but not in any particular stylistic direction, so I could really use feedback about where to push forward, or where to focus my effort.

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    LyricalLyrical Registered User regular
    edited September 2012
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    LyricalLyrical Registered User regular
    Back on my grind after awhile, trying to push myself in some different directions...still mostly into pens, though.

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    HalenHalen Registered User regular
    I'm thinking your brain is an interesting place to hang out.

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    LyricalLyrical Registered User regular
    edited September 2012
    'nother batch from this week.

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    FANTOMASFANTOMAS Flan ArgentavisRegistered User regular
    Very nice ones! I liked the one of the woman holding the sheep the most, all incredible work.

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