My fav is when I can get my kiss on with other dudes.
I'm not saying it's not cool to reference shit people don't know about, but here is a list of words in your comic that made no sense to me.
That's a lot of words, and most of those appear in the first panel. You can see how that doesn't exactly sell it to the reader, unless you want to appeal to a very specific gamer, which I don't know why you would.
camp counseling wrote:
When you are beginning writing, 90% of the audience or greater will have no idea who you are. You will not have any cult of personality behind you. Your words will be your only weapon. You can't rely on "you had to be there humor." Quoting The Simpsons will not be an easy out anymore. Your voice is all you have, and that voice better not be reliant on a myriad of specific, mundane experiences that impact neither jack nor squat of whatever you have splayed onto the page. You will drown most assuredly.