Hey! I haven't made art post in quite some time, but I still like to pop in every now and then to see what's up. I'm about to xerox a low bugdet zine/comic thing of all the cartoons I've made over the past 2 years. These aren't all of them, but these are the ones that I think would benefit from another set of eyes before I actually print and staple up these bad boys. If you follow my Insta you may have seen some of these. I know the forum isn't super active for crits like it used to be, but I thought I'd give it a shot anyway. I'll also post over in the writing forum and see if I can pull anyone over to take a look at the writing, spelling, punctuation ect. Also I think I made these images kinda small, so... sorry.
This first one I don't think is particularly great, as it breaks the cardinal (lol) rule of not using violence as the punchline but O well. It originally was just the first 3 panels, and I added the next three panels after thinking maybe I could salvage it. Now I'm not sure all the panels are necessary. For example you could loose panels 2, 4, 5 and it still might work? I don't know, I'm not sure if the flow would still work but I was considering dropping panels 2 and 5. Thoughts?
This one I was thinking could prob loose the text in the 3rd panel all together and still work. But I thought the text was kinda funny, so pretty torn on this one.
This page is two unrelated food jokes on one page
This one, I'm convinced is not very funny but it's just about me and my spider buds minding each others respective beeswaxes.
This one has a lot of text in the last panel and I'm not sure if it could be worded better.
I'd prob have my mom word proof all of these, because she's good at that, but I dont want her to know that I want to die and be buried in a Jubilee Roll.
These are two separate comics stuck side by side because they both were video gamey...
This one, I'm not sure the 3rd panel with the "ya" reply is totally necessary, but I'm not sure it hits the same beats without it...
This one uses a bunch of internet shorthand, so proofreading prob unnecessary.
I don't feel like I made any mistakes with this text because it's so basic, but just in case.
This one is prob only funny to me, but also prob nobody watches old Clint Eastwood movies and thinks, BUT WHAT IF THEY WERE WHALES
And then this one has a bunch of text so, any thoughts about if something could be worded better would be helpful!
Thanks!! : )