- Some rough comic pages I did in some spare time. What I'm planning on doing when I get the chance is to clean it up in Photoshop and tossing it through Flash in order to get smoother lines.
Any kinds of critique would be appreciated, from glaring anatomy wrongs (Which are hard pressed to notice in pictures like this) to any kinds of techniques which would help me further refine a pure black and white style.
I've been wondering if using a white-out pen would work, especially once scanned and cleaned up.
If this looks familiar, alot of the poses, paneling, and the first panel is referenced from the first Hellboy book. I've never attempted this before, so I needed some references to get everything together right.
Hope it helps!
What it's got going for it.
1) It's dramatic.
2) It shows that you had fun making it. Everybody likes to draw two dudes duking it out in castles.
3)It's bold. Perhaps too bold. Maybe even really fucking bold. Mighta been nice to see the pencils.
What it's got against it.
1) Manga panels are for manga. (page 3)
3) Total misinterpretation of how speed lines are implemented.
4) Your faces is ugly son. Fug. Find some grizzly dude and ref his face if you want to but no more of panel 1 page 4.
5) We know you didnt draw your figures or pillars according to a horizon, but so do you.
All in all, just looks like you were having fun doodling. No need for the PA to set you straight on lack of narrative or story or cliches like armor dude vs. shadow beast. Go ahead and get some Sharpie paint pens. With poster paint not oil based. Black and white. Do that instead of white out. Lots of fun if you want to stray from pencil.
The last thing this comic needs is crosshatching to clutter it. Sry, Findus.
Also, flash line smoothing is not going to help you.
As to pure black and white style refining, just steal. Jack the moves from Mignola and Miller and whoever, but they apply their tricks with style to basic understanding of figure, form and lighting. Just keep drawing.
Other than that, draw from life, read up on Andrew Loomis and check some Scott McCloud out from your local library, blah blah blah. Etc.
Welcome. Cheers on your first attempt.
What I did was draw some more and scan it in, then run it through flash to clean it up. I think it looks decent, but thats just my opinion. Currently, also no white paint pens yet Haven't found alot of time to really do some serious drawing. World of Warcraft owns my soul.
The following is a 7 page comic, detailing the efforts of Lysander to rid a castle of an evil ghost, and the reward he gets for doing so from his Order. Halfway through, I ended up getting the new Dark Angel's codex and felt a urge to draw something DA-ish, so I turned and made it a story about how Lysander kills the ghost of a Fallen and is promoted to Deathwing. The Terminator looks hooky because I didn't have a refence on how the armor looked like at that time, so I over did it with the decorations.
This is the first page of a comic which I am currently working on. No real idea a plot yet v.v.
Anyways, I find it really hard to see with such thick lines. I can't decipher half of the panels without staring at it for a few moments.