galen wrote: »
I'd just like to say that Josh dude, in his character card or whatever, looks like he's about to puke. Pretty intense Guitar Hero playing, I guess.
srsizzy wrote: »
Work on: expressions, anatomy (hands and bodies), life drawing, shading/lighting (using vectors/paths and cell shading would look nicer than the soft shading), adding highlights when you get the hang of shading, perspective, making either everyone just have pupils or giving everyone entire eyes, and condensing the strips to 2-4 panels (or make each panel funny enough to be worth it, i.e. VG Cats).
 Woah, I didn't notice this had already reached page 2, so I don't know how much was already said, but it still stands.
The One Dark Knight wrote: »
YAY NOT A PENNY ARCADE RIPOFF
It got me smiling
You're definitely going in the right direction. Nothing I can say that hasn't been said already.
MKR wrote: »
Shouldn't the toasted face innards be red, not purple?
Mr Elliotto wrote: »
I think your sense of humor is great (anyone that uses a St. Elsewhere joke is aces in my book), but I really think varying your line thickness will help define your art a lot more.
hijinksensue wrote: »
I've got the brush set to let the pen pressure control the thickness (from 1px to 15). But I think I draw with a constant pressure so I cancel it out. Where should the lines be thicker? I could make the outlines bolder but then I think it would look like a PA copy.
Overlord wrote: »
The trick to line widths is to try and create depth. Like in this the hand is in front of the guy on the right, so it should have a thicker outline that thins out overtop of the hand. I just did a paintover kind of thing and made it a gif.
Not the best job but hopefully it explains what I'm getting at.
Mayday wrote: »
HalberdBlue wrote: »
Damn I was hoping this thread would have something to do with this:http://www.penny-arcade.com/comic/2006/11/08Disappointment
But actually I like the comic and have added the page to my favorites list
Overlord wrote: »
The inking is much better, and the comic made me laugh. Good job
Creambun 007 wrote: »
I liked the joke better when "Perry Bible Fellowship" did it.http://pbfcomics.com/?cid=PBF077AD-Disassemble.jpg#144
squidbunny wrote: »
Prime's dialogue is dizzying to look at, as are all the similarly-saturated colors getting all up in each other's faces.
Inking is 400% hotter, though. Nice work.
Generally, improvement over the stuff in the OP is pretty amazing. You rock for running so well with the crits.
Vargas Prime wrote: »
One thing to remember about line weights is to vary them to give your drawing some life and perspective.
It's good that you're paying attention to it, but I think you still need to mix it up a little. Making most or all of the lines thicker may make certain things easier to read, but it's not a catch-all.
A good simple rule is to use thicker lines for emphasis. Things in the foreground should exhibit heavier lines than things in the background, typically, to give the feeling of depth. Vary line weights within people and objects, too. The outline of a shirt, for example, could be thicker than any of the lines inside the shirt, depicting folds or designs. Mixing line weights gives objects a more organic presence.
I'm not a teacher, so I'm hoping that I'm explaining this OK... I'm at work, otherwise I might try to post some quick examples of what I'm talking about.
teamquiggan wrote: »
I liked it better when the clerks cartoon did it before Perry Bible Fellowship.
What is your point? There are alot more contextual jokes in this one then either the PBF or the one from Clerks. I didn't say anything because I thought it would be crass and pointless.
Jandiss wrote: »
lol this one is good stuff.
one thing that caught my eye (and god help me for noticing this)
you main characters toungein the last cell looks like a pair of shaved testicles with a shaft pointed in his mouth....
ugh...i need a girlfriend....
bread of wonder wrote: »
The new one is :^:. It seems your backgrounds have improved a lot in the course of the last two strips, as well as your line weights. Glad to see all these crits put into action. Keep it up man, your webcomic really has something going for it. I guess it really helps that you had some great humor all along, though.
Mr. H.G. Blob wrote: »
I went to your website and just wanted to mention that I loved the Diggnation one. Haven't watched it in a while, but Kevin's dialogue in the comic was great haha.