Requesting a comic critique (HijiNKS Ensue)

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  • Angel_of_BaconAngel_of_Bacon Moderator mod
    edited July 2007
    Jandiss wrote: »
    lol this one is good stuff.
    one thing that caught my eye (and god help me for noticing this)
    you main characters toungein the last cell looks like a pair of shaved testicles with a shaft pointed in his mouth....
    ugh...i need a girlfriend....

    On the contrary, I think you need a boyfriend...

    :winky:

    Dammit E, how many times do I have to tell you not to hit on every new guy that walks in here?

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  • EdcrabEdcrab Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Just when I find siggable material you guys decide to go and make a quote tree too long to use. Dang you all!


    I kinda liked this from the outset, but most noteworthy is the fact you seem to have taken suggestions to heart, which always, always bodes well for an artist :)

    Well... except when some bastard keeps emailing you and demanding pornographic content or something. You can tell them to go stuff themselves.

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  • JandissJandiss Registered User
    edited July 2007
    Wait...is he comming onto me? Just cause I see random testicles doesn't mean I enjoy them. Wow there is NO way out of this hole I dug myself in.

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  • Stupid Mr Whoopsie NameStupid Mr Whoopsie Name Registered User, ClubPA regular
    edited July 2007
    Jandiss wrote: »
    lol this one is good stuff.
    one thing that caught my eye (and god help me for noticing this)
    you main characters toungein the last cell looks like a pair of shaved testicles with a shaft pointed in his mouth....
    ugh...i need a girlfriend....

    On the contrary, I think you need a boyfriend...

    :winky:

    Dammit E, how many times do I have to tell you not to hit on every new guy that walks in here?

    Man, I'm not gonna stop unless you tell me again, sixteen or seveteen more times...

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    chiyosdad wrote: »
    I'm adding your comic to my bookmarks. They're pretty funny. I especially liked the books in the bookshelf in the first comic, and the backgammon, because I'm very fond of those kinds of details. It's like leaving a nice treat for your readers to find.
    Glad you liked (and noticed) that. I figure if I throw in those inside jokes that most people will glaze over them, but those that do notice will enjoy the strip that much more.

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    Jandiss wrote: »
    Wait...is he comming onto me? Just cause I see random testicles doesn't mean I enjoy them. Wow there is NO way out of this hole I dug myself in.
    No way, whatsoever. You might as well just pick up the shovel and keep digging.

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    I was hoping to get this one out before the release of the final Harry Potter book. That turned out to be impossible so I altered the dialog to make it still be relevant. Still working on the backgrounds. I added a cool little lounge chair in the first panel but it got covered up by speech balloons. Do most of you finalize your speech balloons before doing the backgrounds to prevent this problem? Its a shame to work on anything that just going to be covered up.

    The carbonite effect gave me hell, and I eventually settled for less than i was hoping for. I used the "base...something something" filter in CS3 to get the texture.

    The Boba Fett and Lando Skiff Gaurd helmets may be out of left field, but they were fun as hell to draw.

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  • JandissJandiss Registered User
    edited July 2007
    Are the helmets going to be randomly comming back? lol The I just shit in your cereal helmets.
    As far as the bubbles go tho it sucks that something in the bg got chopped but honestly to the reader we arent sitting here saying "man wtf why is that chair covered?" I would only complain if it was something invovled in the comic.

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    Jandiss wrote: »
    Are the helmets going to be randomly comming back? lol The I just shit in your cereal helmets.
    As far as the bubbles go tho it sucks that something in the bg got chopped but honestly to the reader we arent sitting here saying "man wtf why is that chair covered?" I would only complain if it was something invovled in the comic.
    I suppose the idea is that "The Helmets" have long since been used to "shit in someones cereal." Does that make any sense? No way. I really just wanted an excuse to draw a Boba Fett Helmet. The other one was going to be the "Leia as a Bounty Hunter" helmet but I couldnt find a good enough reference image. Lando is twice as smooth anyway.

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  • Stupid Mr Whoopsie NameStupid Mr Whoopsie Name Registered User, ClubPA regular
    edited July 2007
    Lando knows how to double cross a bitch in style...

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  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    I must admit, the strips are getting better!

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  • Canada is 1337Canada is 1337 Registered User
    edited July 2007
    I must admit, the strips are getting better!

    One thing that bothers me a bit is that the tracking and leading on your dialog don't look quite right. I think you could stand to reduce both. Maybe it's just me, though.

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    Lando knows how to double cross a bitch in style...
    He'll pimp slap you to the ground and not even spill his Colt 45.

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    I must admit, the strips are getting better!
    Thanks! I appreciate all the help I am getting from the AC.

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    One thing that bothers me a bit is that the tracking and leading on your dialog don't look quite right. I think you could stand to reduce both. Maybe it's just me, though.
    Enlighten me. "tracking and leading." I know that has something to do with the spacing of the characters in the text. I am open to other font choices. I got this one from Blambot. It's called CrimefighterBB.

    Thanks.

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  • teamquigganteamquiggan Registered User
    edited July 2007
    I love your comic!
    One question, are all your guys perpetually in a state of lack of sleep?

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    I love your comic!
    One question, are all your guys perpetually in a state of lack of sleep?
    Thanks!

    Funny thing, this was one of the first comments on my site from one of the readers.

    Look for Jeramy Cook's comment on this comic.

    Long answer, the characters are modeled after two game developers who are used to working 14+ hour days, and me (a recovering insomniac/ new father). So, yes, the 3 of us are perpetually tired.

    Short answer, I like drawing eyes that way.

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  • thundercakethundercake Registered User
    edited July 2007
    I like it...the ark of the covenant one made me burst out laughing.

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    I like it...the ark of the covenant one made me burst out laughing.
    Thanks! I enjoyed making that one. I dig your stuff too. The "sisters" painting reminds me of Joss Whedon's Fray. It looks like Mel and Loo. If you havent read Fray, do yourself a favor.

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  • BenGPTBenGPT Registered User
    edited July 2007
    I hate you for posting Harry Potter spoilers, even if they WERE hidden behind a slab of carbonite.

    That said, I lol'd. Perspective is the biggest issue, as far as I can tell.

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    BenGPT wrote: »
    I hate you for posting Harry Potter spoilers, even if they WERE hidden behind a slab of carbonite.

    That said, I lol'd. Perspective is the biggest issue, as far as I can tell.
    I actually got those spoilers off this forum.

    Any particular perspective issues? The carbonite slab in the last panel looks a little off to me.

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  • BenGPTBenGPT Registered User
    edited July 2007
    Yeah, it's not so much in this comic as the previous ones. The left side of the slab is a bit wonky, the first panel thing on the side isn't quite parallel to the other one (at least the top). I'm no master of perspective, but I think setting up each panel beforehand should do the trick, even if it means drawing a bunch of stuff outside the frame to get things right.

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    Comic #12 is up. A Potterless world is a grim lonely place indeed.

    I had to completely redraw panel 4 from scratch after numerous failed attempts to draw Joel from a "straight on" view. I think I managed it with Josh, but I couldnt make Joel's hair look right. I think most comics do this. You almost never see anyone looking straight ahead. I tried to see how they did it with Fry in Futurama (since the two characters have similar hair) but I couldnt find any reference material online. Maybe they just avoided it with him to. The perspective in the final panel is still a little askew. This comic has a shout out to any of you "Frisky Dingo" fans.

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  • MKRMKR Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Do you mind if I make a thread for your comic in SE++? You'll get more critiques, though they'll be interspersed with edits, cats with captions and such.

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    MKR wrote: »
    Do you mind if I make a thread for your comic in SE++? You'll get more critiques, though they'll be interspersed with edits, cats with captions and such.
    Go for it. Feel free to link directly to any of the images on my site.

    -Joel

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  • MKRMKR Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    MKR wrote: »
    Do you mind if I make a thread for your comic in SE++? You'll get more critiques, though they'll be interspersed with edits, cats with captions and such.
    Go for it. Feel free to link directly to any of the images on my site.

    -Joel

    http://forums.penny-arcade.com/showthread.php?t=30887

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    MKR wrote: »
    Wow, its already shaping up to be a total disaster! Those guys move fast. Like jackals to a carcass.

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  • MKRMKR Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    MKR wrote: »
    Wow, its already shaping up to be a total disaster! Those guys move fast. Like jackals to a carcass.

    There are always hecklers in threads like that. My LucidTV thread is a good example: http://forums.penny-arcade.com/showthread.php?t=24704

    It had a rough start, but has lasted.

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  • BenGPTBenGPT Registered User
    edited July 2007
    Bahaha.
    Personally, I felt like the axe--especially panel 3--needed more emphasis somehow. I thought the front view came out nicely, except it made very clear the fact that your characters have the wrong number of digits. Say it's stylistic all you want, it's still gonna bother me.

    = \

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    MKR wrote: »
    There are always hecklers in threads like that. My LucidTV thread is a good example: http://forums.penny-arcade.com/showthread.php?t=24704

    It had a rough start, but has lasted.
    Yeah, when I want to stay in the AC because the people are nicer, that says a lot about SE++.

    Not a single piece of constructive criticism to be found. I appreciate the effort on your part, MKR, but if the only responses you get are "OMG TEH FAGZ. U SUCKSORZ!LOL1010!L!OL!O!!!!!!!" I just dont see the point.

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  • MaydayMayday Cutting edge goblin tech Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Not a single piece of constructive criticism to be found. I appreciate the effort on your part, MKR, but if the only responses you get are "OMG TEH FAGZ. U SUCKSORZ!LOL1010!L!OL!O!!!!!!!" I just dont see the point.

    Ironically, that's how 90% noobs posting here perceive OUR crits :D

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    BenGPT wrote: »
    Bahaha.
    Personally, I felt like the axe--especially panel 3--needed more emphasis somehow. I thought the front view came out nicely, except it made very clear the fact that your characters have the wrong number of digits. Say it's stylistic all you want, it's still gonna bother me.

    = \
    I here ya. I almost outlined the axe in black so it would stick out more. As far as Im concerned, cartoon have four finger, plain and simple.

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  • BroloBrolo Broseidon Lord of the BroceanRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    MKR wrote: »
    MKR wrote: »
    Do you mind if I make a thread for your comic in SE++? You'll get more critiques, though they'll be interspersed with edits, cats with captions and such.
    Go for it. Feel free to link directly to any of the images on my site.

    -Joel

    http://forums.penny-arcade.com/showthread.php?t=30887


    Man MKR I wish I had seen you mention this before you posted the link. SE++ is not the place for this sort of thing.

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited July 2007
    Mayday wrote: »
    Ironically, that's how 90% noobs posting here perceive OUR crits :D
    Understood, but theres a big difference in "you need to work on your art and your story is weak, etc, etc..."

    and (i'm quoting), "That comic sucks, you suck, your father's a whore."

    Oh well. To each his own. Hopefully the thread will get locked or deleted.

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  • MKRMKR Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Rolo wrote: »
    MKR wrote: »
    MKR wrote: »
    Do you mind if I make a thread for your comic in SE++? You'll get more critiques, though they'll be interspersed with edits, cats with captions and such.
    Go for it. Feel free to link directly to any of the images on my site.

    -Joel

    http://forums.penny-arcade.com/showthread.php?t=30887


    Man MKR I wish I had seen you mention this before you posted the link. SE++ is not the place for this sort of thing.

    I PMd Knob asking for a lock, but his lock finger is sleeping. :(

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  • BroloBrolo Broseidon Lord of the BroceanRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    MKR wrote: »
    Rolo wrote: »
    MKR wrote: »
    MKR wrote: »
    Do you mind if I make a thread for your comic in SE++? You'll get more critiques, though they'll be interspersed with edits, cats with captions and such.
    Go for it. Feel free to link directly to any of the images on my site.

    -Joel

    http://forums.penny-arcade.com/showthread.php?t=30887


    Man MKR I wish I had seen you mention this before you posted the link. SE++ is not the place for this sort of thing.

    I PMd Knob asking for a lock, but his lock finger is sleeping. :(


    Yeah Knob's pretty content to see how far south this will go. Most likely people will get bored and the thread will die, but if the abuse just stagnates into the same barbs he might lock it. Bogey would have been a better choice, or maybe Ori.

    Hijinks: SE++ isn't really a place to go for critiques on anything, so don't let their reactions get you down. While the AC's purpose is to be helpful and useful, SE is just an entertainment forum.

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  • MKRMKR Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Rolo wrote: »
    MKR wrote: »
    Rolo wrote: »
    MKR wrote: »
    MKR wrote: »
    Do you mind if I make a thread for your comic in SE++? You'll get more critiques, though they'll be interspersed with edits, cats with captions and such.
    Go for it. Feel free to link directly to any of the images on my site.

    -Joel

    http://forums.penny-arcade.com/showthread.php?t=30887


    Man MKR I wish I had seen you mention this before you posted the link. SE++ is not the place for this sort of thing.

    I PMd Knob asking for a lock, but his lock finger is sleeping. :(


    Yeah Knob's pretty content to see how far south this will go. Most likely people will get bored and the thread will die, but if the abuse just stagnates into the same barbs he might lock it. Bogey would have been a better choice, or maybe Ori.

    Hijinks: SE++ isn't really a place to go for critiques on anything, so don't let their reactions get you down. While the AC's purpose is to be helpful and useful, SE is just an entertainment forum.

    I PMd Ori too, but PMd Knob when I realized he was the only SE++ mod on.

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User
    edited August 2007
    Here's the most recent comic. This was really just an excuse to draw the different costumes. Any feedback is welcomed and appreciated.

    -Joel

    2007-08-08-comic-con-07-firefly-venture-brothers-fifth-element.jpg

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  • MKRMKR Registered User regular
    edited August 2007
    Multipass!

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  • anableanable Registered User regular
    edited August 2007
    That's a pretty good job dressing up your characters while still keeping their unique qualities. I think the joke is flat, but again, the costumes are well done.

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