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Comic Critique! NSFW

dillingertacopwrdillingertacopwr Registered User new member
edited July 2007 in Artist's Corner
This is a very borderline comic so i am going with NSFW. I would really appreciate a critique. It is called Three Cheers for Richard and it is a comedy. How you guys enjoy (if at all) the humor and concept would be nice to know! There are 5 strips out and here are links to each in order:

http://www.iquibble.net/?p=40

http://www.iquibble.net/?p=41

http://www.iquibble.net/?p=49

http://www.iquibble.net/?p=52

http://www.iquibble.net/?p=56

there they are! thank you all for your critiques and comments!

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  • GhostManOnThirdGhostManOnThird Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    wow.

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  • AldoAldo Hippo Hooray Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    A lot of penis jokes, more penis jokes and hey! another penis joke.

    The art is simple, MS Paint, I assume.

    I find this horribly childish, both in humor and in style. Maybe the kids like this, I sure as hell don't.

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  • Mojo_JojoMojo_Jojo We are only now beginning to understand the full power and ramifications of sexual intercourse Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    If you post the images rather than links you might win some criticism. As it stands you'll just win a locked thread.

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  • JWashkeJWashke Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Man, what ?

    I really don't think he should post images, the links at least save the lazy.

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  • LlyLly Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Yeah, no need to inflict this on the lazy.

    Art = terrible
    Jokes = well, nonexistant

    What on earth drove you to make a comic about a penis having adventures to kill the evil lord Titties?!

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  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Apparently, you think about penises way too much.

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  • DMACDMAC Come at me, bro! Moderator Mod Emeritus
    edited July 2007
    Boobs!

    ...

    Fart!

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  • Kewop DecamKewop Decam Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Are you sure this comic is a comedy and not a retardedy?


    see what I did there? Should I make my own comic now?

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  • DMACDMAC Come at me, bro! Moderator Mod Emeritus
    edited July 2007
    No.

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  • multimoogmultimoog Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    dillingertacopwr wrote: »
    How you guys enjoy (if at all) the humor and concept

    None (at all). You know who'd get a big laugh? Your drunk friends, after a night of serious drinking. But only your friends, as I'm sure you've made these in-jokes with them a bunch of times and they already think thay're comedy gold.

    Anyone else should be sheieded from their hideous glare.

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  • Vargas PrimeVargas Prime King of Nothing Just a ShowRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Well, I liked it.






    Aside from the art, which seems to be created solely using the ellipse tool in MS Paint.

    And the writing, which primarily consists of grade-school phallic puns.

    @ OP: Are you 13? Because that might explain this.

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  • Creambun 007Creambun 007 Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    I'm voting he used flash. Either way, it... wasn't good. I hate it when a comic is just "Talking heads"


    ew.

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  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Creambun 007 wrote: »
    "Talking heads"

    Is there some sort of pun here?

    Because, ew.

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  • dillingertacopwrdillingertacopwr Registered User new member
    edited July 2007
    Actually I used Photoshop, and I'm not 13.. I'm 18. Thanks for the (few) nice comments, viable critiques and virtually nonexistant constructive criticism. Everyone else just flamed. And I can't tell if everyone got it, but the "talking heads" are meant to be simple penis looking people. The art is dumbed down for two reasons:

    A) I felt a "too detailed" penis character will turn the little joke into obscenity

    B) I only have one hand seeing as my dominant hand is in a cast for 6 weeks from surgery so I'm making the best with what I have.

    Again, thanks to the people who did not act like they were in grade school by needlessly insulting me. You could have just said you're not into innuendos of any kind.

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  • MaydayMayday Cutting edge goblin tech Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    So you were waiting to have your dominant hand in a cast to post a thread in the AC?

    Good times.

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  • VirumVirum Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Hey man, I love innuendos. The Double Entendre is my favorite kind of joke.

    But I hate your comic because it's not clever, it's childish, and it's stupid.

    Oh, and not funny.

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  • SpongeCakeSpongeCake Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    dillingertacopwr wrote: »
    Again, thanks to the people who did not act like they were in grade school


    Help! Drowning... in... irony!

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  • DMACDMAC Come at me, bro! Moderator Mod Emeritus
    edited July 2007
    dillingertacopwr wrote: »
    And I can't tell if everyone got it, but the "talking heads" are meant to be simple penis looking people.

    OH! Now I get it!

    BTW, drawing a penis and making penis jokes isn't innuendo. Innuendo implies that something is insinuated or hinted at. Not "Hi, I'm a big penis! Ha ha! Penis!"

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  • multimoogmultimoog Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Maybe it's a British thing, but for the most part having a talking penis fighting boobs as a main character lacks the kind of subtlety that plays well around these parts (now THAT'S irony! But sad because it's true, as well).

    The plot of your comic is the kind of thing that would be funny if it were a one-shot joke in a comic with a better sense of humor that is making fun of bad comics.

    There's no room for critique in your work as it currently exists; you need to burn it down and rebuild, hopefully creating characters that aren't made solely with shape tools and that are not, for preference, genetalia.

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  • core tacticcore tactic Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Jesus, how hard is it to make penis jokes? It's not exactly a science, but you still didn't do too well.

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  • Creambun 007Creambun 007 Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Did anyone else notice the hidden joke in the title of this thread? "comic critique! SEMI N sfw" Now that's subtlety I can appreciate.

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  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    dillingertacopwr wrote: »
    I felt a "too detailed" penis character will turn the little joke into obscenity

    Pffft, excuses! I bet you couldn't draw a realistic penis to save your life. C'mon, I dare you, make yourself even gayer.

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  • DMACDMAC Come at me, bro! Moderator Mod Emeritus
    edited July 2007
    dick.jpg

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  • AdrienAdrien Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Can't... stop... looking...

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  • xbainxxbainx Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    I love when these dudes get all mad you guys aren't being constructive. What the fuck was anyone supposed to say about this? It ain't mickey mouse, it's not erotic or funny or well drawn plus IT's A TALKING DICK! But no it's awesome. Maybe get an evil vagina in there. Really let your creativity soar.

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  • JWashkeJWashke Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    He already has evil titties, the Vagina needs to be the bumbling sidekick.

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  • multimoogmultimoog Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    I'm amazed this hasn't been locked yet.

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  • MaydayMayday Cutting edge goblin tech Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    I'm amazed that you're amazed this hasn't been locked yet.

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  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Amazing!

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  • DMACDMAC Come at me, bro! Moderator Mod Emeritus
    edited July 2007
    Boobies!

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  • core tacticcore tactic Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Penis!

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  • MaydayMayday Cutting edge goblin tech Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
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  • DMACDMAC Come at me, bro! Moderator Mod Emeritus
    edited July 2007
    Now that's innuendo!

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