Bee Mecha Bikini Woman xD

Belruel

Something i did a rough lineart for a few days ago in the mspaint thread in SE++, it was going to be nice and simple with some clean coloring, but then i got carried away coloring the boots, so i re-did most of the visible fleshy parts to match the coloring i had done.

i still plan on coloring a simple version of it later, but for now i'm done.

this was the beginning lineart.



and this is after i completed it with modifications.



what do you guys think? do you like the modified version? should i still color a simple version?

also, any advice or color overs are welcome, i am very new to drawing/coloring in this style.

earthwormadam

I liked the original lineart better. It has a charming simplicity.

The new one has giant bazongas.

Killjoy

Also lengthy calves.

TehSpectre

I like the cartoony original, myself.

Projeck

the second is a little poorly rendered, looks kind of like burn/dodge tool.

Belruel

Projeck wrote: »

the second is a little poorly rendered, looks kind of like burn/dodge tool.

eww. burn and dodge. never touch those.

also, i love the first one too, when i color it all cartoony i'll post it up here, prolly later today or in the next few days.

Wren

wheres the suit?

Belruel

Wren wrote: »

wheres the suit?

:winky:

DarkPrimus

The original one was much less mannish-looking.

Mayday

I'm no expert but here's a quickie:
-upped the contrast
-added highlights where they were due
-reinforced the radiosity
-added shading on the calves armour
-saturated the shadows a bit (were you doing them in black?)


If you really wanted to get it right, here's a very good tutorial: http://www.itchstudios.com/psg/art_tut.htm


Now we can start discussing anatomy...

Godfather

That is one really scrunched up face.

So tiny!

rockmonkey

I too like the original.

She could use shorter legs.

Dee Kae

Titally awesome.

Grim Outlook

there's no way she could fly with those huge new tits and legs

TheySlashThem

the latter version isn't bad by any means, but I gotta agree that the first's simplicity was more pleasing to the eye

Belruel

Mayday wrote: »

I'm no expert but here's a quickie:
-upped the contrast
-added highlights where they were due
-reinforced the radiosity
-added shading on the calves armour
-saturated the shadows a bit (were you doing them in black?)


If you really wanted to get it right, here's a very good tutorial: http://www.itchstudios.com/psg/art_tut.htm


Now we can start discussing anatomy...

thanks, that helps a lot. yea, coloring is my weak point, the shadows are not in black. they're in a deep blue-grey, on the skin at least. (also, you made her skin look so much better, i need to practice that so bad)

i can see now that i should have toned down the rendering in the boots to make them smoother, and added a more definitive light source/shadow. thank you so much for taking the time to give me a detailed crit, it helped so much. also, that tutorial is gold, thanks for the link.

i also like the original, and i'll so color it and post it soon.

Tonkka

I think her lower legs are too long in relation to her upper legs... thigh:calf ratio is off.

earthwormadam

I think quite a few things about the ratio is off. Like the forearm is way too long.

Also rendering all the hair like that is unnecessary. It looked cooler before you spent all that time overdoing each strain of hair. The torso (thorax?) is practically non-existent, which makes her upper body look way off compared to the super long legs.

The improvement in the hand itself was a step in the right direction though, it looks much better in the new version.

NakedElf

Her lips look like they were pasted on her face, and not quite in the right spot (too much chin, no space between them and the nose...) The ... thing on her crotch looks really uncomfortable (would you want to walk around with a piece of metal between your legs?), and the stuff pasted over her nipples isn't going to give her any support at all.

Her wings are a good shape, but they look like they're coming out of the back of her neck.

vrempire

I like the lineart version.
I't very nice to see and watch. The coloured version one seems not in line with the way the character is design. Maybe a cheerful colour can make it look better.