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  • NotASenatorNotASenator Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    You spelled "I don't give a shit" wrong.

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  • FaricazyFaricazy Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    Faricazy wrote: »
    Faricazy wrote: »
    Faricazy wrote: »
    fari that burn is awful it does not get to be called wicked.
    fuck you it's wicked

    it is stale and predictable.
    so is sex with you

    my speech is rockinnn

    no, sex with me is quick and disappointing, followed by extreme awkwardness

    your speech lacks flavor.

    it lacks pizazz.

    it lacks flair and razzle dazzle.
    oh fuck flavor

    it's the required college speech course, most people's speeches are daft and boring

    i wrote this one as a rant and it's all the better for it

    but it is not ranty enough.

    also worst burn ever.

    sorry, but F- Fari.

    See me after class
    i'm not fucking you for a better grade

    Faricazy on
  • The Lovely BastardThe Lovely Bastard Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    Faricazy wrote: »
    Faricazy wrote: »
    Faricazy wrote: »
    Faricazy wrote: »
    fari that burn is awful it does not get to be called wicked.
    fuck you it's wicked

    it is stale and predictable.
    so is sex with you

    my speech is rockinnn

    no, sex with me is quick and disappointing, followed by extreme awkwardness

    your speech lacks flavor.

    it lacks pizazz.

    it lacks flair and razzle dazzle.
    oh fuck flavor

    it's the required college speech course, most people's speeches are daft and boring

    i wrote this one as a rant and it's all the better for it

    but it is not ranty enough.

    also worst burn ever.

    sorry, but F- Fari.

    See me after class
    i'm not fucking you for a better grade

    don't think of it this way.

    think of it as a scholastic adventure

    The Lovely Bastard on
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  • FaricazyFaricazy Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    Faricazy wrote: »
    Faricazy wrote: »
    Faricazy wrote: »
    Faricazy wrote: »
    fari that burn is awful it does not get to be called wicked.
    fuck you it's wicked

    it is stale and predictable.
    so is sex with you

    my speech is rockinnn

    no, sex with me is quick and disappointing, followed by extreme awkwardness

    your speech lacks flavor.

    it lacks pizazz.

    it lacks flair and razzle dazzle.
    oh fuck flavor

    it's the required college speech course, most people's speeches are daft and boring

    i wrote this one as a rant and it's all the better for it

    but it is not ranty enough.

    also worst burn ever.

    sorry, but F- Fari.

    See me after class
    i'm not fucking you for a better grade

    don't think of it this way.

    think of it as a scholastic adventure
    i'm pretty sure the magic schoolbus already did an episode on anuses

    Faricazy on
  • JimothyJimothy Not in front of the fox he's with the owlRegistered User regular
    edited December 2007
    Faricazy wrote: »
    Jimothy wrote: »
    I haven't even had any papers this semester and I still wish I had heard of this.
    oh you cunt

    Business school, dude. How slackers get their degree.

    Though I have had a lot of hard tests, if that helps.

    Jimothy on
  • CG FaggotryCG Faggotry BristolRegistered User regular
    edited December 2007
    I might post my thesis on single molecule fluorescence via Nd-YAG lasers just to spite the OP.

    CG Faggotry on
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  • Me Too!Me Too! __BANNED USERS regular
    edited December 2007
    Fuck that, I'm going to post my paper about being Batman.

    Me Too! on
  • ascotascot Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    If someone'd like to post their essay on critically examining the concepts of social inequality, power and oppression in relation to the individual, group and society, I'd be more than happy to "proofread" it for them

    >.>

    <.<

    ascot on
  • PoorochondriacPoorochondriac Ah, man Ah, jeezRegistered User regular
    edited December 2007
    Faricazy wrote: »
    Faricazy wrote: »
    Faricazy wrote: »
    fari that burn is awful it does not get to be called wicked.
    fuck you it's wicked

    it is stale and predictable.
    so is sex with you

    my speech is rockinnn

    no, sex with me is quick and disappointing, followed by extreme awkwardness

    your speech lacks flavor.

    it lacks pizazz.

    it lacks flair and razzle dazzle.
    oh fuck flavor

    it's the required college speech course, most people's speeches are daft and boring

    i wrote this one as a rant and it's all the better for it

    but it is not ranty enough.

    also worst burn ever.

    sorry, but F- Fari.

    See me after class

    Sorry Fari, but I'm gonna have to back TLB on this one.

    If you were going for vitriol, you missed the mark. The whole speech was pretty generic and bland. And the "wicked burn" was neither wicked, nor particularly burny. The points have all been made before, and the presentation was merely competent. There was nothing to elevate it above the thousands of other speeches written by gamers about the exact same thing for classes over the years.

    Also, cox dix lol

    Poorochondriac on
  • PoorochondriacPoorochondriac Ah, man Ah, jeezRegistered User regular
    edited December 2007
    ascot wrote: »
    If someone'd like to post their essay on critically examining the concepts of social inequality, power and oppression in relation to the individual, group and society, I'd be more than happy to "proofread" it for them

    >.>

    <.<

    What a retardedly broad topic.

    Your teacher sucks.

    Poorochondriac on
  • FaricazyFaricazy Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    i wasn't trying to elevate anything

    i don't like public speaking and my speeches typically suck and i'm sort proud of that one

    anyway

    the best word to use in essays is "likewise"

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  • Charles KinboteCharles Kinbote Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    where is my san andreas at

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  • ascotascot Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    ascot wrote: »
    If someone'd like to post their essay on critically examining the concepts of social inequality, power and oppression in relation to the individual, group and society, I'd be more than happy to "proofread" it for them

    >.>

    <.<

    What a retardedly broad topic.

    Your teacher sucks.

    Okay, that's 8 words, I just need 2992 more by tomorrow morning, k?

    ascot on
  • OrikaeshigitaeOrikaeshigitae Registered User, ClubPA regular
    edited December 2007
    ascot wrote: »
    ascot wrote: »
    If someone'd like to post their essay on critically examining the concepts of social inequality, power and oppression in relation to the individual, group and society, I'd be more than happy to "proofread" it for them

    >.>

    <.<

    What a retardedly broad topic.

    Your teacher sucks.

    Okay, that's 8 words, I just need 2992 more by tomorrow morning, k?

    hey sweet i'm writing a multi-thousand paper right now too

    Orikaeshigitae on
  • Me Too!Me Too! __BANNED USERS regular
    edited December 2007
    I have a notebook full of poetry that I'm writing for English.
    The best one is about seven drunken midgets.

    Me Too! on
  • FaricazyFaricazy Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    for my ancient india final paper we have to address

    . The origins and main teachings of Hinduism in the context of the migration of Indo-Aryans.
    2. The formation of religious texts such as the Vedas, Upanishads, and especially the epics and the Laws of Manu. You should explain the impact of these texts on the Indian society.
    3. In what ways do the Hindu beliefs permeate the society (as seen in the Kama Sutra)?
    4. How do the teachings, beliefs and practice of Hinduism give an identity to Indians and Indians living abroad? What kind of social problems, disparities, and conflicts do they create? You have to use Amartya Sen here.
    5. What is the Hindu identity do the Indians have?


    in 1800 words MAX

    to give a frame of reference, the previous paper was about the origins and effects of the Laws of Manu and the Kama Sutra on the Hindu culture, including castes, gender roles, and history. in that paper i mostly ignored the history part of the question and the paper still came to be about 1600 words.

    on one hand this is good because i won't have to bullshit much, on the other hand, what the hell man, even if i sucked i could write at least 2500 words with all those questions.

    Faricazy on
  • PoorochondriacPoorochondriac Ah, man Ah, jeezRegistered User regular
    edited December 2007
    Best paper I ever wrote was about Crime and Punishment, illustrating how Raskolnikov exhibited every single symptom of Multiple Personality Disorder, decades before the first diagnosis of such an ailment. It was radtacular.

    Poorochondriac on
  • OrikaeshigitaeOrikaeshigitae Registered User, ClubPA regular
    edited December 2007
    Faricazy wrote: »
    for my ancient india final paper we have to address

    . The origins and main teachings of Hinduism in the context of the migration of Indo-Aryans.
    2. The formation of religious texts such as the Vedas, Upanishads, and especially the epics and the Laws of Manu. You should explain the impact of these texts on the Indian society.
    3. In what ways do the Hindu beliefs permeate the society (as seen in the Kama Sutra)?
    4. How do the teachings, beliefs and practice of Hinduism give an identity to Indians and Indians living abroad? What kind of social problems, disparities, and conflicts do they create? You have to use Amartya Sen here.
    5. What is the Hindu identity do the Indians have?


    in 1800 words MAX

    to give a frame of reference, the previous paper was about the origins and effects of the Laws of Manu and the Kama Sutra on the Hindu culture, including castes, gender roles, and history. in that paper i mostly ignored the history part of the question and the paper still came to be about 1600 words.

    on one hand this is good because i won't have to bullshit much, on the other hand, what the hell man, even if i sucked i could write at least 2500 words with all those questions.

    The love letters aid the audience’s understanding of the tangled romantic relationships within The Two Gentlemen of Verona by serving as a property soliloquy: the audience may gain insight into the state of mind of the author, intended recipient, and messenger of the letters by examining the valentines’ life as a hand property.

    wootah

    Orikaeshigitae on
  • Me Too!Me Too! __BANNED USERS regular
    edited December 2007
    phewftah

    Me Too! on
  • FaricazyFaricazy Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    Faricazy wrote: »
    for my ancient india final paper we have to address

    . The origins and main teachings of Hinduism in the context of the migration of Indo-Aryans.
    2. The formation of religious texts such as the Vedas, Upanishads, and especially the epics and the Laws of Manu. You should explain the impact of these texts on the Indian society.
    3. In what ways do the Hindu beliefs permeate the society (as seen in the Kama Sutra)?
    4. How do the teachings, beliefs and practice of Hinduism give an identity to Indians and Indians living abroad? What kind of social problems, disparities, and conflicts do they create? You have to use Amartya Sen here.
    5. What is the Hindu identity do the Indians have?


    in 1800 words MAX

    to give a frame of reference, the previous paper was about the origins and effects of the Laws of Manu and the Kama Sutra on the Hindu culture, including castes, gender roles, and history. in that paper i mostly ignored the history part of the question and the paper still came to be about 1600 words.

    on one hand this is good because i won't have to bullshit much, on the other hand, what the hell man, even if i sucked i could write at least 2500 words with all those questions.

    The love letters aid the audience’s understanding of the tangled romantic relationships within The Two Gentlemen of Verona by serving as a property soliloquy: the audience may gain insight into the state of mind of the author, intended recipient, and messenger of the letters by examining the valentines’ life as a hand property.
    wootah
    is that your thesis?

    good luck with the bullshit

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  • FutoreFutore Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    Lol! wrote: »
    I have a notebook full of poetry that I'm writing for English.
    The best one is about seven drunken midgets.

    I once wrote a shameful haiku about part-midgets in order to reach the number of required lines of poetry in a class journal. The teacher realized this and laughed at how ashamed i was.

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  • OrikaeshigitaeOrikaeshigitae Registered User, ClubPA regular
    edited December 2007
    Faricazy wrote: »
    Orikae wrote:
    The love letters aid the audience’s understanding of the tangled romantic relationships within The Two Gentlemen of Verona by serving as a property soliloquy: the audience may gain insight into the state of mind of the author, intended recipient, and messenger of the letters by examining the valentines’ life as a hand property.
    wootah
    is that your thesis?

    good luck with the bullshit

    it's actually a research paper, and i have all my research handy

    turns out a lot of people think the same way that i do

    Orikaeshigitae on
  • Me Too!Me Too! __BANNED USERS regular
    edited December 2007
    Futore wrote: »
    Lol! wrote: »
    I have a notebook full of poetry that I'm writing for English.
    The best one is about seven drunken midgets.

    I once wrote a shameful haiku about part-midgets in order to reach the number of required lines of poetry in a class journal. The teacher realized this and laughed at how ashamed i was.

    Things I've covered so far in my poetry notebook:
    Drunk midgets
    Batman
    Bill Nye
    Being on fire
    Losing my keys
    Being lazy
    Some emo sappy piece of shit I wrote during a low moment
    Making fun of people
    People I hate

    Me Too! on
  • FaricazyFaricazy Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    Futore wrote: »
    Lol! wrote: »
    I have a notebook full of poetry that I'm writing for English.
    The best one is about seven drunken midgets.

    I once wrote a shameful haiku about part-midgets in order to reach the number of required lines of poetry in a class journal. The teacher realized this and laughed at how ashamed i was.
    my haiku for great works lit:

    To sate my hunger
    today I had roast pork, oh
    what a tasty meal

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  • ascotascot Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    I don't like the lecturer this essay is for so as much as she wants 3000 words she isn't getting it. She can have 2000 and be thankful she's getting anything at all.

    ascot on
  • FaricazyFaricazy Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    ascot wrote: »
    I don't like the lecturer this essay is for so as much as she wants 3000 words she isn't getting it. She can have 2000 and be thankful she's getting anything at all.
    subliminally tell her to suck your dick through the essay

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  • Me Too!Me Too! __BANNED USERS regular
    edited December 2007
    The last stanza of the Bill Nye poem is nothing but "Bill Bill Bill Bill" for four lines.

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  • OrikaeshigitaeOrikaeshigitae Registered User, ClubPA regular
    edited December 2007
    However, as soon as it is gone, she regrets her harshness and calls Lucetta back, whereupon the cycle repeats, ending in Julia tearing the letter into pieces. This theatricality physically underscores the intense relationship the letter has with emotion and personality. Kiefer agrees: “[the tearing up of the letter] effectively engages the interest of the audience… What Shakespeare can effectively convey is Julia’s state of mind, as the audience eavesdrops on her thoughts. Consequently, he shifts the focus of the episode from the words of the letter itself […] to the psyche of the letter’s recipient.” (Kiefer 68)

    is this even any good, i can't tell

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  • scarlet st.scarlet st. Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    So can someone proofread this? I'm a little shakey on my grammar :3
     新歌舞伎と言うのはなんでしょうか。明治時代、普通の歌舞伎劇は当時の政府に変えさせられた。しかし、政府は海外の観客に、文明開化した歌舞伎を見せてあげたかった。それで、作家は適切な作品を書かなくてはいけなかった。西洋の演劇の内容を知ってる作家は近代的な筋立てを書いた。それから、明治時代の演劇改良運動と言う運動始まった。戦後日本の歌舞伎は、このように続いたが、色々な新歌舞伎劇も生まれた。普通の新しい作品はすごく海外の演劇みたいだが、三代目市川猿之助と呼ばれる俳優は、伝統的な外連と古典を復活させた。戦後、独立している劇場と劇団は自分のユニークなスタイルを生み出した事である。それも劇団は、色々な有名な作品に翻案した事である。例えばスーパー一座と呼ばれる劇団はシェークスピアのマクベスとリア王と言う作品にロック歌舞伎の翻案が出来た。これから、面白くて、一番の独立な劇団や俳優を説明する。
     まず、七代目市川団十郎と呼ばれる俳優は歌舞伎十八番と言う作品収集した。この歌舞伎十八番は大事な歌舞伎劇だけど、 三代目市川猿之助と呼ばれる俳優は、普通の演技の仕方ではない。三代目市川猿之助は尊敬する歌舞伎の名前で呼ばれるけど、一所懸命伝統的な歌舞伎の外連を使 う。現代の明治時代の影響から歌舞伎とは全然違う演技の仕方だ。外連と言うは昔の歌舞伎のパワフルな活動だ、例えば早変わりと宙乗りする事である。明治時 代の演劇改良運動の後で外連のスペクタクルがどんどんなくなってしまった。それでも、三代目市川猿之助の演技は、伝統的な歌舞伎の衣装を使う。この衣装はとても手の込んだ物だから、観客にすごく感動を与える。たしかに、歌舞伎の好きな人によると、本当の歌舞伎の事は早変わり等の外連が崩されるそうである。しかし、外連の仕掛けの好きな人もいる。その人は外連が演技の仕方の必要な要素だと思う。それほど、第二次世界大戦の二十年後で、三代目市川猿之助の「スーパー歌舞伎」、と言う歌舞伎座はすごく人気になった。世界中には歌舞伎が日本の一番有名な物だから、三代目市川猿之助の伝統的な歌舞伎座が続けるが必要がある、と言っても、若者の中では歌舞伎鑑賞をする人を増やすための新しい翻案も必要だ。
      次に「鳥獣戯画」と「スーパー一座」と呼ばれる劇団だ。「鳥獣戯画」は、作家によって、ユニークなスタイルが出来たそうである。そのスタイルは海外のミュージカルみたいな感じだけど、作家は新歌舞伎の標語を使わない。「鳥獣戯画」は、コメディーや家庭内の事を題材にすれば、若者に人気になるそうである。「鳥獣戯画」は、テレビやラジオでも紹介された事もある。「スーパー一座」は二百回以上海外へ演技しに行った事がある。演ずる時、普通の歌舞伎の音楽を使わなくて、その代わりに現代的なロックオペラを使う。毎年、違う歌舞伎劇を演ずるけど、最近「スーパー一座」は、人気がなくなってしまった。
     最後に、「花組芝居」と呼ばれる劇団。「花組芝居」の作家は、加納幸和と呼ばれる人である。加納幸和は、自分のスタイルを作りたいけど、浅くない演技の仕方を作らなければならない。それで、一所懸命新しくて、いつも違う演技の仕方を使い出して、時々素人の劇団を見に行って、色々学ぶ。宣伝する時、「新歌舞伎」と言わなくて、自分の「ネオ歌舞伎」と言う名前を使う。加納幸和の作品の書き方は、複数の伝統的な歌舞伎の作品を集めて、作品の中身を現代的な話に変えて、自分で作品の場所と時代を選んで、古今東西の物を作り出す。加納幸和は、誰もが知っていて、誰もが楽しめる事を目指した。その作品は、パロディーのようだが、加納幸和はパロディーのレーベルは、好きじゃない。例えば、「ザ・隅田川」と言う歌舞伎劇があきたら、他の作品の豪快な事を入れる。その場合、評 論家は歌舞伎のパロディーと言うレビューを多く書くが、加納幸和は、公演や他劇団の俳優を引っきつける。このように、逆境に耐えられる人である。
     歌舞伎は昔のスタイルと新しい翻案を守るべきだ。能と文楽はずっと昔から、同じ感じだから、最近「能」等は人気がなくなっているようだ。よって、歌舞伎が変わる事は大事だ。昔の三代目市川猿之助の「スーパー歌舞伎」の外連とか新しいシェークスピアを演ずる事等、歌舞伎は今まで違う演技のようだ。日本の文化は世界中で有名だけど、毎年演劇を観賞する人は、テレビや映画を観賞する人に比べて、だんだん少なくなっているから、歌舞伎の人気を保つ事は、年々大変になるかもしれません。

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  • Me Too!Me Too! __BANNED USERS regular
    edited December 2007
    You spelled ???????????????????????? wrong.

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  • FaricazyFaricazy Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    needs more likewise

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  • ascotascot Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    I don't like the art about the underscoring

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  • scarlet st.scarlet st. Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    Shit, thanks wiggin
    Now I gotta retype it all! D:

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  • FutoreFutore Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    Best paper I ever wrote was about Crime and Punishment, illustrating how Raskolnikov exhibited every single symptom of Multiple Personality Disorder, decades before the first diagnosis of such an ailment. It was radtacular.

    Best paper I have written yet was an analysis and comparison of The Crucible to the Patriot Act. It showed how the taking away of freedoms are pointless and that fear perpetuates constraint of the lives we wish to hold, years before many Congressman read the Patriot Act. My teacher thought i had a source write it for me.

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  • FaricazyFaricazy Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    sam i don't even know why i bothered clicking that, i knew what it was gonna be

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  • ascotascot Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    Lol! wrote: »
    You spelled ???????????????????????? wrong.

    Your computer got an A+ at sucking

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  • scarlet st.scarlet st. Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    ascot wrote: »
    I don't like the art about the underscoring

    fine_art

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  • ascotascot Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    ascot wrote: »
    I don't like the art about the underscoring

    fine_art

    fuck_off

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  • Me Too!Me Too! __BANNED USERS regular
    edited December 2007
    See you need to mention how ??????????????????? influenced ??????, and the resulting impact on ?????????? ?????????? ??????
    Also, what about ?????????????? ?

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  • scarlet st.scarlet st. Registered User regular
    edited December 2007
    Lol! wrote: »
    See you need to mention how ??????????????????? influenced ??????, and the resulting impact on ?????????? ?????????? ??????
    Also, what about ?????????????? ?

    ohh
    No no maybe you should have a better OS.

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