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New Webcomic (maybe NSFW, but it's nothing heavy)
Cliffjumper
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Hey everyone, I'm starting up a webcomic soon, and I was wondering what you guys thought?
I've done a few strips, but this will probably be the first.
Thanks for your time.
I've done a few strips, but this will probably be the first.
Thanks for your time.
The Transformers Fandom: Consistantly bitching about something or another since 1984.
http://www.nuklearpower.com/2009/03/28/warbot_001/ - "WARBOT In Accounting"
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Yeah, agree'd. I find a lot of people tend to LOVE doing this when they first start out a webcomic. Long-running comic strips can get away with this, but it's usually bad form to run this kind of comic early, especially first.
Tbh the testicles swelling with pride side of the joke came first, then I had to decide upon somethin that made me proud.
I guess I can replace comic with something else.
The Transformers Fandom: Consistantly bitching about something or another since 1984.
http://www.nuklearpower.com/2009/03/28/warbot_001/ - "WARBOT In Accounting"
Linework so good your balls well up
I think that'd be for the best also... let that guy in the 4th panel be there in the 1st or second panel- it is kind of weird that he suddenly appears.
I'm liking the drawing style, though.
Visual image of testicles swelling seems funny. But there really needs to be a more humorous reason for them to be doing so.
Manliness, maybe. I could see it working with a joke about gender-roles.
also, panel 3 needs a neck.
I believe we have our winner.
If this is actually something you considered to be your FIRST strip ... the FIRST representation of your abilities that is supposed to make people interested in reading more ... then just stop now ... wait 5 years and try again.
Your artwork has potential but your sense of humor is typical of a middle schooler that just realized he has some peach fuzz on his nut sack and that breats are a mystical doorway to Narnia.
It seems your first thought for a joke you HAD to write was the swelling with pride aspect of the comic which is beyond stupid.
Take that first joke and throw it out ... dig deeper ... burn the second joke ... then MAYBE MAYBE consider your third joke ...
If your grasping the first turd out the gate your never gonna get nothing but shit on your hands.
So, as for the actual topic of the thread: It's not that funny, except I'd say for the expressions, and I'd give it a few more tries to see what you can produce in terms of humor. I think the art is great for just a casual strip sort of thing.
Srsizzy, thanks for that. Appreciate it.
Castle builder, it's just a bit of fun, mellow out.
But yeh, thanks again for your criticism and advice everyone, I intend to keep at it with your suggestions in mind.
The Transformers Fandom: Consistantly bitching about something or another since 1984.
http://www.nuklearpower.com/2009/03/28/warbot_001/ - "WARBOT In Accounting"
but that doesnt make it good
its not that this comic is bad ... its that it reads as though no thought was put into it at all what so ever
the artwork is mediocre but shows promise, and yet it looks like a sketch and nothing more, as though it was more important to put something on paper then to actually do it right and make something worth looking at
the writting is just bad ... no other word for it ... as though you had 1 thing you thought was an interesting phrase and then felt you had to surround it with context but the context is even worse then the phrase
there are tone of crap movies and comics out there but many of them are crap IN SPITE of the people working on them having put a LOT of WORK and EFFORT into them
when people work hard at something ... even if its crap ... it can be interesting to read or watch because there are things to learn about the decisions the creators made and the effects of those decisions on the resulting product
in this case there are no decisions being made ... MAYBE maybe the tears in the eyes on the third panel is remotely telling and interesting of the ability of the creator to do something subtle and remotely compelling
but other then that this comic is trash
not because the final product is trash
but because it feels like the artist didnt even bothing putting his best foot forward
as though you dont care enough about your work to actually WORK on it
and if YOU dont care
why the fuck should anyone?
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Try offering some constructive criticism, rather than just mere criticism.
Read my crappy comic. Oh man, it just sucks so hard.
If at first you don't succeed, pretend you weren't trying.
Did he offend you?
Cuz i don't see why you would get so up in arms against this humble little comic...
I think the art is good, not great, but the style of it is fresh and unique.
The writing isn't as bad as you make it out to be...it made me laugh...which is kinda hard to do.
So...good job guy...make more.
The Transformers Fandom: Consistantly bitching about something or another since 1984.
http://www.nuklearpower.com/2009/03/28/warbot_001/ - "WARBOT In Accounting"
Sweet comic. I like the style, simple but effective to reflecting the characters emotions. The joke is funny, just because it's not to your taste doesn't mean it's crap.
Oh and Phorcys f**cking owned you Castle Builder.
Personally, I like it as a one off, although it's hard to see where the humour will build from here.
This. It's been a week and a half, man. Post some more drawings, comic or not. The look you have seems to be a mix between River City Ransom and Crayon Shinchan, and that I approve of.
In your case, this is entertaining as a "middle strip" potentially. Is this a "mary jane" comic or are these your characters? What's your story/angle? I'm not going to make shit up and say that every successful comic starts with a vision, but having an angle or general idea of where you're going leads to fewer restarts (which are lame) and fewer missed comics (also lame). Readers hate nothing more than a comic going on hiatus while it's "rebooted."
So where does this go? Who is this guy, and why should I care about his beanbag testicles? Also, are these actual beanbags (which are small things, such as you throw into a box w/ a hole in it in the yard game) or the beanbag chairs that people sit on? Arguably, the chairs. Well, there's the brand called Love Sac, so I think you know where you could go with that. Also, the "main character"'s pupils make him look like he's on E or something, which makes sense in the middle panels but not so much in the first and last. Unless, you know, he's on E.
Thats cute. You actually spent time on me. Cheers!
hahahah this is sig-worthy
one of you assholes sig this, i don't have enough space in mine.