mully-thread - easter card #2 - crits please!

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  • NotASenatorNotASenator Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    I find myself pretty.

    Can I be in a girl magazine?

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  • mullymully Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    do you wear a lot of pink and orange?
    i find those are necessary

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  • KalTorakKalTorak One way or another, they all end up in the Undercity.Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    NotACrook wrote: »
    Instead of a mirror, make it a portal, and fat her is trying to drag her over.

    I assume in order to eat her.

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  • mullymully Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    rip, vultures! rip!

    architect.png

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  • NibCromNibCrom Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    I think I would prefer her thought bubble to be much larger. I like the lobster (crab?)!

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  • mullymully Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    hermit crab! he's supposed to be taking off with her shoe, i think i might try to emphasize that some more.

    thought bubble larger? so like, move her over to the left and let it go from the top to the ocean?

    edit:

    this can be her boyfriend 060512_pipboy.jpg

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  • NotASenatorNotASenator Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    Rhia, you are some kind of wonderful.

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  • mullymully Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    if its because i posted pip-boy, its because bomb noted that she looks like him. ITS JUST THE SMILE.

    also i hate children. i really hope some of these places i plan on applying for freelance with arent like, "so.. why do you like children?"

    i'd come out with a complete schrute answer.

    "because they're necessary."

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  • NibCromNibCrom Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    Well I'm assuming this is for some sort of editorial piece? At least in theory? I just think the girl's imagination should be a focal point, and I don't get that at all from the current arrangement. It was the very last thing I noticed in the picture. It's kind of in a dead zone. If it was larger, and maybe cropped by the upper right corner I think it would help the piece mucho. The styling and renders are nice. I hope my critiques don't make me sound like a jerk. :shock:

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  • earthwormadamearthwormadam ancient crust Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    The flat ocean horizon is sharply straight compared to the rounded curves of the rest of the piece. Looks nice though.

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  • TamTam Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    Mully's turning in to Beavo Part II

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  • NibCromNibCrom Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    Tam wrote: »
    Mully's turning in to Beavo Part II

    part_ii.jpg

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  • NotASenatorNotASenator Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    No, I said it because you make wonderful things.

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  • TamTam Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    Mully, could you try a blue dress for the black lady?

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  • mullymully Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    it's a nice compliment that you're comparing me to beavo but the only thing similar is that i'm now using the pen tool. oh, and i stole her background style in the first one. i just happen to be trying to go for some kid-related stuff, like she has as of late. so there you go.

    @ tam -- tried blue dress on the black lady -- the colours that work are too similar to the mirror colour, and the saturated blue that DOESN'T blend in with the mirror burns my retinas

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  • MeowsvilleMeowsville Registered User
    edited March 2009
    The first image looks like a slam-dunk for any Women's magazine as-is and with fashion tweaking any teen mag as well.

    The second one doesn't immediately suggest the intended audience to me.

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  • WassermeloneWassermelone Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    I think your shapes and concepts are very nice. Unfortunately... they feel soulless? They don't feel very organic. They remind me of clipart.

    My fiance does stuff with strong shapes like you, but she breaks it up with patterns, slight shadows, and subtle textures. It goes a long way to making a computer image seem warm and alive.
    http://2.bp.blogspot.com/_iImcQnxD2Ww/SWoc_qyrUCI/AAAAAAAAAO4/w7tS8cl6ZLA/s1600/Page14.jpg
    *edited for imageshack link
    http://img186.imageshack.us/img186/6567/page14.jpg

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  • bombardierbombardier Moderator mod
    edited March 2009
    I think your shapes and concepts are very nice. Unfortunately... they feel soulless? They don't feel very organic. They remind me of clipart.

    My fiance does stuff with strong shapes like you, but she breaks it up with patterns, slight shadows, and subtle textures. It goes a long way to making a computer image seem warm and alive.
    http://2.bp.blogspot.com/_iImcQnxD2Ww/SWoc_qyrUCI/AAAAAAAAAO4/w7tS8cl6ZLA/s1600/Page14.jpg

    404'd!

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  • mullymully Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    you know, while i know what clipart is.. i don't understand what separates it from any other piece of art.. just that one is used in a multitude of pieces/places (which is i guess what i'm going for, since i'm trying to appease several types of places with one piece).

    these are difficult for me to know how to change without really specific crits, as .. these aren't really my normal thing.. so it already feels somewhat 'soulless'. the hope is that someone will see something in it they like and when i'm focusing on a project, that's when the life will come out.

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  • WassermeloneWassermelone Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    mully wrote: »
    you know, while i know what clipart is.. i don't understand what separates it from any other piece of art.. just that one is used in a multitude of pieces/places (which is i guess what i'm going for, since i'm trying to appease several types of places with one piece).

    these are difficult for me to know how to change without really specific crits, as .. these aren't really my normal thing.. so it already feels somewhat 'soulless'. the hope is that someone will see something in it they like and when i'm focusing on a project, that's when the life will come out.

    Well you are right, technically that would be 'clip' art. But it doesn't have to look like clip art.

    And what I mean by 'look like clip art' is a nebulous, I agree. To me, it tends to to look like something with no real interest, no real punch or personal style quirk. A bit... boring.

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  • TubeTube Administrator, ClubPA admin
    edited March 2009
    I have made art

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    Hobnail wrote: »
    This forum has taken everything from me
    This hurts but I deserve it

  • mullymully Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    there, that DEFINITELY makes it look less like clipart

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  • MustangMustang Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    That couldn't possibly be anymore creepy.

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  • TamTam Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    I thought that was actually Tube for a split second

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  • bombardierbombardier Moderator mod
    edited March 2009
    Tam wrote: »
    I thought that was actually Tube for a split second

    Tube is way more ugly.

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  • mullymully Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    that IS tube
    he was prancing around on his webcam for my viewing pleasure

    also i decided to see how quickly i could pen-tool an MSN doodle i did

    onlylosershavenoses.pngmsntopen.png

    i know i shouldn't be going for speed, but ... 20 minutes! woo!
    i dont know why i dont draw cartoon noses ... ive had the same 'doodle' style for nearly 8 years now, you'd think i would've fixed that.

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  • Mr Sgt SirMr Sgt Sir Registered User
    edited March 2009
    I actually like the very first one the most, the head up looks forlorn. The head down looks more provocative. Also the black woman would be smiling with an ass like that.

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  • mullymully Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    Mr Sgt Sir wrote: »
    I actually like the very first one the most, the head up looks forlorn. The head down looks more provocative.

    this is what i thought too, but everyone disagreed! so i changed it!
    now i feel like she's peeking over her shoulder at herself, all, "damn im so sexy i make myself cry" as opposed to an open-throated SIIIIIIIIIGH I HATE MY LIFE BECAUSE I AM NOT SIZE 0

    but i like it both ways, honestly, i was just surprised by the consensus

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  • MustangMustang Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    Y'know sometimes I'm so sexy I make myself cry, it's a terrible burden to bear, unbelievable sexiness.

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  • FutoreFutore Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    there should be legs on the mirror

    otherwise it looks like a portal. and that is awesome because portals are awesome. but not for a fashion mazagine

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  • MeowsvilleMeowsville Registered User
    edited March 2009
    mully wrote: »
    i know i shouldn't be going for speed, but ... 20 minutes! woo!

    A lot of commercial illustrators that I talk to are all about being fast.... time is money! :^:

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  • WassermeloneWassermelone Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    Meowsville wrote: »
    mully wrote: »
    i know i shouldn't be going for speed, but ... 20 minutes! woo!

    A lot of commercial illustrators that I talk to are all about being fast.... time is money! :^:

    Plus its the best thing you've done in this thread. Its got some actual soul to it!

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  • MeowsvilleMeowsville Registered User
    edited March 2009
    Meowsville wrote: »
    mully wrote: »
    i know i shouldn't be going for speed, but ... 20 minutes! woo!

    A lot of commercial illustrators that I talk to are all about being fast.... time is money! :^:

    Plus its the best thing you've done in this thread. Its got some actual soul to it!

    Yeah. It does! I think its very marketable too. I could very easily see it in a teen girl magazine next to some dating advice column!

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  • mullymully Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    just got my site up ...

    www.iartgood.com

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  • NotASenatorNotASenator Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    looks great, kiddo.

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  • NibCromNibCrom Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    Great URL. :^:

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  • mullymully Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    pacontest2.png

    PA contest WIP
    nearly done, some clean up to do

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  • 2 Marcus 2 Ravens2 Marcus 2 Ravens Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    That is awesome.

    But what has Gabe stuffed down his shirt?

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  • NotASenatorNotASenator Registered User regular
    edited March 2009
    breasts

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  • OrikaeshigitaeOrikaeshigitae Registered User, ClubPA regular
    edited March 2009
    coconuts. nice job solving the lamp problem, mullster.

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