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Penny Arcade Expo 2009 Tribute Demo
iROBONINJA
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Hello there!
I am a new nerdcore MC. This song is dedicated to the Penny Arcade Expo.
Here it is...
Lyrics:
Its the penny arcade
An exposition
On a mission
Yeah we just wanna raid
Cause its a new coalition
Of fusion and fission
And just a little superstition
Oh who am i kiddin
Were just here to game
Cause the haters are lame
Theyre just mad they cant play
With the n00bs and the pros
The 1337 and the fray
You say hello, but say ohai
I am for tommorow
But you are for today
Its a supersonic
Cybernetic
Hydrophonic
Electronic
Extra tonic
Pro robotic
But exotic
Party of lifetime
At the right time
With the right ryhmes
About as sweet as honey
But as sour as lime
So get off of seat
And onto your feet
Boogie down to the beat
Lets Party down at pax
Welcome and greet
Come on everybody lets showem why we 1337
(Chorus)
Were at the Penny Arcade
And We just wanna play
Cause were just here to game
And we don't care what you say
It's just something we do
Were the pros and the noobs
And if you think were fools
We just know that were cool
Omegathon
On my rom
Losin ram
Aell my mom
Local area network
Lag is a jerk
We hit L shift O to quo
And the dolla
Cause thats how we roll
Frontalot, holla
Its a nerds world
We in control
Nerdcore is rising
Cause they our flow
Lightsabers, old school
Energy swords are cool
But dont be a fool
They tools not toys
Not for little boys
You gotta a choice
Red or Blue
It dont matter who
Cause both my guns
Are comin for you
Dont you even try to act cool
Cause we know if its a gimmick
We are the geeks of the world
And were proud to admit it
You can throw tantrum
You can throw a fit
But you might as well quit
Cause we dont care one bit
Chorus x1
(Chatter)
Chorus x3
________________________________________
I am a new nerdcore MC. This song is dedicated to the Penny Arcade Expo.
Here it is...
Lyrics:
Its the penny arcade
An exposition
On a mission
Yeah we just wanna raid
Cause its a new coalition
Of fusion and fission
And just a little superstition
Oh who am i kiddin
Were just here to game
Cause the haters are lame
Theyre just mad they cant play
With the n00bs and the pros
The 1337 and the fray
You say hello, but say ohai
I am for tommorow
But you are for today
Its a supersonic
Cybernetic
Hydrophonic
Electronic
Extra tonic
Pro robotic
But exotic
Party of lifetime
At the right time
With the right ryhmes
About as sweet as honey
But as sour as lime
So get off of seat
And onto your feet
Boogie down to the beat
Lets Party down at pax
Welcome and greet
Come on everybody lets showem why we 1337
(Chorus)
Were at the Penny Arcade
And We just wanna play
Cause were just here to game
And we don't care what you say
It's just something we do
Were the pros and the noobs
And if you think were fools
We just know that were cool
Omegathon
On my rom
Losin ram
Aell my mom
Local area network
Lag is a jerk
We hit L shift O to quo
And the dolla
Cause thats how we roll
Frontalot, holla
Its a nerds world
We in control
Nerdcore is rising
Cause they our flow
Lightsabers, old school
Energy swords are cool
But dont be a fool
They tools not toys
Not for little boys
You gotta a choice
Red or Blue
It dont matter who
Cause both my guns
Are comin for you
Dont you even try to act cool
Cause we know if its a gimmick
We are the geeks of the world
And were proud to admit it
You can throw tantrum
You can throw a fit
But you might as well quit
Cause we dont care one bit
Chorus x1
(Chatter)
Chorus x3
________________________________________
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I'm planning to appear at PAX this year and will ask to perform next year, so feedback would be great so that I may improve.
Thanks!
I couldn't make it all the way through, but the lyrics were quite unappealing and I only made it a minute in. I don't know what to tell you to help improve other than maybe make it more nerdy (more references to things) and less grating on the ears. Also don't say nerdcore. Ever.
The beats alright, but shit man you just rhymed school/fool and toys/boys. It's just bad.
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While it does sound a bit overproduced, I don't understand what you mean by making the song more nerdier. I've updated the OP with the lyrics to show you what I mean.
I'm came in here just to say that. Glad you've beat me to it.
like if you used some cheesy samples from video game soundtracks or something, a good example would be this by Adventure Kid - A Whomp Adventure.
if you don't pay attention to the lyrics you wouldn't know its about video games.
edited for fail.
is it weird that I didn't pay attention to the lyrics of a rap song o_O?
Im guessing this is not the case, but unfortunately the almost childlike complexity of your phrases, especially the chorus, make it sound much more like you are making fun of nerds and not at all like you are relating to them.
I think another part of the problem is the overly numerous times you "shout out" to yourself and the other MC. Like this is nothing more then self promotion and not at all about making a really cool nerd friendly song.
What are you trying to do? Get a lightsaber out of a block of ice?
Not bad at all.