I had a short one in mind...
Starts with a villian in handcuffs in a court room. Villian breaks out and his defense lawyer is chosen for sentry duty. <<Insert fight scene here>> It ends with the villian back in the same courtroom, in full Hannibal Lecter type restraints, and his lawyer now working for the prosecution.
it would be helpful if you cruised over to the site and made sure i didn't screw anything up
proofread and check links and such
Aye aye.
Here are the things I could think of:
On http://candleinsunshine.com/sentryduty/about/ :
1) I think it would be useful to say that the abilities granted by the satellites are super-powers. Something along the lines of "super-normal abilities". I think it's a little too generic otherwise - you and I know that satellites zap you with super-power-juice, but that may not be apparent to some yokel wandering in off the Internet at large. I guess TLB's pitch right below that clears this up, but not everyone might stay for that.
2) TLB's pitch should probably be in quotes to make it obvious that it's, well, a quote. The pitch also uses TLB's, shall we say, creative approach to grammar, which I think is really fun to read on a forum (speaking good is boring), but may be a slight mismatch with the tone of the rest of the page. Totally your call.
3) I love the Sentry Duty FAQ, but I think it would be neat to break it out into a separate page - it's an in-character text that's sitting alongside out-of-character text, and there isn't any explicit contextual separation between the two.
If I go to www.sentryduty.com and click any of the links, the correct page will load, but the URL will remain www.sentryduty.com. I think it would be cool if the URL would update as well, to let people bookmark and link to specific pages on the site.
Overall, I think the site looks great! I really like the humor; spread evenly throughout, but not clubbing you over the head.
yay thank you
i will fix this stuff tomorrow but not tonight because i am le tired
Then we are arch-enemies, and must fight. The URL isn't really a part of the site, and isn't supposed to look pretty the way the rest of the site is; it's supposed to be function-over-form!
Quoththe RavenMiami, FL FOR REALRegistered Userregular
edited August 2010
"Protecting the public is everyone's responsibility."
"Securing public safety is not optional."
"With great responsibility comes great power."
"When duty calls, everyone must answer."
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I wish I could allow that story
But I can't
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it was good
Starts with a villian in handcuffs in a court room. Villian breaks out and his defense lawyer is chosen for sentry duty. <<Insert fight scene here>> It ends with the villian back in the same courtroom, in full Hannibal Lecter type restraints, and his lawyer now working for the prosecution.
but don't write it up just yet
This one. So, so this one. Also i fixed my fuck-hole of a scanner and should have some Zombie Patrol design sketches in here in the next 24 hrs.
yay thank you
i will fix this stuff tomorrow but not tonight because i am le tired
rotating taglines are good
I mean, unless you're a communist
It's too early to start messing with them
But they do all have personalities
"Do your part and be a hero for a day"
"It only takes one person to make a difference"
That could lead to some adventures
maybe
but that story ain't happening for a while
"Securing public safety is not optional."
"With great responsibility comes great power."
"When duty calls, everyone must answer."
"And Justice by All."
I want to rotate between half-serious and half comedy.
I was thinking of
"Like jury duty. But with punching."
it takes one sentry to end it
"It is your civic duty to kick ass."
"Your taxpayer dollars at work. Finally."
Can we also have little tips like "Try to limit property damage when protecting your neighbors."
"Ask not what your country can do to you, but what you can do to your country"
"Superheroes are a Satellite away"
i haven't read any of the new posts in this thread other than like 3 on this page
it is still sentry duty
and you still have done nothing for it
keith
they were so bad I couldn't even respond keith
there was no saving them
you're terrible
If so I'll be back in about a month when my studio has a floor.
also send me some samples of your work in a PM
Sentry Duty: Enjoy your fifteen minutes of flame.
This is the best tagline suggested by far.
Seconded.
Also: "VILLAINS BEWARE! Sentry Duty: Being found guilty by a jury of your peers never looked so good."
like a waning to those who might be thinking about villainy?