Everday Science - Student Film

Jimpy

I based a small school project on Look Around You, the British comedy series. I haven't had really much of any critique except for my class that it was made for, but then again I haven't really shown it to anyone either. So I thought I'd post it since we're all a bunch of nerds here.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ITzrvV10FBA

Was my first time working with a (semi-pro) camera (GL1).
Took one and 1/2 day to shoot (about 15 hours).
Took one month to edit (casual editing in Vegas).
I did everything except be the actor.

[Thanks to caterpillar for giving me the idea to post a short]

Mustang

It made me chuckle a few times, the accent isn't exactly cracker jack, but it isn't completely amateur either and I suppose your there to make a film not be an actor. I wasn't really sold on the blood coming out of the mouth, it was more "Okay time to spit a little blood" and less "Oh fuck I'm going to die!"

All in all though, for an amatuer film, I thought it wasn't half bad.

Jimpy

Mustang wrote: »

It made me chuckle a few times, the accent isn't exactly cracker jack, but it isn't completely amateur either and I suppose your there to make a film not be an actor. I wasn't really sold on the blood coming out of the mouth, it was more "Okay time to spit a little blood" and less "Oh fuck I'm going to die!"

All in all though, for an amatuer film, I thought it wasn't half bad.

Haha yeah the spitting was the one thing I wasn't sure about. We had another take where he actually spit the olive oil and ketchup mix but it was too hard to see and focus on in the camera. For some reason I didn't really think about telling him 'not to drool the blood'.

About the voice; I'm certainly not a professional voice actor although I do amateur work I was really trying to go for a over the top British accent similiar to Dean Learner on 'Garth Marenghi's Darkplace' because I watched to much Adult Swim at that period of my life.

Mojo_Jojo

You've got the look bang on, but the voice over isn't very good at all. It doesn't really sound like a British accent at all(being English, I think I'm a fair judge), in parts it sounds a bit like one of those terrible 50's(?) era American comics doing an "oriental" accent.

The basic idea of the writing is good, but the individual jokes all fall flat.

So, get a better voice actor and writer, and you're set, because as I said, the look is absolutely spot on. Aside from the paper rabbit, maybe you could've done some kind of tilt shifting on a real rabbit (if you can tilt shift a moving imagine, I'm a little fuzzy. You could always do it in post).

Jake!

g'day mate. Yeah, the voice was awful. It kept veering into Australian. The good thing about Look Around You was how close it skirted to plausibility, whilst simultaneously dealing with absurdities. Yours does the latter too much, and the former hardly ever. You also used bunnies twice.

That said, I agree that you got the look down pretty well. I hope I'm not being overly harsh, I think it's a good start.

Jimpy

Hahaha, I should of expected to encounter some real British folks here. Yeah I realize the voice is over the top. At the last moment I had problems with the voice and was actually very mad while recording it at 3 AM the night before it was due. Script wise I don't have much to say other then I didn't focus much on the script, and that I was doing a film about batteries and there wasn't much else joke-wise.

I have already thought about redoing both script and voice (not really the bunny part) but I really don't know what I would redo them for. Perhaps I'll just wait till I get another chance to do something like it again.