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Antics: unwelcome guests 7/11

FletcherFletcher Registered User regular
edited July 2011 in Artist's Corner
Hello AC, how are things with you?

I've been trying to make myself draw at least a comic a week since late last year, and having gotten sick of deviantart i made a website!

But that is beside the point, as what I really want to know is whether you cool cats could please instruct me in the fine art of arting. I know its pretty much a stick figure comic, but I'm hoping others can point out things i need to work on, things I'm missing, things i need to remove entirely, stuff like that.

I've changed style a little bit since the first one (which i hope is noticable because i hate the way the first few look), and I'm trying to force myself to cut down on excess panels. Do you guys think 6-8 panels is reasonable at this size?

Also somebody pointed out recently that the comic was getting into "talking heads" territory, so I'm trying to change things up a little more by throwing in 'props' and changing viewpoints a little. Is it noticable? Any tips on writing 'funny' would also be appreciated!


first (spoilered for your v-scroll)
2008-10-25.jpg

and the most recent ones (again with the v-scroll)
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2009-04-07.jpg

2009-04-13.jpg

2009-04-15.jpg

2009-04-22.jpg

please put your critiques inside me

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  • MustangMustang Arbiter of Unpopular Opinions Registered User regular
    edited April 2009
    Reminds me of a less crude version of Polkout.
    The writing is great. Granted the drawing is rudimentary, but it does what it needs too so it doesn't matter.
    It's all thumbs up from me.

    Mustang on
  • earthwormadamearthwormadam ancient crust Registered User regular
    edited April 2009
    Fire Hazard is my new hero.

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  • FletcherFletcher Registered User regular
    edited April 2009
    Mustang wrote: »
    Reminds me of a less crude version of Polkout.
    The writing is great. Granted the drawing is rudimentary, but it does what it needs too so it doesn't matter.
    It's all thumbs up from me.
    I hadn't seen polkout before, but after reading it that is totally what i was aiming for. Indeed the drawing is rudimentary but i'm glad it works, phew
    Fire Hazard is my new hero.
    inside all of us there is a tiny flame that will never go out (it's your soul)

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited April 2009
    I like your six-panel layout. It makes the comics look like single page comics.

    What I would prefer is when you have 4 regular panels, and only one panel on the bottom, have that last panel be as wide as the two panels above it, so that each row has a uniform height and width, but they vary in how many panels they're divided into.

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  • FletcherFletcher Registered User regular
    edited April 2009
    oh awesome thats exactly the sort of thing I wanted to know, cheers Manon

    i am terrible with layouts, haha

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  • ZombiemamboZombiemambo Registered User regular
    edited April 2009
    For the first time in a long time I laughed at comics posted in the AC.

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  • exitexit Registered User regular
    edited April 2009
    MYSTERY SOLVED made me unbelievably happy

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited April 2009
    Fletch,

    Have you read Robot Dreams? Outside of being a totally awesome book, I think the layouts used there will give you some ideas for flexibility within your own comics. She also uses three rows at a uniform width.

    Even if you don't buy it, the Amazon reader previews'll give you an idea of it.

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  • t i mt i m Registered User regular
    edited April 2009
    When it comes to making comics you're either funny or you're not...you sir are histarical. Nice work!

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    God put me on this earth to accomplish a certain number of things. Right now I am so far behind that I will never die.” Bill Watterson
  • JohnTWMJohnTWM Registered User regular
    edited April 2009
    The drawing is rudimentary on the surface, but you the bits where you get a bit more.. complex with your lines are still awesome while managing to stay integrated with the rest of the style. They are also funny, which helps :P

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  • FletcherFletcher Registered User regular
    edited April 2009
    Fletch,

    Have you read Robot Dreams? Outside of being a totally awesome book, I think the layouts used there will give you some ideas for flexibility within your own comics. She also uses three rows at a uniform width.

    Even if you don't buy it, the Amazon reader previews'll give you an idea of it.

    wow that actually looks like something i'd want to own (and learn from)

    when i finally have some money that is first on the list, cheers dude

    also new comic ehhh:

    2009-04-29.jpg

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  • #pipe#pipe Cocky Stride, Musky odours Pope of Chili TownRegistered User regular
    edited April 2009
  • FletcherFletcher Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    so yeah here is another comic!

    2009-05-06.jpg

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  • worstcaseworstcase Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    i love that last one

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    butlers fighting to the death gladiator-style is a very distinct gag. if you really want to pull it off, you'll need more than the dog treats gag to differentiate it from Family Guy.

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  • FletcherFletcher Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    butlers fighting to the death gladiator-style is a very distinct gag. if you really want to pull it off, you'll need more than the dog treats gag to differentiate it from Family Guy.

    seriously?

    family guy did butlers fighting to the death?

    i don't even watch iiit ah crap

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  • MustangMustang Arbiter of Unpopular Opinions Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    It's true they did, it wasn't exactly the same gag, and it was pretty brief, and a long time ago, and to be honest I only thought of it because Manon mentioned it.

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    Fletcher wrote: »
    butlers fighting to the death gladiator-style is a very distinct gag. if you really want to pull it off, you'll need more than the dog treats gag to differentiate it from Family Guy.

    seriously?

    family guy did butlers fighting to the death?

    i don't even watch iiit ah crap

    here it is, if you're curious.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CS1j1hKndOc

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  • FletcherFletcher Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    cheers manon, ah crap i guess i should google keywords or something to make sure i'm not inadvertantly copying someone in future

    oh well, can't change it now (i can but i'm lazy)

    onward to more comics!

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    onward!

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  • FletcherFletcher Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    2009-05-13.jpg

    woo another one (crazy i know)

    any thoughts on what i should be trying to work on/introduce?

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  • beavotronbeavotron Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    this newest one is my fav.

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  • D-RobeD-Robe Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    I like these way more than I should. They are like a perfect mix of Polk Out and (original, non-crappy)Cy&H.

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  • BadsaltBadsalt Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    So I just read all those comics. I like most of the ones that are out there. Sky whales was entertaining, the Butler gag was done with Stewie but, how can a fight to the death NOT be funny? Mainly I just like the back and forth. The whole comic seems kind of like Cyanide and Happiness. Which I loved at first, and have slowly started to hate. Especially when they do flash videos...

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    Two webcomics for the price of one. Let the hilarity ensue.
  • #pipe#pipe Cocky Stride, Musky odours Pope of Chili TownRegistered User regular
    edited May 2009
    One of the butlers should have a net and trident

    there's always a gladiator with a net and trident for some reason

    #pipe on
  • FletcherFletcher Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    haha awesome, i was going to give one of them a net!

    but i couldn't be bothered drawing a net :/

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  • BadsaltBadsalt Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    Yeah, it seems like drawing a net and a trident would just be alot of extra work.

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    Two webcomics for the price of one. Let the hilarity ensue.
  • FletcherFletcher Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    so i didn't update at all for a week because i was doing this thing

    yes, this thing right here

    for the SE++ forum battle

    but heres a new comic because i am not a quitter

    2009-05-28.jpg

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  • Stupid Mr Whoopsie NameStupid Mr Whoopsie Name Registered User, ClubPA regular
    edited May 2009
    I don't know how you manage to make drawings that are so simple seem so expressive, but that Forum Battle entry is fantastic! :^:

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  • RobchamRobcham The Rabbit King of your pantsRegistered User regular
    edited May 2009
    Fletcher you racist
    stop killing the brown guy

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  • MustangMustang Arbiter of Unpopular Opinions Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    Ahh fletch, your thread is fast becoming one of the most hilarious on the AC.

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  • FletcherFletcher Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    Robcham wrote: »
    Fletcher you racist
    stop killing the brown guy

    i actually planned this with the characters switched around for once :P

    but then i remembered that i'm a horrible horrible racist

    thanks mars and mustang! yay compliments

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  • FoodFood Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    Your comic is funny! Keep it up!

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited May 2009
    you got my vote in the forum battle. the way you jump head first and sideways off the building made it.

    also, coincidence or intentional reference to the ass-assassin story from SE a few months back?

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  • FletcherFletcher Registered User regular
    edited June 2009
    so i made another video thing for the SE++ forum battle

    here it is

    i need to start forcing myself to do comics according to schedule; it is too easy to fall behind

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  • Stupid Mr Whoopsie NameStupid Mr Whoopsie Name Registered User, ClubPA regular
    edited June 2009
    Fletcher, your shit makes me laugh without fail. I think it would take a lot for me to tire looking at your stuff.

    Also
    OMG GOOF! His tie disappeared! :P

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  • FletcherFletcher Registered User regular
    edited June 2009
    thanks mars!

    i knooow i hate the disappearing tie so much

    i'd fix it, but it took three hours of constantly retrying to make windows movie maker even save the file

    i'm not putting myself through that again

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  • MustangMustang Arbiter of Unpopular Opinions Registered User regular
    edited June 2009
    Haha great Fletch, we should totally hook up and give each other STD's.

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  • FletcherFletcher Registered User regular
    edited June 2009
    trade you my chlamydia for your charizard?

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  • The Black HunterThe Black Hunter The key is a minimum of compromise, and a simple, unimpeachable reason to existRegistered User regular
    edited June 2009
    That round one forum battle was beautiful

    the music was the perfect choice

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