TWIN DRAGONS comicstrip

TwinDragonTwinDragon Registered User
edited August 2009 in Artist's Corner
Here is a Penny Arcade influenced comic strip I've created. This strip will be part of a weely series I will be posting on my game dev blog.

Hope you guys like it.

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited August 2009
    where it at?

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  • D-RobeD-Robe Registered User regular
    edited August 2009
    I do not see it.

    Also, Twin Dragon is an awesome Mongolian BBQ in Anchorage.. in case you were ever wondering.

    e: 99501. Google it. If you want..

    e2: You can see it on Street View. I mean, if you want..

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  • NightDragonNightDragon 6th Grade Username Registered User regular
    edited August 2009
    I had to open it up in a new tab to see it, but now that it's in my cache, it loads here fine.

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  • winter_combat_knightwinter_combat_knight Registered User regular
    edited August 2009
    I visited your blog, so you got the 'hit'. I didn't understand it. But yeah, post art and shit. :P

    EDIT: There we go. Now i see it. Post on tinypic or image shack. Blog links generally dont work.

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  • TwinDragonTwinDragon Registered User
    edited August 2009
    Shit. sorry thought the post would work for everyone. here is a link just in case.

    http://3.bp.blogspot.com/_UFjMX2Xvfh4/Soy5RgZGMlI/AAAAAAAAAA4/ne7PA2lympo/s1600-h/TD-ep-01.png

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  • TwinDragonTwinDragon Registered User
    edited August 2009
    linked the image to my deviant site...maybe that'll work?

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited August 2009
    there it at.

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  • D-RobeD-Robe Registered User regular
    edited August 2009
    Is that supposed to be Naruto?

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  • TamTam Registered User regular
    edited August 2009
    The art is nice, but I feel the writing falls flat. There's really no punch there.

    Really do like the art though.

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  • ManonvonSuperockManonvonSuperock Registered User regular
    edited August 2009
    Yeah, I wouldn't read a comic about Naruto cosplayers.

    The joke falls really flat.

    but I also dig what's going on with the art. You should look into the "Super Cross Forum Project" thread, so you can make some art for something I'd like to read.

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  • Shiekahn_boyShiekahn_boy Registered User
    edited August 2009
    You should look into the "Super Cross Forum Project" thread, so you can make some art for something I'd like to read.

    Believe it! :D

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  • McGibsMcGibs TorontoRegistered User regular
    edited August 2009
    yes, the orange clothings and yellow hair are loaded. It's going to read as Nartuto no matter what. I'd strongly suggest changing the colours to something else.

    I dig the style though. Don't care much for the writing or theme. It's identical to every other "two nerds" comic, except they're apparently martial artists for no relevant reason. That's not enough to separate it from the ocean of internet sludge.

    I mean, it isn't "influenced" by penny arcade... it IS penny arcade. This could be any PA strip if you just plugged in Gabe and Tycho.

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  • ResilientResilient Registered User
    edited August 2009
    I like the writing enough. The last panel just doesn't seem funny to me.

    I think Scott Adams blog posting here might explain it fairly simply.

    If you don't want to read it, let me summarize it.

    Clever
    Cute
    Bizarre
    Cruel
    Naughty
    Recognizable

    Pick at least two to have a shot at being funny. More is better.

    The first panel seem funny because I recognize the show (1) and a zombie detector with a compass is a bit clever (2) and a bit bizarre (3).

    The second panel is sort of a bridge that carries on the first panel well, but the last panel doesn't deliver. My experience is that when 'contestants' do that they don't really get a lot of money, so it's not recognizable to me (which is the most important) and it's not really any of the other things.

    He needs some more interesting way to get them to give him the money.

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  • TwinDragonTwinDragon Registered User
    edited August 2009
    thanks for the critiques. I will revamp the approach the comic for future strips. I created this to act as a visual blog so to speak. Basically a platform to voice opinions in an entertaining way that keeps people coming back but it hasn't gone over to well it seems. I will keep at it and see what I can do about the Naruto looking character.

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  • The Lovely BastardThe Lovely Bastard Registered User regular
    edited August 2009
    manon you are my favorite shill

    also I think what really hurts your writing more than anything is you are using swearing as a crutch. not the punchline or the progression or anything like that - though they are not up to snuff, but swearing needs to have a point to be funny.

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  • earthwormadamearthwormadam ancient crust Registered User regular
    edited August 2009
    Cool drawings and nice colors but everything else needs a serious revamp.

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  • WillethWilleth Registered User regular
    edited August 2009
    Honestly I think the only thing that lets this down is the font choice and word balloon placement. It's too harsh and doesn't flow properly. Where you'd have a pause in speech, separate the balloons (where possible), and I would choose a less coarse font. Otherwise I actually really like it, but I'm a little confused about why they're ninjas.

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  • ZombiemamboZombiemambo Registered User regular
    edited August 2009
    I just have to know: is that Naruto and Dan Hibiki sitting on that couch?

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  • McGibsMcGibs TorontoRegistered User regular
    edited August 2009
    Dan is black?

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  • MustangMustang Registered User regular
    edited August 2009
    gibs wrote:
    except they're apparently martial artists for no relevant reason

    Exactly why are they martial artists? Will there be fights and stuff down the track that will require an advanced fighting knowledge?

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  • ZombiemamboZombiemambo Registered User regular
    edited August 2009
    McGibs wrote: »
    Dan is black?

    That guy is supposed to be black?

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