I suggest you look at some photographic reference for the sunset...your colors are really off. The bright blue up against the bright orange is really jarring, and is bizarre-looking.
I suggest you look at some photographic reference for the sunset...your colors are really off. The bright blue up against the bright orange is really jarring, and is bizarre-looking.
It took me a while to find the picture of a similar sunset I saw this summer, but I finally found it... I was going for something like this but didnt have this photo for reference at the time so I was going from memory. I guess I messed it up... shoot.
Yeah...for one, the blue in the clouds is much less saturated (and darker), and the orange that's on the bottoms of the clouds is much more red. The background behind the clouds is much, much milder, and much brighter than what you have.
That's honestly kind of odd-looking in the reference anyway - it'd probably be hard to get right. I imagine that photograph has been digitally messed with - a couple of things about it look off.
Generally, sunsets are much more subtle than how people paint them (and if you're looking at one of the thousands of sunset images on the net, it's probably had the saturation pumped up quite a bit). While sunsets can have areas of high saturation, the effect of that high saturation is lost if everything else in the picture is highly saturated as well. In something like this, or this, you can see a little more clearly where the areas of highest saturation lie.
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edited September 2009
I don't know how long I've been here, but you're kicking the DeeLocks ass that was drawing when I first arrived......I think that means you've gotten better.
So, what is this? Are you justifying your skewed still life items by comparing it to what Cezanne was doing?
...because there're specific things that make the painting you posted successful. Not one of which is similar to what you have going on there.
What is this? Something I posted yesterday?
And I'm trying to use similar tricks Cezanne without stealing from him, leaning items is apart of this, along with horizon lines that dont line up and so on.
What to see more of my poor Cezanne imitation? Here:
Ill stop mentioning Cezanne though, because people keep thinking I'm comparing myself to him, when I'm just giving a reference point from which I'm working.
Anyways, people seem to like my work around here.
Your painting doesn't exemplify the qualities that make Cezzane's work awesome. His paintings are bold and full of life. This is kind of dull. The work you're showing looks like it is intended to be realistic and the 'tricks' you're using read as flaws. Do these things if it is going to add to the composition or energy of the work. Don't use some convention because it looks good in something else; do everything in a meaningful way.
Those lines are all screwy, WCK. They're going through all your and characters and making that card INCREDIBLY hard to read. I'd suggest putting a box around all of your info, as you've done. But take out those lines in the background within the boxes, so as if they are sitting on top.
Also, that 'Specializing in trees...' bit is looking dull and hard to read, to the max.
Hey WCK, tighten up your leading a bit. Your lines are looking way spacey. And yeah, don't ever put lines through your type. The most important aspect of a business card is legibility, and those aren't helping. It's especially bad through the URL. Also, you gotta do something about the long long long "deciduous and evergreen trees and shrubs" line. Make it two lines if you have to, because right now that second column of bullet points is getting totally lost out there. Tighten er up.
Yeah, those lines have to go.
I thought it was just a screen shot of it straight out of photoshop with guidelines all over the place ... when I saw they didn't actually do anything, I started reading the comments and realized they were part of the "design".
Don't cross out words or numbers with lines!
Also space out your telephone numbers, make them easier to read. Instead of 8675309, 867.5309 or 867 5309 or 867-5309
Also the dudes name should be at least bolded, and stand out more than the address
Yeah, those lines have to go.
I thought it was just a screen shot of it straight out of photoshop with guidelines all over the place ... when I saw they didn't actually do anything, I started reading the comments and realized they were part of the "design".
You thought right! It was a print-screen of Publishers interface. I probably should have mentioned that
Youre right though. Those guides aren't really doing anything.
Heres a better idea of what ive got. Print screened the 'print preview' page this time.
Cheers for the crits people! I'll consider them when i refine this some more.
BTW, i wish i was able to do this in InDesign. But this is a subject i chose as an elective so that i have the right amount of units to graduate next year. In this subject its compulsory to use Publisher.
On the first side, the edges of your type are poorly spaced. They are too close to look intentionally offset and instead look misplaced.
IE, where the type starts on Cleveland should line up with Specialising should line up with Decidious. Or you are going to have to offset them more.
On the second side, you just have a lot of empty space that reads as empty and not intentional. The name and contact info look good, so you should probably play around with the placement of the name and plant.
Agree with everything Wassermelone said. Also, on the first card - the list of stuff seems not very well aligned with anything. I realize it's "aligned" in your previous post where you have all the grids, but it doesn't look that way on the most recent copies. And it might just be the font but damn if that kerning doesn't seem all kinds of messed up.
I do like the simplicity of it, but I really think it'd be even better if you had not quite so much of a crazy font in there. Keep us updated! Lookin' forward to the finished.
Agree with everything Wassermelone said. Also, on the first card - the list of stuff seems not very well aligned with anything. I realize it's "aligned" in your previous post where you have all the grids, but it doesn't look that way on the most recent copies. And it might just be the font but damn if that kerning doesn't seem all kinds of messed up.
I do like the simplicity of it, but I really think it'd be even better if you had not quite so much of a crazy font in there. Keep us updated! Lookin' forward to the finished.
Yeah, those lines have to go.
I thought it was just a screen shot of it straight out of photoshop with guidelines all over the place ... when I saw they didn't actually do anything, I started reading the comments and realized they were part of the "design".
You thought right! It was a print-screen of Publishers interface. I probably should have mentioned that
Youre right though. Those guides aren't really doing anything.
Heres a better idea of what ive got. Print screened the 'print preview' page this time.
Cheers for the crits people! I'll consider them when i refine this some more.
BTW, i wish i was able to do this in InDesign. But this is a subject i chose as an elective so that i have the right amount of units to graduate next year. In this subject its compulsory to use Publisher.
when you print that out its going to be so hard to read the info
your gonna have to increase the type size
for the second one try dropping down the name and the contact numbers so they are on the bottom, and then move the title up and maybe make the plant bigger so there is less white space
you might wanna also increase the margin on all sides so they aren't hugging the cropping area
the front of the card would just be the small sapling and then on the back as all the info that someone would need
im not sure if you need to say what product they deal in because they can either call and find out or ask them when they get the card. its just a lot of extra copy that doesnt need to be on the card
It's like you are reminding her that she is slowly dying...and you put it in a cute hallmark kind of way. :P
(cute ass metroid also Kronus)
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Is that Guybrush Threepwood? I like your style moog.
Yep, from Launch of the Screaming Narwhal. Me and a ladyfriend have been playing through the Tales games together, and her favorite game character is Guybrush. She's been having a supremely shitty week so I made her a present.
It's the fourth game-based shadowbox I've made, but the other three were pixel-based and more graphic design and craft than illustration. I've been selling them on etsy, though, so people seem to dig 'em!
Looking good. Good idea on getting your work photographed professionally. Scanners can loose some of the details, and with photography you can control the light bounce more.
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It took me a while to find the picture of a similar sunset I saw this summer, but I finally found it... I was going for something like this but didnt have this photo for reference at the time so I was going from memory. I guess I messed it up... shoot.
That's honestly kind of odd-looking in the reference anyway - it'd probably be hard to get right. I imagine that photograph has been digitally messed with - a couple of things about it look off.
Generally, sunsets are much more subtle than how people paint them (and if you're looking at one of the thousands of sunset images on the net, it's probably had the saturation pumped up quite a bit). While sunsets can have areas of high saturation, the effect of that high saturation is lost if everything else in the picture is highly saturated as well. In something like this, or this, you can see a little more clearly where the areas of highest saturation lie.
Ok cool, thanks for the advice!
And WIP(?):
Your painting doesn't exemplify the qualities that make Cezzane's work awesome. His paintings are bold and full of life. This is kind of dull. The work you're showing looks like it is intended to be realistic and the 'tricks' you're using read as flaws. Do these things if it is going to add to the composition or energy of the work. Don't use some convention because it looks good in something else; do everything in a meaningful way.
but um... since that's pretty irrelevant to the doodle thread...
doodle
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I actually just got back from sampling the mice and those little suckers really don't care about getting the tip of their tails snipped, okay?
FOR SCIENCE
I mean really their own mothers are a much larger threat. So many of them just get cannibalized before we even get to use them.
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I am impressed by it
Also, that 'Specializing in trees...' bit is looking dull and hard to read, to the max.
P.S. Specializing.
I thought it was just a screen shot of it straight out of photoshop with guidelines all over the place ... when I saw they didn't actually do anything, I started reading the comments and realized they were part of the "design".
Don't cross out words or numbers with lines!
Also space out your telephone numbers, make them easier to read. Instead of 8675309, 867.5309 or 867 5309 or 867-5309
Also the dudes name should be at least bolded, and stand out more than the address
The way he has it is actually an acceptable spelling in Australia.
I was...then i decided no...just, no...
Whoops, excuse that then. I didn't know that.
You thought right! It was a print-screen of Publishers interface. I probably should have mentioned that
Youre right though. Those guides aren't really doing anything.
Heres a better idea of what ive got. Print screened the 'print preview' page this time.
Cheers for the crits people! I'll consider them when i refine this some more.
BTW, i wish i was able to do this in InDesign. But this is a subject i chose as an elective so that i have the right amount of units to graduate next year. In this subject its compulsory to use Publisher.
IE, where the type starts on Cleveland should line up with Specialising should line up with Decidious. Or you are going to have to offset them more.
On the second side, you just have a lot of empty space that reads as empty and not intentional. The name and contact info look good, so you should probably play around with the placement of the name and plant.
I do like the simplicity of it, but I really think it'd be even better if you had not quite so much of a crazy font in there. Keep us updated! Lookin' forward to the finished.
Dooby dooby, new sprite animations:
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But seriously, you have received more critiques on this business card than I think anyone ever has on anything.
Also played with the composition on this a bit:
Original
New
when you print that out its going to be so hard to read the info
your gonna have to increase the type size
for the second one try dropping down the name and the contact numbers so they are on the bottom, and then move the title up and maybe make the plant bigger so there is less white space
you might wanna also increase the margin on all sides so they aren't hugging the cropping area
This is cool.
Your new name is Cool Guy. Let's hang out.
the front of the card would just be the small sapling and then on the back as all the info that someone would need
im not sure if you need to say what product they deal in because they can either call and find out or ask them when they get the card. its just a lot of extra copy that doesnt need to be on the card
And
This doodle is a couple weeks old which I never go around to finishing but I like it nonetheless;
And this was for my girlfriend's birthday (Spoiler'd for horizontalness, please ignore the horrible jpeg artifacts on this one :P);
(cute ass metroid also Kronus)
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Yep, from Launch of the Screaming Narwhal. Me and a ladyfriend have been playing through the Tales games together, and her favorite game character is Guybrush. She's been having a supremely shitty week so I made her a present.
It's the fourth game-based shadowbox I've made, but the other three were pixel-based and more graphic design and craft than illustration. I've been selling them on etsy, though, so people seem to dig 'em!
Another gord sketch. It's starting to grow on me.
Anyways, finally getting my whole portfolio properly photographed Sunday morning by this guy.