New to this part of the forum. Figured I might try and get a few critiques here and there.
I'm making a war comic. Though it's not the typical "yay war for good reasons" or your kiddy comic war, I want to put lots of violence, gore, sex and rather "Grey" areas, with lots of chaos into it.
So some quick concept work:
http://evi.kuiki.net/Art/Comic/concept.jpghttp://evi.kuiki.net/Art/Comic/panel.jpg
I need to fix the empty space and fill it with something. I'm thinking perhaps shots of a sweaty finger on the trigger, shots of a cigarette burning to denote the stress and fatigue. Maybe a close up shot of tired eyes or something. My issue here is denoting movement of the background figures and filling the empty space with meaningful or relevant images.
http://evi.kuiki.net/Art/Comic/panel2.jpg
Basically the same problem here, too much empty space. It's a good thing these are just concept panels.
http://evi.kuiki.net/Art/Comic/ss1_1.jpg
And an uncompleted storyboard
http://evi.kuiki.net/Art/Comic/stybrd_1.jpg
I eventually want the comic to look like this unfinished drawing, only you know...finished:
And then completely random stuff.
30min doodle after playing some AC4
http://evi.kuiki.net/Art/Misc/doodle19.jpg
Something I gave up on
http://evi.kuiki.net/Art/Misc/Gift/k_wip2.jpg
And to finish it all, my mascot showing how it's bad to drink and ride a bike:
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I really like your linework for the most part (at first glance it almost looks like you traced it) you could use a little more linewidth variation on your outlines. The hands and feet seem a little off in most of your sketches. In the sketch of the soldier holding the rifle the right hand looks like it's a little too small and the fingers on the left hand are too long. I like what you've done with the layouts though of course they're incomplete so it's hard to get an idea of what the finished page will look like; you should do a rough mock up of a page layout to get a better idea (including things like speech bubles, font etc...). I really like the sketch of the rifleman (sniper?) on the roof aiming into the street; i think you're right about putting something into the empty space, maybe a shot of what he's looking at through the scope (cliche as it may be...). From what I've seen you have really nice clean lines and good detailing; I'd like to see what a finished page would look like.
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My problem is in understanding line width variation. I mean I get the basic notion about it, it's just implementing the whole thing where I fail. Like, should I put more emphasis in the shadow and highlights only, or do I also put wider lines to contrast from the background? Because I don't know how to properly accomplish it, I just keep sketchy thin lines for the most part.
Oh, and thanks for the suggestions, I'll keep them in mind when I go and redraw these.
Lot O good line variation tips.
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So here's some work in progress: (NSFW)
http://evi.kuiki.net/Art/Misc/Gift/sora_aoi_wip1.jpg
http://evi.kuiki.net/Art/Misc/Gift/sora_aoi_wip2.jpg
http://evi.kuiki.net/Art/Misc/Gift/sora_aoi_wip.jpg
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