Web Comic advice!! Merci

sccoopsccoop Registered User
edited January 2010 in Artist's Corner
Yo... opinions, criticisms, comments?? Spanx... Yes I did start a new account thread with devious intentions that I never followed through on lol... here's a link to the original on Penny Arcade: http://forums.penny-arcade.com/showthread.php?t=109192


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  • iglidanteiglidante Registered User
    edited January 2010
    I like it. The text it too small, though.

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  • squidbunnysquidbunny Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    This is actually a really cute, copacetic little comic; too many people roll in here with retarded toilet humor or lifts of the two-guys-talking games formula. Refreshing.

    I like the last panel, the most dynamic of the 4; 1 and 2 feel really rigid by comparison, 2 in particular because it's just a dead profile of the kid moving up a perfect 45 degree incline.

    I think the whimsical feel of this would be better served with lighter, more washed-out colors (the mauve-y gutters aren't working for me) and with better treatment of your lineart. It's really dark and heavy, which can work, but you've muddied it a little where your highlights have been daubed on sort of over the top of it (as in the hat in panel 1).

    Also your lettering isn't working for me, either. Hand-lettering would work really nicely with this. Barring that, something a little more readable, yeah.

    Show us more!

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  • DMACDMAC Moderator mod
    edited January 2010
    http://forums.penny-arcade.com/showthread.php?t=109192

    Why start a new account and a new thread?

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  • DustinPDustinP Registered User
    edited January 2010
    The blue text in the title and the background colors clash. Also there is a lot of gutter space between the panels, no need for that much, smaller comic make its easier to build a site around. Word balloons or boxes would really make the panels seem "full" as well.

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  • squidbunnysquidbunny Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    DMAC wrote: »
    http://forums.penny-arcade.com/showthread.php?t=109192

    Why start a new account and a new thread?

    To fool the unobservant [me].

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