Rough draft

piratesaucepiratesauce Registered User
edited January 2010 in Artist's Corner
Hey guys, I'm new.
I'm just looking for a bit of input on this rough draft I made. I know, I know, another video game based comic. I'm not trying to compete with the humongous behemoth that is Penny-Arcade (I'm also positive my art and comedy writing is up to par) But I figured this place is probably the best for critique and honest opinion.

Once again, this is a rough draft and hasn't been coloured or cleaned up. I just want to see how I can improve on any aspect in terms of style, writing (even though there isn't much) and how funny it is compared to what most people post on these forums.

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  • CheerfulBearCheerfulBear Registered User
    edited January 2010
    scusi

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  • Arden CaneloArden Canelo Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Sooo Assassin's Creed - killed the pope - and blames a kind - then speaks French?
    Made me smile?
    Tighten up those graphics on level 3.

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  • CheerfulBearCheerfulBear Registered User
    edited January 2010
    French?

    Come on Arden, come on.

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  • BuckwolfeBuckwolfe Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Tighten up those graphics on level 3.

    Oh, no. Why did you have to make me remember that commercial?

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  • ParadiseParadise Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Brilliant strategy, piratesauce! Also, this makes me wonder why there are no kids in AC2.

    I guess it's so people can't force Ezio to kill children. That'd be bad.

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  • NappuccinoNappuccino Registered User regular
    edited January 2010
    French?

    Come on Arden, come on.

    Italian?

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  • BroloBrolo Broseidon Lord of the BroceanRegistered User regular
    edited January 2010
    Hey guys, I'm new.
    I'm just looking for a bit of input on this rough draft I made. I know, I know, another video game based comic. I'm not trying to compete with the humongous behemoth that is Penny-Arcade (I'm also positive my art and comedy writing is up to par) But I figured this place is probably the best for critique and honest opinion.

    Once again, this is a rough draft and hasn't been coloured or cleaned up. I just want to see how I can improve on any aspect in terms of style, writing (even though there isn't much) and how funny it is compared to what most people post on these forums.

    28kq9ar.png

    In terms of the art, you're going to have to develop this a lot more before you can get anything resembling constructive criticism. It's really difficult to see what your inks would look like on top of whatever blue lines you have there.

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  • arnoldclabarnoldclab __BANNED USERS
    edited January 2010
    Very Nice picture.I like it.You have done very great job...Thanks for share the information....It is a brilliant strategy,piratesauce...

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