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WizToastWizToast Registered User, ClubPA
edited December 2010 in Artist's Corner
I spent a little longer than usual on the art, and I'm looking for some notes.


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  • NightDragonNightDragon 6th Grade Username Registered User regular
    edited November 2010
    I think you'd probably be able to get away with removing a lot of those wrinkles, while still making it obvious that "this dude is hella ancient". Rather than filling in the empty spaces with wrinkles, try to focus on outlining the masses of saggy skin. This is a good example of how to use the wrinkle-lines more effectively.

    Also: you're awesome, and I love your comics. Been reading them for years. :D

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  • WizToastWizToast Registered User, ClubPA
    edited November 2010
    Dude, thanks! So, the basic idea is to focus more on giving weight to the sags, rather than drawing in lines.

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  • mullymully Registered User regular
    edited November 2010
    Age spots would also help bring the "sooo old!" feeling to this, rather than that many wrinkles.

    Also, the old man's wrist in the second panel catches my eye because it darts in too much.

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  • FlayFlay Registered User regular
    edited November 2010
    The proportions of the side view of the old man in the fourth panel is kinda out of whack; he either has an extremely long nose or a tiny mouth. Also the lack of eye is kinda distracting, it feels like you should be able to see it from that angle.

    Otherwise, keep up the awesome!

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  • AlecxantAlecxant Registered User
    edited November 2010
    I think the arrow in the first panel is unnecessary. other than that its grand. I dig the style, and the second to last panel (close up on the old man) is really awesome.

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  • AxleMooreAxleMoore Registered User
    edited November 2010
    Looks pretty good to me. Then again I love your comics so I'm a little bias.

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  • NakedZerglingNakedZergling A more apocalyptic post apocalypse Portland OregonRegistered User regular
    edited November 2010
    I thought it was funny as just the first two panels.

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  • JLM-AWPJLM-AWP Registered User regular
    edited November 2010
    I read your comics religiously (i'm not religious), and I'd love to see a bit more diversity in your characters. A lot of them (especially the women) look pretty much the same.

    Granted, it's not essential to getting the joke across in any particular instance, just something I noticed.

    Keep making us laugh man, you're awesome.

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  • NappuccinoNappuccino Registered User regular
    edited November 2010
    I have to admit, instead of making this one comic, I think it would work almost as good if not better as two seperate ones.

    The second panel's punchline is much funnier than the final panel, i think. But, if you made two comics you get to have your cake and eat it too :)

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    edited December 2010
    AHAHAHAHAHA that is the best comic I have read in a while. It is like you got a cloud and angels type God telling a budhist joke :D Hilarious!

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