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Requesting Logo/Icon Design Critique (Updated: 12-23-2012)

kingworkskingworks Registered User regular
edited December 2011 in Artist's Corner
Need to build up my portfolio. Let me have it.

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  • amateurhouramateurhour One day I'll be professionalhour The woods somewhere in TennesseeRegistered User regular
    White Knight looks good, I like it better with the black background but it's a nice simplistic design.

    Greene Contracting is good, but I'm assuming the leaf bears significance to the company? (Is it a Green company?) I would shrink the font just a point or two though so it doesn't touch the edges of the leaf. Especially with the white background it's a little distracting.

    Burning bush font is great, but I'd change the colors a little. I can barely see the overlap between the flames at the base of the bush twigs, and that's a cool detail that should stand out more.

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  • NibCromNibCrom Registered User regular
    Burning Bush: This is gonna sound like a jerk comment, but it kinda looks more like a tree than a bush. Other people might disagree. I agree with Amatuerhour that the overlapping colors should be a little less subtle.

    Greene Contracting: The small slivers of green (where the last "G" is) create distracting focal points. It doesn't look like there was too much thought put into this logo. It feels like you typed up the name and put it on a stock vector leaf image. I would put more thought into how the stem of the leaf could enhance the movement of the piece.

    White Knight: This is my favorite of the three. The stroke around the chess piece and the stroke around the curved rectangle seem a bit delicate. I would make them just slightly thicker, although it almost seems like it's more of a rendering problem. On the white background the bottom black line under the rectangle looks blurry. I would consider changing the rectangle shape to make it a little more interesting. Maybe like a castle wall? The key would be to not make it too busy or complicated.

    What program did you create these in?

  • MustangMustang Arbiter of Unpopular Opinions Registered User regular
    Burning Bush; I really like this, however I would take amateur's advise and work on the colour overlap.

    Greene Contracting: I don't really like this at all, the tangents on the type and the leaf is all kinds of distracting. The whole design is pretty weak.

    White Knight: Love this as it is.

  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    edited December 2011
    I like them all except the Greene Contracting. I feel it's too poorly thought out to be a functional logo. I'd much rather see the leaf worked into the typography.

    Excellent font choices on Burning Bush and White Knight.

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  • kingworkskingworks Registered User regular
    Thank you lady and gentlemen. I really appreciate the advice.

    Bush: My laptop LCD tends to wash out colors, so I often err on the side of making things too light for fear that they are actually too saturated. I really need some way to calibrate it.

    @NibCrom: How would you make the bush more 'bushy?'

    Leaf: I agree that the leaf is the weakest of the three. I was going for a negative space effect on white, but it totally falls apart over a dark BG.

    All three of these were totally made up simply to give myself some experience. The images were done completely from scratch in Illustrator CS4 and the fonts are courtesy of dafont.com

    I'll tweak these and work on getting some more designs up in this thread.

  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    edited December 2011
    When I do logos, I usually present them in a colored version, a single color version and a single color reverse. I would encourage you to include these last two into your workflow. If a logo can't work in a single color, it won't work at all.

    Invest in a good monitor when you have the chance!

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  • NibCromNibCrom Registered User regular
    @Kingworks: I guess I think of bushes being shorter and trees being taller. But maybe that's just me.

    Keep at it!

  • kingworkskingworks Registered User regular
    Okay, I tweaked the designs based on the comments I got, dropped the leaf and added a t-shirt design that is available on my cafepress store:

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  • JouJou Registered User new member
    One of the greatest things my teacher said to me about logos. If it works in black and white, then it will work in color. Try creating your logos in strictly black and white before adding color. If they look bland and uninspiring in B&W, then adding color is just polishing a turd. You went very literal on your logos and I think the concepts could be a little better.

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  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    Beautiful! Much better presentation! I'm glad you decided to discard the Greene Contracting, it was the weakest piece. I love the new replacement.

  • AmoniteAmonite Registered User new member
    burning bush: I am a fan of literal logos, so I like the concept of this one myself. It looks nicer now that it is shorter, but the shapes of the flames could be balanced better. If they were three identical shapes each overlapping the next and getting progressively larger, the one on the right being the biggest might make sense. As it is, the middle one receding is an odd choice, and the rightmost being the largest leads the eye upwards off into the distance for no discernable reason. I agree with Jou on color, but also for another reason:
    Logos will eventually (hopefully) be printed out on promotional items. Sometimes the number of colors will not matter, sometimes it will. If one wants to say, get a logo printed on a pencil, the first color might be free with a small fee for each additional color. There might be a maximum of four colors allowed. It will be more expensive, and options will be more limited, for a company to work with a logo that involves gradients or multiple colors. That isn't to say a company should discard those options - but there may be a trade off, so its something small start ups should consider, and that logo designers should keep in mind.

    White Knight: This is my favorite. I think here I would like to know what the logo goes with, since that would modify my opinion of how well it works. Currently, the logo is very 'curvy' with the rounded edges and the pudgy horse - but it might have more impact with cornered edges and a more fierce looking chess knight. It might help if the horse was moved back to the left a hair, and raised slightly rather than sticking so far below the design, with a larger head that angled downwardsto direct the eye back towards the name of the company. I like the lower case letters of the font, but not the upper. I think this is because the upper draw up in on themselves rather than lead on to the rest of the word.

  • NightDragonNightDragon 6th Grade Username Registered User regular
    edited December 2011
    Also, strictly for reference...you may want to check out http://creattica.com/ for logo designs. They've got a lot of great examples to look at and analyze. I think your use of space/shapes/balance could be improved a little bit...Amonite pretty much sums up what I'd say about that, anyhow.

    The examples you can find on that website not only often have excellent composition in their designs, but are very, very creatively executed. They're very inspirational and informative, and I think it could help you to just browse a handful and think about what makes each so effective. :)

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