I don't really like how it ended up that much. It looks very flat and stiff - and not intentionally. I think if you had an even flatter character but a very animated, 3d pose it might work better. I think you could also play with the sharpness and transition of forms (everything feels very soft right now) that really accentuates the edges and '2d'ness of him.
If you wanted to go the other direction, then you really need to animate that pose. Curling the shoulders, twisting the waist - etc. The features of the face could wrap around the head more instead of sitting on a flat plane (I've heard some sculptors refer to this as 'draft').
Two new pages. We did a little something different with the dialog bubbles this time (Kenny drew them in directly to the page). Let us know what you think!
I like the way the dialogue balloons look. Fits with the art style nicely.
I think the flow on the second page could be stronger. My eyes went straight to the dialogue balloon and then down the page, skipping the upper left panel. Maybe if the balloon centered towards the corner of the upper left panel, although that's probably difficult to do if the balloon is drawn on the page. That's how I read it anyways.w
Is the split of the main image into a separate third panel necessary? The gutter is almost at a tangent with the top of the guy's head. I thought the main image might be stronger as one panel.
Yeah; on a page that's fairly busy with a lot of visual competition the midrange value is just disappearing at a glance -- especially since some of the backgrounds (the floor in panel 3 in particular) are virtually the same value if not almost the same exact color. It may just be me though.
The ones on the second page, I should point out, are working fine; the bluish-gray is a samey hue with everything which makes it nice and unified, but it's still light enough to stay good & separate from the darkish interior panels.
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If you wanted to go the other direction, then you really need to animate that pose. Curling the shoulders, twisting the waist - etc. The features of the face could wrap around the head more instead of sitting on a flat plane (I've heard some sculptors refer to this as 'draft').
What medium is it?
Anyways, here is page 26:
Comments and crits welcome!
I think the flow on the second page could be stronger. My eyes went straight to the dialogue balloon and then down the page, skipping the upper left panel. Maybe if the balloon centered towards the corner of the upper left panel, although that's probably difficult to do if the balloon is drawn on the page. That's how I read it anyways.w
Is the split of the main image into a separate third panel necessary? The gutter is almost at a tangent with the top of the guy's head. I thought the main image might be stronger as one panel.
Here are a couple of the more recent pages Let me know what you think:
EDIT: OH! Also! The lettering's a big upgrade, I think.
The ones on the second page, I should point out, are working fine; the bluish-gray is a samey hue with everything which makes it nice and unified, but it's still light enough to stay good & separate from the darkish interior panels.