The thing is, your friends probably think these strips are great, because that's who they're aimed at, as these characters are clearly supposed to represent you and the person you're doing the strip with. Since I don't know you as a person, I don't see a lot of humor here. I don't get the 'in' jokes.
Take some of the advice that's been given here and develop these two as characters by making them do something real, not just act out a surreal visual punchline. And please, don't keep drawing them with their eyes unfocused in every panel. It's not working.
This is actually really good.., not the comic (The comic is okay, your style is good for the content, work on art and content because everyone should...) but people are actually discussing things and not flogging each other with big rubber dildos like normal...that, my friend is a successful thread. kudos.
Has anyone mentioned yet that Gabe's style is actually pretty similar to Stephen Silvers'? So if anyone here is being ripped off here it's obviously him :P
Anyway like everyone else said, good line work now work on posing and facial expressions. I'm convinced that the reason comics like PA and VGcats stay popular despite sometimes painfully unfunny jokes is their hilarious facial expressions. Since you're obviously going for random over witty I think some over the top gestures and cartoony facial expressions would do a lot to enhance your comic.
This is actually really good.., not the comic (The comic is okay, your style is good for the content, work on art and content because everyone should...) but people are actually discussing things and not flogging each other with big rubber dildos like normal...that, my friend is a successful thread. kudos.
This is pretty much status quo. It normally starts out harsh, and the way the thread goes depends on how you handle the critique. :P
Has anyone mentioned yet that Gabe's style is actually pretty similar to Stephen Silvers'? So if anyone here is being ripped off here it's obviously him :P
Here's the newest strip I did. I tried to use some of the advice you guys gave me such as using goofy expressions and poses, as well as telling a more traditional joke. I hope that perhaps one out of ten of you will enjoy these strips.
I'll post up some of my other artwork when I get around to doing more of that, I've been too busy with work and these strips to do much else.
i like it, i liked your previous ones too... but i can tell there is some improvement as each comes. I have a feeling youre getting more familiar with your characters. Try changing setting next time. And yes, what are their names??
Although to be honest, the joke's a little funnier.
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I find most of these funny and I am not ashamed to admit it. This last one's joke actually has a punchline that makes sense unlike the other totally random ones, and I actually laughed out loud at this last one.
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Take some of the advice that's been given here and develop these two as characters by making them do something real, not just act out a surreal visual punchline. And please, don't keep drawing them with their eyes unfocused in every panel. It's not working.
Anyway like everyone else said, good line work now work on posing and facial expressions. I'm convinced that the reason comics like PA and VGcats stay popular despite sometimes painfully unfunny jokes is their hilarious facial expressions. Since you're obviously going for random over witty I think some over the top gestures and cartoony facial expressions would do a lot to enhance your comic.
This is pretty much status quo. It normally starts out harsh, and the way the thread goes depends on how you handle the critique. :P
Holy f-ing shits. That's my kind of funny.
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Either way, get back on subject, dammit! I want Rob to post more images, even if they aren't part of the strip.
Welcome to two years ago.
I'll post up some of my other artwork when I get around to doing more of that, I've been too busy with work and these strips to do much else.
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That random green shadow is still a little distracting- at least draw a corner of a house there so it makes sense.
They could probably cast some shadows on the ground as well to better place them in the environment.