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Vids: Enterprise-F HD and CrossOver Prologue

Fuzzy ModemFuzzy Modem Registered User regular
edited October 2012 in Artist's Corner

My old entry for the "Design the Next Enterprise" contest, now in HD by popular demand :)


I'd love to have your thoughts!


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  • Fuzzy ModemFuzzy Modem Registered User regular
    I'm running into a big problem with maybe half the people who watch the CrossOver video. They think the planet is Earth, despite my attempts to make it visually distinct. I think a big part of this is that I start the narration with "Our Sun." The solution is to name the planet, something I've been resistant to until now.

    I'm considering hijacking the legend of Tír na nÓg. "Land of the Young" the most popular of the Otherworlds in Irish mythology.

    Tír na nÓg was considered a place beyond the edges of the map where happiness lasted forever. It could be reached by either an arduous voyage or an invitation from one of its fairy residents, Tuatha de Danann (the Masters, who I would rename)

    The story goes that if you visit Tír na nÓg, then return to Earth, 300 years will have passed. This fits nicely with the time dilation that occurs with light speed travel.

    As it may be overly presumptuous to utilize an aspect of someone's culture for my own purposes, I'm also considering changing the names slightly, possibly by going back to the old Irish roots, and interpreting how the language may have evolved differently on this alien planet.

    Does this sound like a good idea to you? Why or why not?

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    Also, I'll be looking for voice actors (ideally Irish or Scottish, bull I'll consider anyone) to narrate the revised exposition, if you are interested.

  • Fuzzy ModemFuzzy Modem Registered User regular
    edited August 2012
    [edit]Here it is broken into parts for two narrators:

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    Narrator #1 (male):

    The Master’s world was once a paradise.

    They gathered my ancestors from Earth at the dawn of our civilization.

    The Masters showed us the secrets of the universe,

    and taught us how to bend reality to our will.

    As they dwindled, their power faded,

    and the gateway home was sealed.

    When the last Master died,

    their world slowed to a halt.

    Forests burned and oceans boiled.

    We were able to endure by studying their knowledge.

    and the more we learned,

    The more we prospered.

    On the Nightside forests withered and oceans froze.

    None survived.

    -

    Narrator #2 (female):

    On Earth, tales of this world had faded into myth.

    We developed advanced technology,

    and built ships that could cross the stars.

    My ancestors stumbled upon this world,

    and crashed on the Nightside.

    In time, the castaways flourished.

    Our city is a warm light in the cold darkness.

    The Great Barrier divides Night and Day,

    preventing contact between our two Empires.

    Until now...

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    I haven't named the planet, but I think that I’ve clarified that it’s not Earth, and I can hint at its mythical associations subtextually later.

    What do you think?
    I haven't named the planet, but I think that I’ve clarified that it’s not Earth, and I can hint at its mythical associations subtextually.

    What do you think?

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