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Webcomic

BaldorageBaldorage Registered User regular
edited August 2007 in Artist's Corner
http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa187/ftcastle/Comic2-1.jpg

My friends and I just started working on this, any tips/advice would be appreciated

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  • core tacticcore tactic Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Haha! It's very (not) funny.

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  • BaldorageBaldorage Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    hahhah thanks (not)

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  • bombardierbombardier Moderator mod
    edited July 2007
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  • SavedSaved Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Baldorage wrote: »
    http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa187/ftcastle/Comic2-1.jpg

    My friends and I just started working on this, any tips/advice would be appreciated

    Your comic is bad and you should feel bad.

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  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    10 points to anyone who guesses what I'm not wearing.

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  • UncleSamUncleSam Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    pants?

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    SteamID : sammer105
  • core tacticcore tactic Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    10 points to anyone who guesses what I'm not wearing.

    Clothing?

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  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    UncleSam wrote: »
    pants?

    You have ten points*!

    *Only valid in web comic form. Offer expires 08/01/2007

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  • UncleSamUncleSam Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    So how many quality web comics can I get for ten points?

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  • core tacticcore tactic Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    UncleSam wrote: »
    So how many quality web comics can I get for ten points?

    I will draw you a dog juggling on a unicycle for 11 points.

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  • CrowlestonCrowleston Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Not many on this forum, but you can get TONS of shitty ones. TONS.

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  • UncleSamUncleSam Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    ..7, 8, 9, 10. Damn. One short. How about just the dog on the unicycle, no juggling?

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  • core tacticcore tactic Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    UncleSam wrote: »
    ..7, 8, 9, 10. Damn. One short. How about just the dog on the unicycle, no juggling?

    Okay, but it'll come later as the computer with the scanner hooked up is currently occupied.

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  • multimoogmultimoog Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Fixed your comic, man

    Comic2-1copy.jpg

    EDIT: There should at least be SOME art in this thread.

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  • UncleSamUncleSam Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Oh wow, the t-shirt in the top right panel... hilarity. And so subtle.

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  • BaldorageBaldorage Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    wow, thanks guys, great feedback, we got the dildo tip, someones not wearing pants apparently, great overall. I'll keep all this in mind

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  • Golden YakGolden Yak Burnished Bovine The sunny beaches of CanadaRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    bombardier wrote: »

    That one's good, but I like this one: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nQNINsP6c40

    Seriously though, webcomic guy, Baldorage. The art is not really that bad, although the lines could be a little cleaner. It's way too big, shrink it down so it fits on a screen without stretching it out (about half the size it is now). The panel layout is too wacky to figure out what order they're supposed to be read in, you'll wanna re-arrange that for sure.

    And finally, the 'two guys who like video games' thing has been done to death. Seriously, there are hundreds of them out there, some of them good, most of them not. There don't need to be any more. Find some different subject matter. Comics, toys, cars, politics, anything.

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  • ZeromusZeromus Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    I actually don't really mind how the actual characters are drawn, but the backgrounds are terrible, the panel sequencing is hard to follow, and the joke isn't very funny.

    So, draw from anatomy books, lols.

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  • multimoogmultimoog Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    I'm only harsh when someone doesn't follow the Prime Directive - which is to say POST SOME FUCKING ART.

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  • NakedZerglingNakedZergling A more apocalyptic post apocalypse Portland OregonRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    dude no one is leaving you "tips" because there's so much wrong. but here' you go.
    colors- WAY too saturated
    layout- awful just awful, and hard to follow
    art- not very good
    concept- 2 guys talking about video games...have we seen this before?
    the joke- (clearly on us) and not funny
    lens flare (NO! BAD!)
    backgrounds...seem to be some scralled lines.

    its just..it's.....it's just not good. i'm sorry.

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  • Crazy ArtistCrazy Artist Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    your art is ok....average to say the least...joke wasn't funny, and the panel design makes it imposisble to tell how I'm supposed to read it.
    And the rule is to post pics, not links, so that's why you're getting ragged on. But even so, it's not that great, and in no way is it very original.

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  • GreatnationGreatnation Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    I just stared at that ass for about 20 seconds.


    Its been toooo long.....

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  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Baldorage wrote: »
    wow, thanks guys, great feedback, we got the dildo tip, someones not wearing pants apparently, great overall. I'll keep all this in mind

    See, Moog and I should start a sitcom.

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  • CamCam Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Magic, I like your avatar, what's that from

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    @Saved: best comment ever. I watched that episode last night.

    @baldorage: No one is taking you seriously because you didn't take the forum seriously. Here, i'll pretend you deserve a real critique.

    Your art is terrible awful terrible. It makes me sad and it killed my dog.

    Your story/joke doesnt exist. I looked for it. Its not there. Even though I cant tell what order to read the comic in, it doesnt matter. Try this. Go top left, bottom left, top right then straight down. Does it make sense? No. Do you have any idea whats going on at all? No. Now go top left, top right, etc. STILL DOESNT MAKE ANY FUCKING SENSE.

    WHO IS THE FUCKING SONY GUY AND WHY DOES HIS HEAD EXPLODE!LOLXOXOXOROFLMAO!!11!!!

    No one threw a grenade at anyone. Why are they talking about grenades?

    Take WHAT, Sixaxis?! WTF?!

    Why is he shaking the wiimote at the exploding head guy? Is that why his head exploded? If I shake my wiimote at your comic, will it explode?

    The grungie guy's name is Plagas? Fucking Seriously? A Sith? Is the other guy General Grievous? (POINT REDACTED- I'm a Resident Evil moron)

    "DID SOMEBODY SAY PLAYSTATION???!!!!?"

    No. No one in your comic says "Playstation" at any time. I dont see what Sony Jack Frost is so worked up about.

    Bottom line, this is a god damned train wreck. Stop wasting your time and kill yourself.

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    HijiNKS Ensue
    geek comic
    www.hijinksensue.com

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  • BaldorageBaldorage Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Are you fucking kidding me hijinks? i realize this is an amateur job but you're a fucking moron.if you didnt notice in the first line of the comic, its about Resident Evil 4, if you haven't played Resident Evil 4 than you won't understand the joke. the virus in the game is called las plagas.

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  • core tacticcore tactic Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    I've beaten the game and I still don't think it's very funny.

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Baldorage wrote: »
    Are you fucking kidding me hijinks? i realize this is an amateur job but you're a fucking moron.if you didnt notice in the first line of the comic, its about Resident Evil 4, if you haven't played Resident Evil 4 than you won't understand the joke. the virus in the game is called las plagas.
    Scratch the "Plagas" remark off the list. How do you explain the rest of it?

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    HijiNKS Ensue
    geek comic
    www.hijinksensue.com

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  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Cam wrote: »
    Magic, I like your avatar, what's that from

    It's part of AntiTinwoodsman's intro comic to the PA:AC Battle Tournament 2007. That's what Pennywise would look like if I could actually draw well.
    Baldorage wrote: »
    you're a fucking moron. [...] its about Resident Evil 4, if you haven't played Resident Evil 4 than you won't understand the joke.

    So when does not knowing about Resident Evil make one a moron? I think you need to have a Coke and a Smile.

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  • MagicToasterMagicToaster JapanRegistered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Urrrr, accidental double post.

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  • Stupid Mr Whoopsie NameStupid Mr Whoopsie Name Registered User, ClubPA regular
    edited July 2007
    Saved wrote: »
    Baldorage wrote: »
    http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa187/ftcastle/Comic2-1.jpg

    My friends and I just started working on this, any tips/advice would be appreciated

    Your comic is bad and you should feel bad.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SpKQFAkQfnA

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Thank you, so much. I needed that.

    "YOU had to drag SPINES into this!"

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    HijiNKS Ensue
    geek comic
    www.hijinksensue.com

    [SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]
  • MKRMKR Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Joel has only been here for a little over a month and he's already one of my favorite AC posters.

    :^:

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  • hijinksensuehijinksensue Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    MKR wrote: »
    Joel has only been here for a little over a month and he's already one of my favorite AC posters.

    :^:
    I do what I can. I'm in good company.

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    HijiNKS Ensue
    geek comic
    www.hijinksensue.com

    [SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]
  • GodfatherGodfather Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    I didn't know Joel lived in Dallas.

    That's cool I guess.

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  • multimoogmultimoog Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Baldorage wrote: »
    wow, thanks guys, great feedback, we got the dildo tip, someones not wearing pants apparently, great overall. I'll keep all this in mind

    See, Moog and I should start a sitcom.

    ABSOLUTELY!

    Gosh, MT, we're supposed to meet the girls at the movies in an hour! But my boss is coming for dinner tonight!

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  • Stupid Mr Whoopsie NameStupid Mr Whoopsie Name Registered User, ClubPA regular
    edited July 2007
    Zeromus wrote: »
    I actually don't really mind how the actual characters are drawn, but the backgrounds are terrible, the panel sequencing is hard to follow, and the joke isn't very funny.

    So, draw from anatomy books, lols.

    I wonder if Ramius can rig up an post auto-reply that if a member has under 10 posts and is making their first thread in the AC with a link, it'll automatically tell them to "Study Anatomy/Draw from Life"

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  • UncleSamUncleSam Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Invite the boss to the movies! His delicate sensibilities are offended by the crude movie choice, but the night is saved when one of the girls take a liking to the boss! It's just another hilarity-packed episode of "The AC!" See it tonight, at 6 Central on the WB!

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  • MKRMKR Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Zeromus wrote: »
    I actually don't really mind how the actual characters are drawn, but the backgrounds are terrible, the panel sequencing is hard to follow, and the joke isn't very funny.

    So, draw from anatomy books, lols.

    I wonder if Ramius can rig up an post auto-reply that if a member has under 10 posts and is making their first thread in the AC with a link, it'll automatically tell them to "Study Anatomy/Draw from Life"

    http://forums.penny-arcade.com/forumdisplay.php?f=23

    I would support it. :D

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  • core tacticcore tactic Registered User regular
    edited July 2007
    Thank you, so much. I needed that.

    "YOU had to drag SPINES into this!"

    I just realized that spine can be re-arranged into penis.

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