Just thought I'd yelp a bit and share my comic with everyone. This is my second go with this concept. The first attempt, back in 2010, was not to my liking... I greatly appreciate you taking the time to check it out.
I agree with kochi. You can just tone down some hatching in there.
I'd also watch your speech bubbles. Personally I think it always works better if the text in general flows downwards so, long panels with one person talking (like the Thai restaurant girl) I may reduce the text so you didn't have that upwards swing in the bubbles. We read left right, top to bottom, and we sorta tend to look for that hierarchy in the overall structure. If the next sentence is above the previous, I won't not understand but its not really the best flow, either.
But yeah the pages look pretty rad, hope you keep posting them!
Kochikens - Thanks. Yes, I tend to agree with you. It was supposed to come off as a tongue-in-cheek gag that he has such a boyish face, yet is ripped underneath his clothes. I also think I was trying to get a real wet, defined look on his body. And I have a bad habit of over doing it with the lines. But you're right... the face should show that as well. Good call.
Iruka - I do overdo it. Like I stated above, it is a habit. Something about white space and my need to fill it all up. I will try to correct that.
I was hoping that the speech balloons melding into one another would form a good trail to follow, but you make a very good point. I was a bit worried about the amount of text I had. I was trying to be a bit creative with it. I understand that it may not work for everyone. Another thing to remember for the future, thank you.
Oh, and I have no idea who Andrew Hussie is. Sorry. If it's an in-joke, it went right over my head.
Thanks everyone for checking it out and the feedback. It is greatly appreciated.
It's just a guy who used to post here who has an inking style eerily similar to your own. Plus, a habit of overemphasising muscular male anatomy, though he does it for laughs.
Keep being creative with your bubbles, It can add a lot to the comic. I recommend loosening up with the standard shape and size of the bubbles themselves to break it up. You don't want a lot of text in one place, but you can make interesting implications if you overfill a balloon and fade out the text and other such effects. Trying to be flexible while keeping everything legible is indeed a challenge, but for the most part you are doing fine.
Iruka - Hmmm, I do see some slight similarities. At least I get the reference now.
I'm pretty much a novice with lettering. It's not really my favorite task to do by any means, but that's a good thing. It forces me to try my hand at all facets of creating a comic. Hopefully the more I practice, the more comfortable and confident I can become. Thank you very much for the tips and words of encouragement.
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My first reaction as well.
The shower scene is what clinched it for me
but his head does not look like it belongs on his torso when he's shirtless. The levels of detail are too different.
I'd also watch your speech bubbles. Personally I think it always works better if the text in general flows downwards so, long panels with one person talking (like the Thai restaurant girl) I may reduce the text so you didn't have that upwards swing in the bubbles. We read left right, top to bottom, and we sorta tend to look for that hierarchy in the overall structure. If the next sentence is above the previous, I won't not understand but its not really the best flow, either.
But yeah the pages look pretty rad, hope you keep posting them!
Godfather - No.
Forbe! - Okay...
NakedZergling - Thank you very much.
NathanielFletche - Thanks! You are too kind.
Fugitive - Heh. Whatever works for you.
McGibs - ...
Kochikens - Thanks. Yes, I tend to agree with you. It was supposed to come off as a tongue-in-cheek gag that he has such a boyish face, yet is ripped underneath his clothes. I also think I was trying to get a real wet, defined look on his body. And I have a bad habit of over doing it with the lines. But you're right... the face should show that as well. Good call.
Iruka - I do overdo it. Like I stated above, it is a habit. Something about white space and my need to fill it all up. I will try to correct that.
I was hoping that the speech balloons melding into one another would form a good trail to follow, but you make a very good point. I was a bit worried about the amount of text I had. I was trying to be a bit creative with it. I understand that it may not work for everyone. Another thing to remember for the future, thank you.
Oh, and I have no idea who Andrew Hussie is. Sorry. If it's an in-joke, it went right over my head.
Thanks everyone for checking it out and the feedback. It is greatly appreciated.
- Kieran
http://www.junkfoodfighter.com
Keep being creative with your bubbles, It can add a lot to the comic. I recommend loosening up with the standard shape and size of the bubbles themselves to break it up. You don't want a lot of text in one place, but you can make interesting implications if you overfill a balloon and fade out the text and other such effects. Trying to be flexible while keeping everything legible is indeed a challenge, but for the most part you are doing fine.
My anatomy for this project is done in jest, in a humorous way. Nothing serious, just fun.
http://www.junkfoodfighter.com
I'm pretty much a novice with lettering. It's not really my favorite task to do by any means, but that's a good thing. It forces me to try my hand at all facets of creating a comic. Hopefully the more I practice, the more comfortable and confident I can become. Thank you very much for the tips and words of encouragement.
- Kieran
http://www.junkfoodfighter.com
- Kieran
http://www.junkfoodfighter.com
- Kieran
http://www.junkfoodfighter.com