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My first ever Webcomic! : D
Kennstan
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Lately I have binged on all this penny arcade, and during E3 decided that I will start making a webcomic! so here is my first one.
cheers! ; D
cheers! ; D
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Kennstan, what exactly do you want from the Artist's Forum? This is a magical place that can have a wide range of uses for artists. If you are looking to just distribute your comics to share, that might be something for the doodle thread (but not necessarily your own thread). If you want criticism, typically we will need to know your goals, long term development ideas, and many, many more examples!
Generally it isn't a place to get backslaps, but one for constructive criticism. Let us know your goals, take the responses you get seriously and authentically, and there's a lot you can get from here to grow and develop!
Art wise, you could be worse off. I'd be interested in seeing any other art you have, as its just not enough to go on.
Comic wise, you'll probably have to try a little harder than two dudes on a gradient background talking about video games in three panels. It has been done to death, and you probably have something more interesting to say if you think about it.
Theres a comic masterpost here: http://forums.penny-arcade.com/discussion/196619/comic-resources-masterpost#latest
ENC, sorry and thanks hahaha you are totally right!
Iruka, yeah I agree that I need to up my game but I felt like it was good to take that first step as opposed to thinking about how to be different right? IDK id love to hear what you have to say about expanding horizons. Im looking through your master post right now and it is a great resource.
cB557, yeah its not the most interesting thing in the world. Can you tell me how you would improve it?
Golden yak, Thanks so much ; D
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#2 Never punch down.
#3 Don't burn yourself out or beat yourself up trying to nail a joke or do a narrative. Writing is hard and there are plenty of talented writers and artist who've hammered out great work after dumping draft after draft.
#4 Have fun
#5 Saw your tumblr, wish I were as good as you.
http://www.fallout3nexus.com/downloads/file.php?id=16534
In terms of format, it also pretty much follows the PA formula, try shaking it up with, say maybe work in a 9 panel grid, or a 4 panel format etc. just try getting away from everything that screams Penny Arcade or generic webcomic.
In terms of writing, do you really want to make another "2 gamer dudes duke it out" strip? Shake that up as well, does it have to have consistent characters? What if it was another universe than ours? etc. etc.
M3nace, I agree that its 3 panels and two guys is cliche. Thanks for trying to get me to inject my own style into it but as any artist is aware when you have a professional style, most likely you can get very sick of it after working in that way for 9 hours a day : D
Plus being an artist is learning and studying others, I guess this was an attempt if I could pull this style off and I think I did a fair job
Do you have 2-4 other comic samples you can show us so we can give some decent feedback? A one-off comic doesn't really give us much room to go beyond what has been stated with the backgrounds and general staleness of the idea (the two guys talk about games concept is pretty well done, though adding your own ownership to the idea can make it fresh again).
You also mispelled "consoles". The lone comma at the end of the bubble in the 2nd panel is pretty awkward - I would have just used a period, or no punctuation at all.
Beyond what you've already heard in this thread, I'd suggest that you try to spend a bit more time with the text and the bubbles. If you're not sure how to handle a certain text/bubble scenario, check out polished, professional comics and see what they do there, and how they handle the flow of text.
@Mightyhog That is a great idea!!
@Enc Yeah I guess you are right one strip isnt enough :0 thanks
@NightDragon Thanks, this is the kinda stuff i love to get critiqued on!
Why wouldn't you use the digital skills displayed in the landscapes in the comic? It like entering a street race with a Kia when you have a Lamborghini sitting in the garage.
I'm BEGGING you to incorporate your landscape style into your comics and give us something fresh!!! Comics don't have to be just 2 dudes talking about video games...its been done. A lot.
This is a more constructive version of your post.
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Your landscapes are BEAUTIFUL!
Are you more comfortable painting landscapes rather than people?
I think there must be some disconnect in how you approach your landscapes vs how you approach the comic, and im not sure there needs to be.
You clearly have an understanding of composition, and lighting, and how to use the program to get a painted look, which is far more aesthetically pleasing than the gradient background used in the comic.
If you could find a way incorporate your landscape approach into your comic approach i think you would have something really interesting going on. I don't want to discourage people from trying stuff, so again im sorry. I really want to see what you do next.
@Prospicience yeah maybe someday haha I couldnt write something that involved ; D
Thought you may find it helpful.
Gotta start somewhere right?! Never know until you've tried. Do or do not, there is no try. Those who don't jump will never fly. Etc, etc
You could always just start with a landscape and create a story from there if you want to give it a go. There's so much detail in your landscapes I feel like your imagination could run wild with the possibilities.
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