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nakirush
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I'm just starting to learn how to use the watercolor brush in Corel Painter. This is the second piece I've colored with it. All comments and critiques are more than appreciated. Thank you.
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Also, what are the random swirlies?
You're using about 4x the space you really need.
Excuses/explanation-
What would you recommend I do? I am completely open to suggestions here. Thanks.
Only nit pick is that the vines aren't thick or intimidating enough and that bit of vine that is white annoys me. Keep the vines in the frame as a whole. The signature also unnecessary because it doesn't contribute to the piece.
Graphic design is art that is done for accomplishing specific purpose in mind that is governed by rules that are far more restrictive then normal painting/drawing/sculpture stuff(artwork). The text, framing method,size and crispness of the piece remind me of a broadside (ancestor of the poster).
"I was born; six gun in my hand; behind the gun; I make my final stand"~Bad Company
Dude looks way too calm, like he's chatting in a quippy manner while about to cast a spell or something.
The big hand looks off. Giant chubby finger, awkward (line value? Is that what they call it?) between the fingers... like you just kind of added them later... Hand itself may be a bit too thin.. almost looks like half a foot.
I'm not sure where your light source is... the shadow on the shirt and the shadow on the leg just seem a bit off to me...
May be better to put the guy closer to the center so that your eye is drawn more towards him. Right now the eye is drawn to the white space above and in front of him... he, the hand, and the tentacles basically make for the sides of a frame.
Aaand... his hair seems to be partly tentacles, as its curled in multiple directions.
Clever, though.
Agreed, he doesn't quite look like he's in danger, or there's any threat, which I think downplays what you're trying to get across with the tentacles.
uhhhhhh
no
edit: also, NU, you're wrong about graphic design not being art.
Phonehand and Manonvon:
Read more carefully, I clarified what I was trying to say.
I'm just saying the OP's piece doesn't really fit the traditional standards of normal artwork, as in the average painting or drawing that's posted in here.
I never said it wasn't art, just said the standards for graphic design and for normal artwork is different and that I disagree with Tam's opinion on the compostion because the piece has graphic design elements in it.
Also, I disagree that graphic design has more rules than "art" - just because you have more freedom to break the rules when producing a work of art doesn't mean those rules don't exist (or that you should be aware of them).
Aesthetics - in both art and design - is just a complex system built from the interactions between basic rules.
nakirush: The guy dangling is looking off to the left when the tentacles are coming from below right - it's almost like there's something more interesting happening off page. You could do with having extra tentacles curving in from the bottom right to the top left or just making him look at what he should really be interested in! Also, this might just be me, but his centre of gravity seems a little off, he could do with being tilted slightly anti-clockwise.
which is exactly what I was trying to say. If only words had the same ability to convey meaning then perhaps I could've got my point across.
i love listening to people who don't know what the fuck they're talking about dig themselves even deeper holes.
i forgot how absolutely entertaining pa:ac was
It still seems like you're saying it's art, but not arty enough to be called art, so we should call it graphic design instead. You haven't suitably explained why graphic design is distinct from art other than "it has more rules." Every art form has its own set of rules.
Edit: Replace "you" with NU.
I get what you're trying to do, but in those ads the guy is never really walking on a white void. There is usually some sort of subtle gradient or some a soft grainy texture. Use a gray to white gradient or something, it's gonna help fill out that white space without breaking the effect you're trying to create.
Also, I'm sorry, I have to say something:
If I make a sculpture of Homer Simpson in the pose of Rodan's Thinker and placed it in a museum with the specific purpose of promoting the Simpsons Movie.... how is this restrictive? I think your views on graphic design are very 1980's.
I find the way that the vines begin at the bottom to be troublesome. You really don't need the white borders around them when they intersect. I'd suggest removing those.
I am honestly not sure if there is too much negative space there. I like it but I think it just might be a little too much.
I disagree about making the tentacles more 3d- in fact i would make them even more abstract by removing the white breaks. I wouldn't have that one particular tentacle go right across the page though. It cuts up the image. Curling it up like the others would give it more flow.
And the guy looks like he's talking AT that one tentacle pointed at his face.
Like he is saying "Hey don't forget you promised we could cuddle after."
Also it looks like he is being rescued from hair... especially because the dudes hair looks exactly like the tentacles. The tentacles weight/motion also primarily going away from him (left and up) which makes them not seem all that menacing.
It's hard to tell because the image is so large but I think it would look a little more balanced if the dude and hand were moved a little bit up and a little to the left.
Lastly there is nothing that looks to me like he's being pulled away from danger, it could just as easily be the giant hand placing him there. I'd suggest a pose change, especially the arms... if he was in with the hairntacles I don't think he would have his hands out and down like he was on all fours or something before he got picked up.
Also his front ankle looks severely sprained.