It seems like you're bolding way too many words there, partner.
Nah, I don't think so. I think modern comics don't bold enough words. I think it helps the aesthetic quality of the balloons.
Did you decide which words to bold, or the writer? 'Cos the writer for Penny and Aggie includes what's meant to be bolded with the script when he sends it to the artist.
Also, this is kind of minor, but why the stomach of the girl (on the far right) on the cover bulge out the way it does?
Did you decide which words to bold, or the writer? 'Cos the writer for Penny and Aggie includes what's meant to be bolded with the script when he sends it to the artist.
Kev sometimes underlines words in the script that should be emphasized, but when I'm lettering I decide which words to make bold based on which words I think deserve more emphasis when I read the dialogue to myself.
Also, this is kind of minor, but why the stomach of the girl (on the far right) on the cover bulge out the way it does?
Preggers. We meet that character later on in the story.
Every page had a laugh in it for me ^^ Solid work.
And I'm not bothered by the more bolding. What's bothering me is that there's sometime a mannequin-look to the people and a bit too big heads.
But that probably doesn't count if the comic is entertaining ^^
I'd agree as well. Bold should be used only for words that demand the emphasis, and yet you've got three or more bolded words in every single balloon. As of right now it looks like you're using it for the aesthetic rather than the function.
I liked it all, it was very nice! The only part that threw me off was that the girls in general are poor. THey didn't match the skill level of the rest of the art, they where not attractive.
I liked it a lot, but straight line art for this type of comic can get confusing. It's a little too difficult to figure out what's going on in some of the more complex panels. I'd suggest either coloring it(preferred), or turning it into gray-scale.
I gotta disagree, I really enjoy your ink style. The panels are quite crisp and they read well. In the Busy one's it isn't hard to find where to go and if you don't color it, you'll save a butt-load (actual U.S. measurement) on printing. I usually don't bother with 2 color comicbooks but yours has a cleaner feel and isn't gritty messy like so many of them.
Facial expressions are really good, but Stu starts to get a little stale as you move through, mix it up al little more.
Every now and then the women get a bit of a dude feel, but ithey seem more down to earth, a sans slut sorta deal. With the pointy boobs and slight bob hair-do she gets a bit of a 50's housewife feel at time. They aren't so manly as they are over-developed. I don't know how old everyone is in here, but she's built like a 30 year old woman, not a young lady. I haven't seen a girl wear pants that high in a long time also.
I really enjoyed this, good luck in the future. What's your ink process? It really looks great.
not a big fan of the bolding pattern either.. if you read it literally using these as cues it makes the characters seem 'slow' as the dialog comes off as being stuttered. i find it more distracting than anything
otherwise great art and writing nice to some some professional stuff around here
Well, I talked it over with the writer, and he said that although he never noticed the bold words before, after I mentioned it he thought it might be a little too much. So I've agreed to pull it back a bit.
Well, I talked it over with the writer, and he said that although he never noticed the bold words before, after I mentioned it he thought it might be a little too much. So I've agreed to pull it back a bit.
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I agree with a lot that's been already said, so I won't repeat it.
I think that the pregnant girl, though, needs some "tummy work". Her stomach bump should extend down farther - it doesn't make sense that it just cuts off at her pants, at the hip. At first, I honestly thought you were just drawing a girl with fat on her stomach to throw in some character diversity.
Also, the place where her leg connects to her hip (right side of page) seems way too low.
This is so awesome. I'm being entirely serious, I like everything about. Except for the girls, Frank said that allready, not pretty enough.
Heh, the dad reminds me of Bruce Campbell...he is so awesome.
The Dad's a fantastic character. I love the relationship between him and the son.
In fact, the characterization is quite good. I have nothing to add on the writing front.
The art does almost everything it needs to - it's expressive, consistent, and detailed.
It could, however, do with more depth. The line thickness is a good start, but it could really use some greys to round everything out and give a better sense of depth.
Edit: In fact, the shading on "Flight of the Living Dead" is exactly what I'm talking about. Take these clean lines and add a bit of the sense of depth from your other one.
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Your art is awsome! How do you ink? Traditional? Digital?
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The writing is solid and the art is good. As for the bolds, I tend to read fast so I've only ever noticed them in an aesthetic manner.
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Digital inking is easy. You just start by increasing the size of the pencils to about 2 times it's current (if it's not already huge), scan it in and add another layer for the inks, then just zoom in a million times, wich gives some incredible accuracy with the lines, then zoom back out and shrink it to it's publishing size.
Either way, the inking is already great, so whatever. Really funny (surprisingly) and the art is very well done (even more surprisingly). Also, I really like the Flight of the Living Dead as well.
Digital inking is easy. You just start by increasing the size of the pencils to about 2 times it's current (if it's not already huge), scan it in and add another layer for the inks, then just zoom in a million times, wich gives some incredible accuracy with the lines, then zoom back out and shrink it to it's publishing size.
The thing is, I was having a lot of trouble getting any kind of control with my lines. It seemed like I had to draw a line about three or four times before I got one I was happy with. Plus, I just really love inking on paper. There's something about making thick-to-thin lines with a brush that I look forward to every time I make a new page.
Either way, the inking is already great, so whatever. Really funny (surprisingly) and the art is very well done (even more surprisingly). Also, I really like the Flight of the Living Dead as well.
I enjoyed your style of inking a lot, as well as keeping all the characters simplistic to fit the comic medium, but detailed enough to be believable. The writing is solid and I never once felt bored with the conversations between father and son.
My favorite line was "Get funky!" at the very end before he got beat up. Classic.
Very clean and very nice. The only crit I have is your hair looks like helmets in every panel. Having highlights in them is a good thing, but having the white go all the way around makes it look like reflective metal.
Nice work though, the expression is the 2nd to last panel is great.
Heh. People seem to dislike my way of drawing hair in The Sundays, but I really like it. This is the first comic I've ever used it in, and I think it gives a certain style to the book. The writer likes it too.
Thanks for the critique, though.
This page took me too long to ink because of Flight of the Living Dead, but now the comic is on hiatus until I get this issue done. This double-page spread is one of the hardest things I've ever had to do, and I worked my ass off on making it good, so I'm probably prouder of this page than anything I've ever done. That being said, please critique the shit out of it.
Also, if you click on this image, you'll get a super huge, uncompressed version of it. For anyone that wants to zoom way in and point out the mistakes I've made.
Either way, the inking is already great, so whatever. Really funny (surprisingly) and the art is very well done (even more surprisingly). Also, I really like the Flight of the Living Dead as well.
Thanks! But... why is it surprising?
Oh, no, I was saying it's surprising because the comics we normally get are rubbish. Yours are some of best I've read, and I actually plan to purchase them if I get the chance.
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In the last word bubble on the last panel on page six (not including the cover), it's not pointing to the Stu.
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Crap! You're right, thanks. I'll fix that.
Nah, I don't think so. I think modern comics don't bold enough words. I think it helps the aesthetic quality of the balloons.
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Also, this is kind of minor, but why the stomach of the girl (on the far right) on the cover bulge out the way it does?
Kev sometimes underlines words in the script that should be emphasized, but when I'm lettering I decide which words to make bold based on which words I think deserve more emphasis when I read the dialogue to myself.
Preggers. We meet that character later on in the story.
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And I'm not bothered by the more bolding. What's bothering me is that there's sometime a mannequin-look to the people and a bit too big heads.
But that probably doesn't count if the comic is entertaining ^^
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It honestly makes it very difficult to read.
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Facial expressions are really good, but Stu starts to get a little stale as you move through, mix it up al little more.
Every now and then the women get a bit of a dude feel, but ithey seem more down to earth, a sans slut sorta deal. With the pointy boobs and slight bob hair-do she gets a bit of a 50's housewife feel at time. They aren't so manly as they are over-developed. I don't know how old everyone is in here, but she's built like a 30 year old woman, not a young lady. I haven't seen a girl wear pants that high in a long time also.
I really enjoyed this, good luck in the future. What's your ink process? It really looks great.
otherwise great art and writing nice to some some professional stuff around here
I read it all, very appealing.
I really like the art, it looks quite professional and the writing flows very nicely.
I want to read more damnit.
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I agree with a lot that's been already said, so I won't repeat it.
I think that the pregnant girl, though, needs some "tummy work". Her stomach bump should extend down farther - it doesn't make sense that it just cuts off at her pants, at the hip. At first, I honestly thought you were just drawing a girl with fat on her stomach to throw in some character diversity.
Also, the place where her leg connects to her hip (right side of page) seems way too low.
Pretty good art, aside from that! Great inks.
The... the Chick tract guy? I'm going to go cry now.
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Heh, the dad reminds me of Bruce Campbell...he is so awesome.
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In fact, the characterization is quite good. I have nothing to add on the writing front.
The art does almost everything it needs to - it's expressive, consistent, and detailed.
It could, however, do with more depth. The line thickness is a good start, but it could really use some greys to round everything out and give a better sense of depth.
Edit: In fact, the shading on "Flight of the Living Dead" is exactly what I'm talking about. Take these clean lines and add a bit of the sense of depth from your other one.
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Thanks dude. Traditional, a Kolinsky #1 sable brush with Dr. Martin Black Star ink for the characters, Micron pens for the backgrounds.
I've tried digital inking, and I just can't get the hang of it.
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Either way, the inking is already great, so whatever. Really funny (surprisingly) and the art is very well done (even more surprisingly). Also, I really like the Flight of the Living Dead as well.
The thing is, I was having a lot of trouble getting any kind of control with my lines. It seemed like I had to draw a line about three or four times before I got one I was happy with. Plus, I just really love inking on paper. There's something about making thick-to-thin lines with a brush that I look forward to every time I make a new page.
Thanks! But... why is it surprising?
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My favorite line was "Get funky!" at the very end before he got beat up. Classic.
I can't get the hang of it either. That zooming in makes me into a perfectionist.
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Nice work though, the expression is the 2nd to last panel is great.
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Thanks for the critique, though.
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(or did you just bump up the brightness and hide the lighter lines?)
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This page took me too long to ink because of Flight of the Living Dead, but now the comic is on hiatus until I get this issue done. This double-page spread is one of the hardest things I've ever had to do, and I worked my ass off on making it good, so I'm probably prouder of this page than anything I've ever done. That being said, please critique the shit out of it.
Also, if you click on this image, you'll get a super huge, uncompressed version of it. For anyone that wants to zoom way in and point out the mistakes I've made.
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Oh, no, I was saying it's surprising because the comics we normally get are rubbish. Yours are some of best I've read, and I actually plan to purchase them if I get the chance.
Very rare occurence with my cheap ass!