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New Desktop I made (NSFW) H-scroll
Rye
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Critique if you want. I was just bored and my new laptop didn't have a desktop, so I made one for myself. Since I'm going to have to look at this a lot, I used some references, so I hope it doesn't look too terrible.
(A friend wanted a copy and asked me to sign it -_-. Apologies if it looks arrogant)
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http://www.dynamit.us/game/desktop.jpg
(A friend wanted a copy and asked me to sign it -_-. Apologies if it looks arrogant)
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http://www.dynamit.us/game/desktop.jpg
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Places you've shaded/highlighted on the body generally seem to be good, but proportion is the main thing that needs work in this piece, I think. Body seems a little "squished" vertically, the length of the torso, size of the head and width of the arms are the main things that jump out at me. The jawline seems too acute of an angle, and/or proceeding too far back on the head.
I like how you did the hair, though.
My original concept for the hair was so much more confusing and crappy looking... Instead I just painted a few splotches and refined from there till i had what I have now.
Thanks for the comment, and I'll probably have an update in the near future.
The way the hair is more defined at the top and becomes less defined at the bottom. Maybe I didn't pull it off well if it seems unintentional.
Again, thanks for te comment
I made an update to the pic:
Just in case you can't tell, I adjusted the arms, general boy size, jawline acuteness, sharpness of details etc.
Thanks a lot for the critiques, people. I really couldn't notice these things whenI was working. Now that I see my changes, the original looks SO much more distorted
Melding into the background is fine, just make sure it's not giving off a "blotched" effect. Fortunately, you smoothed this problem out in this recent update, so as long as you figured it out i'm a happy camper.
If you're convinced the head is ACTUALLY too large, I'll probably shrink it a bit.
I'm not very good at explaining ideas you see.
Interesting idea godfather. It is a little late tho. Plus, I'm not into smoking. I likes the women, but not so much the smoking.
I'm pretty satisfied with it as is for now. I'll probably get bored and make a new one in a few months. It keeps me doing art for art's sake and not just for class.
Naw, you're right. The length of the shoulders is making the head look EXTRA big. Really, the head is just too big, but the shoulders exaggerate it. Also, the neck is either too thick or coming from her chin too early. I'm not sure, but something about it doesn't feel right.
Good drawing overall though. I like it.
I was just watching Kill Bill Vol. 2 on TV and there was a scene with some black dude puffin' some out with some really snazzy effects.
and the piece as a whole:
I think, now that I look at it, the top lip is much too large and not protruding enough. It's very slight, but it causes a domino effect on the other features. I'll look into it soon... gotta do more school art first. I just think it's funny that the abstract background stuff hasn't gotten any crits because there's a figure in the foreground.
Well, the figure is offset to the right, but it still dominates the whole scene by being the lightest and in the foreground. With a human figure that dominates that much, it's hard to notice the background. Besides... When there is something wrong with an art piece, it usually gets the viewer's attention first.