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sketchy62

hi everyone!
im tryin to make some comics
but its alot harder than i thought
and most of time people dont get the joke LOL
but ill keep on tryin
hope you guys enjoy my work.
and please feel free to crit me 8-)

heres the 1st one:
i tried to make it like a fps scenerio + bad luck for newbs

Synergy

Wait....What?D:

Creambun 007

Loved it. Make 60 more.

Awk

your text is too sharp compared to the rest of the comic.

i fall in the category of 'i dont understand this comic' too though

NakedZergling

Awk wrote: »

your text is too sharp compared to the rest of the comic.

i fall in the category of 'i dont understand this comic' too though

whats not to get? i was laughing my ass off. good job!

Crowleston

Your gutters are pretty distracting. You may want to try a solid color.

Mojo_Jojo

Shit has an i.

And I too am in the camp of not getting the joke but aside from the distracting gutters, the art didn't offend any of my senses. So it's half a success.

erisian pope

I'm pretty sure the dude shot at what he thought was an enemy target but it turned out to be a shadow. The shadow is cast by an enemy who's around the corner, and just lobbed a gernade back. Our Hero is about to be blown to smithereens due to his lack of perceptiveness.

It's like you followed me around on any night I played Battlefield 2.

Dammit.

MagicToaster

So your comic is about a guy that walks around with a gun shooting things?

padmeamanda

I don't get it either... the third panel is confusing.

And yes, the text looks weird because it's sharp and the drawing is sketchy. If you're going to leave the drawing at sketchy might as well sketch in the words too.

sketchy62

erisian pope wrote: »

I'm pretty sure the dude shot at what he thought was an enemy target but it turned out to be a shadow. The shadow is cast by an enemy who's around the corner, and just lobbed a gernade back. Our Hero is about to be blown to smithereens due to his lack of perceptiveness.

It's like you followed me around on any night I played Battlefield 2.

Dammit.

your right on the mark.

and i spelled it as shyt cuz it was more friendly then shit. :]

ill change the font to match the artwork next itme

NakedZergling

erisian pope wrote: »

I'm pretty sure the dude shot at what he thought was an enemy target but it turned out to be a shadow. The shadow is cast by an enemy who's around the corner, and just lobbed a gernade back. Our Hero is about to be blown to smithereens due to his lack of perceptiveness.

It's like you followed me around on any night I played Battlefield 2.

Dammit.

oh..wait. i thought i got the joke, but that was when i thought the last panel was a turtle...now i'm confused too

MKR

sketchy62 wrote: »

erisian pope wrote: »

I'm pretty sure the dude shot at what he thought was an enemy target but it turned out to be a shadow. The shadow is cast by an enemy who's around the corner, and just lobbed a gernade back. Our Hero is about to be blown to smithereens due to his lack of perceptiveness.

It's like you followed me around on any night I played Battlefield 2.

Dammit.

your right on the mark.

and i spelled it as shyt cuz it was more friendly then shit. :]

ill change the font to match the artwork next itme

Shit is shyt is shite.

If you're going to use "swear" words, don't try to make them nice unless it adds humor. In this case, it would have added humor if it were an i.

The One Dark Knight

sketchy62 wrote: »

erisian pope wrote: »

I'm pretty sure the dude shot at what he thought was an enemy target but it turned out to be a shadow. The shadow is cast by an enemy who's around the corner, and just lobbed a gernade back. Our Hero is about to be blown to smithereens due to his lack of perceptiveness.

It's like you followed me around on any night I played Battlefield 2.

Dammit.

your right on the mark.

and i spelled it as shyt cuz it was more friendly then shit. :]

ill change the font to match the artwork next itme

You spell shyt Shite, ya shite.

Shyt isn't even a word.

Doctor Pain

what about speeling time, TYME? is that a word?

but this comic, is like, its like SHYT...

Grim Outlook

don't lure me into a thread with the promise of multiple comics!

that shyt don't fly

HugmasterGeneral

Grim Outlook wrote: »

don't lure me into a thread with the promise of multiple comics!

that shyt don't fly

It's spelled flie

sketchy62

i see... didnt think. spelling of shit would cause so much commotion.
ill take note of that :"]
(oops i realized i spelled "please" wrong. dont flame bout that please!)


heres #2

Grifter

MagicToaster

Jesus, that's a bad comic.

NakedZergling

you spelled please wrong.
and raped my mind.

but seriously why is that sperm punching the blob ? kinda violent.

Doctor Pain

thats quite entissing? are we supposed to laugh or fart?

Highlander_77

I hate to say it, but I think a main reason why people don't get your "jokes" is that...well...they're just not funny. Sorry, man. I think maybe you should forget about trying to make a funny comic for the time being and just focus on the drawing. There at least seems to be the promise of potential in that area...the jokes are just a lost cause at this point.

Creambun 007

MagicToaster wrote: »

Jesus, that's a bad comic.

Don't worry, I think He knows...

multimoog

I don't even understand why you'd make them ghosts. Why did you make them ghosts?

What have ghosts ever done to you?

Highlander_77

About that second strip...why ghosts? Why not draw an anthropomorphic PS3 console? And then have a Wiimote come flying in from off-panel and harpoon the PS3 right between the eyes...then show an embarassed looking Sony CEO and President in the last panel playing a Wii, with one saying to the other "I guess I should probably order those replacement wrist straps now..."


Still not very funny....but I'm not trying to write a funny web-comic either, so...

Jandiss

actually highlander that made me laugh alot...maybe im a lil slow tho.

Krazed

Your jokes are lame. When I first started making comics, my jokes were also very lame. Now, my comic makes most people laugh. How? Make jokes about things that everyone can understand and can relate to. Don't make jokes that you must explain. And NEVER complain that people don't get your jokes, if you think that, get back to the drawing board. Just keep going, eventually you may just get a spark and become funny to others besides yourself and a few gamers.

Also, stop bashing the goddamn PS3. It's awesome, and is worth every bit of its price. Needless to say, I got mine without having to pay! Anyway, the games coming out for it are both numerous and great. The 360 has Halo 3 and GoW, (which are both great) big woop.

sketchy62

i love you guys!

all these honest crits... just what i wanted. (seriously)

well im gonna keep at it. since i dont like quitting. im sure sooner or later ill hit GOLD!

bread of wonder

Krazed wrote: »

Also, stop bashing the goddamn PS3. It's awesome, and is worth every bit of its price. Needless to say, I got mine without having to pay! Anyway, the games coming out for it are both numerous and great. The 360 has Halo 3 and GoW, (which are both great) big woop.

This is subjective opinion, and really has no place in a crit. I don't agree with everything that Tycho writes about in PA, but his delivery still makes me laugh.

Krazed

sketchy62 wrote: »

i love you guys!

all these honest crits... just what i wanted. (seriously)

well im gonna keep at it. since i dont like quitting. im sure sooner or later ill hit GOLD!

Thats the spirit. Thats the way I reacted to the painfully honest crits as well. Keep at it, never say no, and you will hit gold, either that or pyrite... But thats still good.