SLAM DUMB! (Basketball Comics)

VladieShark

I thought I should share my new basketball comic strips here, since Penny-Arcade kinda inspired them. Now, my comics are obviously geared toward a completely different audience, so I don't know how many of you guys will care, but hopefully some of you will find some humor in them. Let me know what you think of the comics, drawing and humor wise. Also, if you get a chance to check out the site, and you have some basketball knowledge, let me know what you think of the articles.

Mayday

You
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to understand our rules.

VladieShark

You're right. I totally didn't skim through that section of the forum rules. Although I must say this section of the rule: "However, asking for help on website design/layout is acceptable as long as users are not required to navigate out of the forum to see your site (take a screenshot)" is downright stupid. Is there a worry that the forum traffic will be redirected? People can't critique a site design without actually visiting the site. That's just dumb.

Anyway, if there is a way to delete the thread let me know.

Mayday

Yeah, I'm not sure about it either. I'm not very good with websites anyway, so I don't give a damn about it. As for deleting, are you interested in receiving crits about the art/writing in your comic?

VladieShark

Well, sure. That's why I posted. :-P

DMAC

So put a couple of your strips you'd like feedback on in your original post. That's the "loophole".

VladieShark

Oh ok. I'll get on that. Give me a sec.

Edit: Done. Thanks for helping me out instead of just locking (what most mods would have done on most forums).

bombardier

Well, it's no Hoopz!, that's for sure.

multimoog

I can't comment on the jokes, because I hate basketball. But the art could use some polishing on just about every front - the anatomy needs work (the characters all look stiff and out of proportion), the coloring is really flat (again, especially on the characters) and you could use some work on strengthening both perspective and mechanical drawing (the cop car). You should also work on caricaturing people, since that's what the strip seems to be about.

MagicToaster

I was half expecting this to look like that show "Slam Dunk"... though at least I am greatful it's not about two guys talking about video games.

multimoog

MagicToaster wrote: »

though at least I am greatful it's not about two guys talking about video games.

Yes! (Except for that first strip) This is an incredibly good thing, and I should have mentioned it. Seriously!

Enef

I was totally expecting a Slam Dunk parody that acts like it's super serious and completely mocks the "Competitive sport" genre of comics.

VladieShark

I can't tell if you guys are disappointed or pleased by that. Really, it doesn't matter. Parodying Slam Dunk would be more than a little restrictive/lame, in my opinion. I don't know how much you guys know about basketball, but let's just say there's probably more material (aka: news) to work with every week than even the video game industry can supply. What I'm getting at is that it's a great topic to work with, humor-wise. Definitely better than some cartoon series parody.

beavotron

i really don't understand the last one at all
but it makes me think of the song 99 problems, and now that's stuck in my head

VladieShark

beavotron wrote: »

i really don't understand the last one at all
but it makes me think of the song 99 problems, and now that's stuck in my head

I guess it's a very implied joke...
The joke being that Lebron James was running at 101 mph (with the sweaty exercise clothes and all), and received a ticket despite not being in a car. It's clearly very intelligent humor. :-P

beavotron

VladieShark wrote: »

beavotron wrote: »

i really don't understand the last one at all
but it makes me think of the song 99 problems, and now that's stuck in my head

I guess it's a very implied joke...
The joke being that Lebron James was running at 101 mph (with the sweaty exercise clothes and all), and received a ticket despite not being in a car. It's clearly very intelligent humor. :-P

man i've never been one for intelligent humor
i think that's why i could never appreciate garfield
or baby blues
or blondie
or all of those other intelligent people comics i see in the papers.

multimoog

VladieShark wrote: »

I guess it's a very implied joke...
The joke being that Lebron James was running at 101 mph (with the sweaty exercise clothes and all), and received a ticket despite not being in a car. It's clearly very intelligent humor. :-P

VERY implied. I didn't get that he wasn't supposed to be in a car, I just thought you decided not to show it.

VladieShark

multimoog wrote: »

VERY implied. I didn't get that he wasn't supposed to be in a car, I just thought you decided not to show it.

You know, I'm beginning to think you're right. The first person I showed it to got it right away, but not too many other people have. At first I just thought they were stupid. Oh well. I might get to changing that sometime (Have Lebron saying "Oh come on! I was just jogging!" or something of the sort). Thanks for the response on that.

Mayday

Or you could draw the 3rd panel from far away to show that the only car around is the police car... but then we wouldn't see the sweaty clothes to explain he was jogging.

beavotron

so we've decided that instead of being over my unintelligent head it's just poorly executed?

well that's a relief, i will rest easier tonight sirs, i assure you.

amateurhour

Aww....steve nash is so nice... seriously, he's like the nicest guy in the NBA....

I think they're pretty funny, and I don't follow basketball.

Mangoes

What I think beavo is trying to say is; don't blame the audience for not liking your comic. And don't call your readers stupid.

multimoog

Yeah, what the Cap'n said. Another thing about the last strip - I didn't realize he'd been running because there's no sweat on his forehead in the closeup, he doesn't look tired, and the 'sweatstains' were what I thought was your attempt at cel-shading to give the coloring some variation. So as I said, the whole art area could use a lot of work in general.

onceling

I rarely post in Artist's Corner because I'm useless at anatomy and well, all the good arty stuff.

But I'm making an exception, just think it would be funnier if the "pan out" showed him getting pulled over on the actual basketball court. That would be funny to me :P I have a weird sense of humor though.

Obilex

or even have the first panel shot from the cop's point of view with the radar gun pointed at him. that would clear up any confusion.

VladieShark

beavotron wrote: »

so we've decided that instead of being over my unintelligent head it's just poorly executed?

well that's a relief, i will rest easier tonight sirs, i assure you.

I was being sarcastic when I called it "intelligent humor," poking fun at myself, not you.

As for the 3rd comic, I've got it figured out and will change it when I have time (there are other comics to work on for now). Thanks for the advice on it though.

Kirk

takes it to the hole

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