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Rough draft
piratesauce
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Hey guys, I'm new.
I'm just looking for a bit of input on this rough draft I made. I know, I know, another video game based comic. I'm not trying to compete with the humongous behemoth that is Penny-Arcade (I'm also positive my art and comedy writing is up to par) But I figured this place is probably the best for critique and honest opinion.
Once again, this is a rough draft and hasn't been coloured or cleaned up. I just want to see how I can improve on any aspect in terms of style, writing (even though there isn't much) and how funny it is compared to what most people post on these forums.
I'm just looking for a bit of input on this rough draft I made. I know, I know, another video game based comic. I'm not trying to compete with the humongous behemoth that is Penny-Arcade (I'm also positive my art and comedy writing is up to par) But I figured this place is probably the best for critique and honest opinion.
Once again, this is a rough draft and hasn't been coloured or cleaned up. I just want to see how I can improve on any aspect in terms of style, writing (even though there isn't much) and how funny it is compared to what most people post on these forums.
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Made me smile?
Tighten up those graphics on level 3.
Come on Arden, come on.
Oh, no. Why did you have to make me remember that commercial?
Steam handle: Buckwolfe
I guess it's so people can't force Ezio to kill children. That'd be bad.
Italian?
In terms of the art, you're going to have to develop this a lot more before you can get anything resembling constructive criticism. It's really difficult to see what your inks would look like on top of whatever blue lines you have there.