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Wise man once say: First page of web comic never good. Persist and do better on page 2.
That being said, I would like to hear some of your wisdoms about it.
I've read other threads, made bad attempts at them, and posted in a few.
I don't think it looks awful, at least by my own standards, but who am I to judge my own work?
Anyone who knows me on these forums knows that I will not only accept criticism, but usually act on it inside the given thread. I am prepared to hear anything ... I think.
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That being said, I would like to hear some of your wisdoms about it.
I've read other threads, made bad attempts at them, and posted in a few.
I don't think it looks awful, at least by my own standards, but who am I to judge my own work?
Anyone who knows me on these forums knows that I will not only accept criticism, but usually act on it inside the given thread. I am prepared to hear anything ... I think.
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Also it's kind of hard to tell what is happening in those last few panels, so you may want to try to work on your storyboarding some to more effectively convey what is happening. I guess it's mostly that 3rd to last panel that baffles me.
You've employed the use of some varying angles and perspectives. Unfortunately, the first and last panel are the same angle, and the next two are side angles, followed by some frontal angles. I would suggest just to keep experimenting with them, and to change it up to get some more interesting results.
That 5th panel sticks out as needing more attention to be effective. The background perspective is a little too ruler-perfect and dead on. Try to give your backgrounds a more loose and organic feel like you do your characters. Also the hard light of the door in the distance seems to have no affect on the character in the panel. The character himself is also a bit jarring because the it seems like I should be seeing him from a frontal/slightly side angle, instead of direct front.
The colors look nice and I dig the artwork as a whole so keep pumping out pages and I'll read em.
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Page 2 will be posted some time this weekend when I get time for it.
Shaw Nevada will soon be diagnosed with a disease he can't possibly control. Things go from bad to really bad when an unknown organization marks him and his only brother for death. With no plan, two new friends, and a strange world ahead of him; Shaw seeks to flee his once island city home for a new life.
There, that about sums up what I'm aiming for here. Interesting? Horribly boring drivel? Comment why don't cha! Working on a website for proper comic updates right now too.
So this time, would someone, please comment on this drawing instead of having my topic parade itself into oblivion? I really want to get the problems worked out before I try coloring it. So, go crazy with it, I don't mind at all. I'm going to continue to post artwork in this thread and update it now that I'm not bedridden. :zzz:
This is an old idea I never followed up on back when Bioshock 1 came out. Hellboy would be sent to Rapture to find Andrew Ryan for some reason or another, I had imagined Hellboy fighting a Big Daddy and some splicers, but never got around to drawing it for some reason. I figured it's relevant because Bioshock 2 just came out? I still like the concept. Or maybe you guys don't wanna see old stuff huh?
Recent attempt at drawing in a more cutesy style. Horribly flawed anatomies I'm sure.
See? I knew I'd make mistakes that were borderline generic. Thanks for pointing it out.
the confidence isn't as strong in the cat though, your lines there are somewhat scratchy, making you look uncertain of their placement.
I'd really like to not draw generic anime faces, but I don't really think I have a developed style to do otherwise? Is that a stupid excuse? Also from what I know - its always more important to get the underlying structure right before doing something fancy like coloring. Would adding more detail to the face help it any or is it just superfluous lines? --tried to fix what you mentioned.
quite possibly the worst.
All right! I knew it was horrible! What do you consider a good looking profile face Sir Manonvon?
EDIT: Good looking anime profile face I mean - is there such a thing that exists?
Hey! It's been 6 days since you posted that comment! Time to post something or forever face the cold reality that is my laziness to draw actual from life things! I drew a monster truck my little brother owns. He actually asked me to draw it for him, which was adorable. So I'm like sure, I can draw cars. I gave him the finished sketch and he laughs a little. No comment just slight laughter. He's 13. I'll take that as a laugh of satisfaction, hahaa. Anyway making with the post.
EDIT Quickly - there is a tremendous amount wrong with it. I realize this. Perspective is flawed etc. You can go ahead and list what you think is wrong with it, I probably missed something.
EDIT again before anyone posts new comments - drew some bunnies yesterday at the mall pet shop.
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I'd agree, though, that the perspective is a little off, but otherwise great job.