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some rough musics
Jesler729
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about a week ago i picked up my first medium-quality microphone. Since then I have recorded some pretty rough songs, most of them unfinished, but I am eager to hear some opinions so I am going to post them anyway.
probably my most complete song at this point: http://www.supload.com/listen?s=sazmp5
unfinished, but i like how it's come out so far: updated
another short one, but i'm not sure it needs expanding on: http://www.supload.com/listen?s=NtREJu
very rough: http://www.supload.com/listen?s=Ejspxh
any criticism welcome
Edit 1: met up with a bassist friend of mine, we worked on the song formerly known as "withering" which is now "dead stop". we've decided to form a band, and have a drummer and rhythm guitarist on board.
this one's still unfinished, but we added bass as well as some synth-violin stuff on his effects box. i think it's a lot better: http://www.supload.com/listen?s=wbkOqY (listening to it again, it pretty much sounds like radiohead took a dump on it)
probably my most complete song at this point: http://www.supload.com/listen?s=sazmp5
unfinished, but i like how it's come out so far: updated
another short one, but i'm not sure it needs expanding on: http://www.supload.com/listen?s=NtREJu
very rough: http://www.supload.com/listen?s=Ejspxh
any criticism welcome
Edit 1: met up with a bassist friend of mine, we worked on the song formerly known as "withering" which is now "dead stop". we've decided to form a band, and have a drummer and rhythm guitarist on board.
this one's still unfinished, but we added bass as well as some synth-violin stuff on his effects box. i think it's a lot better: http://www.supload.com/listen?s=wbkOqY (listening to it again, it pretty much sounds like radiohead took a dump on it)
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Song wise, its not my style so I think everything is wrong with it
I also really like the slightly psychedelic ambient sounds you have going on. They compliment your guitar and voice really well, and they never seem stuck on just for the hell of it. A lot of people mess that up.
The biggest thing that your songs need is fleshing out. Bring Back the Pain is good, but the others just seem inconsequential. They might work as part of a larger album, but as they are now there's nothing to stop the listener from just saying 'hmm, that's interesting' and never listening to it again. You could build them up into full songs, or they could also be interesting if they were longer and maybe built towards a climax. In this situation I think a light rhythm section could help. You don't need a full drum set but maybe some simple percussion to keep the beat. And like mes said bass in some form wouldn't hurt.
But keep up the good work. You really have a good start and I'll probably stick Bring Back the Pain in my itunes library. Make sure you update this thread, I want to see where you go with this.
it seems like no matter how i do it i hear more strumming and clicking than actual guitar. what kind of arrangement would you recommend to cut down on this?
food: thanks a lot, i agree with everything you have to say. i have a tendency to start songs and then leave them unfinished indefinitely, so I think I will just be working on songs i've already written for a while. I'm going to make Withering at least two minutes longer and add vocals, so i'll make sure to post that as soon as it's finished
What kind of acoustic are you using?
Ah thank you guys so much! It's a... hanez? or something. i'm not really sure :I
Haha. Do you mean an Ibanez? How do you not know what kind of guitar you play?!?
i guess i can't read the logo. anyways yes, an ibanez aw