Imagine Insanity Web Comic - Critiques Welcome

abzurd

To pass the time between blackouts I've been posting things on the internet. It's not a new phenomenon or anything but I'd like to get some feedback on my work. Here are a few from my site... Just something I've been toying with. Here we go:

Stupid Mr Whoopsie Name

My buddy's band is playing at Gabe's later (Saturday) night.

As for the comics, first and foremost you cannot distort text like that just to make it fit the bubbles. It's killing my eyes and head to read. I like that last comic, I think some of the character designs are pretty solid, but the colors are also too saturated to the point of hurty.

The humor's a little weak but no reason to not keep refining at this point.

Visti

It's distracting that there are tons of little lines drawn outside the frame. Well, enough for me to notice them anyway.

The_Glad_Hatter

squishing text is a no-no.

Also, do you draw these with a mouse?
The lines never really flow. And if you're going for a disconnected grungy type line, it's not working.
I don't see an.. uhm.. Intention in your linework? as if you don't really know where you'll end up when you start drawing an eye. Kinda squiggly?


i like the experience joke, but not the comic. Perhaps show a show a pic of his character while he's talking about it?
Is the fourth panel really even neccessary in that comic? the joke's already over. I'd invest more energy in the 3rd panel.

also, fourth panel first comic, they have the exact same mouths, only mirrored and slightly rotated.

last comic, i assume that's the main character hanging upside down? didn't recognise him without the bandana since most of the eyes and mouths are interchangeable.

maybe some of these "flaws" (as i see them) are due to the technique. Perhaps show us some pencilwork? maybe then the digitalness won't get in your way?

and one final thing. backgrounds. Perhaps try to suggest a certain location. nobody stands in front of a zebra-wall all day.

edit: don't want to be a debby downer, it's not completely without its merits, but i think there are some simple things normally within your reach (artistically) to take these comics up a notch.

abzurd

Stupid Mister Whoopsie Name wrote: »

My buddy's band is playing at Gabe's later (Saturday) night.

...Is your buddy named Ian, by chance? Or is the band 'Nebula Was'?

Stupid Mr Whoopsie Name

No, it's Devin Kirby-Hansen and the band The Post Mortems.

NakedZergling

i can't read it.

Aumni

I cannot make sense of anything going on in these comics. That hobo with pudding/cardboard wall guy absolutely baffles me.

NibCrom

Stick to colors within the CMYK gamut.

Verom

I'd suggest using less saturated colors for the comics, a couple of these really hurt my eyes cause of the sharp contrasts.

notactualjerk

Since each comic looks a little better then the last, I'm going to guess that these were drawn in the order that they're presented in here.

So anyway, if that's true then you're obviously on the right track! Lookin' good! =P

Mabelma

Your lineart is really messed up, I think you should work on that before you start adding color, also in what are you making this?

JLM-AWP

I just wanted to chime in and say that beyond the text being distorted and hard to read when you try to fit it to the word bubble size, it makes me read it in ways that I don't think I should be. For example, in the WoW interview one, his fine line seems like he's yelling, but I assume you'd be going more for the quiet, dismissive tone I see coming out of that conversation. Just something to think about.