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Where's the Photography Narrative? (NS56K)
Munacra
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I got this approved by the mods, so it's all good. Sorry for the length. 
The assignment was for me to tell a story in 12-15 photographs. I'm kind of new to photography and art in general...so it may not have come out spectacularly good or anything. The pictures are from the first one to last, top to bottom. I do have a couple of questions though:
1)Did you get the story, or was there anything that threw you off? Was it a good idea to begin with? Was the sequence of the pictures ok, or should some be moved around to tell the story a little bit more clear? Maybe added since I tried to tell the story in as few pictures as I could so I would not be tempted to add any unnecessary bits to the narrative as a whole.
2)Tips on the photography technique? Composition, framing, etc? I could really use a lot of help here. First time I ever used something more than the one I use to take myspace pictures. :oops:
3)comments, help, whatever?
The assignment was for me to tell a story in 12-15 photographs. I'm kind of new to photography and art in general...so it may not have come out spectacularly good or anything. The pictures are from the first one to last, top to bottom. I do have a couple of questions though:
1)Did you get the story, or was there anything that threw you off? Was it a good idea to begin with? Was the sequence of the pictures ok, or should some be moved around to tell the story a little bit more clear? Maybe added since I tried to tell the story in as few pictures as I could so I would not be tempted to add any unnecessary bits to the narrative as a whole.
2)Tips on the photography technique? Composition, framing, etc? I could really use a lot of help here. First time I ever used something more than the one I use to take myspace pictures. :oops:
3)comments, help, whatever?
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Cool project though.
As for the story, I get it. The action shots are great, especially (excluding the posing of Waldo in the one with the fence and stairs, heh). My only problem was that it's kind of hard to see if she's leaving the note or picking it up to read. I had to go back and see that the note wasn't on his back beforehand.
As for the shots, you've got a lot that suffer from motion blur, and your second one is out of focus. Motion blur is okay for the moving figures, but in a lot of them, the entire shot suffers from it (shaky hands, instead of your subjects moving).
Lastly, 'bury.'
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Damn I did misspell "bury". Hope the TWB guys don't find out.
*Slinks back to TWB*
(I like the first photos, but in the middle they get all blurry, and the one with Waldo running down the stairs seems very static. Try using a tripod or something. Aside from that, it's a funny story. Me likes.)
EDIT: You could also have done better with a proper fight-scene shot.
Also there feels like a pretty large gap between the shot of the waldo book and the one where she's chasing him. I want to see some kind of recognition that she's spotted him and he knows it. Or something.
Great work!
I really liked it, but second the comments on the blurry. Cool stuff though.
Thanks for all your critiques.