Looking for comic feedback

plufim

I'm wary to post this, as I know most of those who post webcomics are sitewhoring. I am not though, I am geniunely looking for any critisms or suggestions for how I can make my comic better. I've decided to go with my last three here.


I'm pretty happy with this one, although what the hell I was thinking with Zelda's hand I will never know, and the Ms Pacman panel looks awful.


Seriously messed up the faces on panel 4, and I'm certain the punchline could have been delivered far better.


Kinda happy with the simple art in the middle panels, although I'm not sure the way I coloured the lineart light grey really gives the illusion of movement.

So, any toughts? I'm particularly interested in any feedback re: colour selection (as it's something I'm never quite confident in), but anything else will certainly be welcome.

Smooth Lou

I am NOT a graphic artist, and cannot help you in that aspect, but as a person with a high HQ (hilarity quotient), the jokes in here are a bit rough around the edges. You have good ideas for the comedy to flow, but the delivery lacks passion and timing. When you work on the shadowing and the lines, etc., don't forget that you need to keep these things funny in as few words as possible.

You can PM me if you would like some pointers as I don't want this to get off topic.